Little Billy
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Comment from bowls
What a poignant poem. It was really lovely, and a beautiful tribute to your father. I love that line "If I was his dad I would tell him to run". So many young men came up here to Canada to avoid Viet Nam. They went on living. Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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What a poignant poem. It was really lovely, and a beautiful tribute to your father. I love that line "If I was his dad I would tell him to run". So many young men came up here to Canada to avoid Viet Nam. They went on living. Beautifully written.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jinxiegal
Great poem, the theme is really moving and sentimental. Only two things to point out: the fourth stanza was a little more confusing to read, maybe try re-wording it. Also, the "G" in "god" (when referring to the Christian God) should be capitalized. Other than that, I thought your poem was very stirring and beautiful. Marvelous job.
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Great poem, the theme is really moving and sentimental. Only two things to point out: the fourth stanza was a little more confusing to read, maybe try re-wording it. Also, the "G" in "god" (when referring to the Christian God) should be capitalized. Other than that, I thought your poem was very stirring and beautiful. Marvelous job.
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Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
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ok ill look at the fourth stanza. God was fixed. thank you
Comment from Gungalo
A beautiful and loving tribute done up in a bow of love. Your words are so heartfelt and ring true. Be proud and I am sure he knows and loves you too.
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A beautiful and loving tribute done up in a bow of love. Your words are so heartfelt and ring true. Be proud and I am sure he knows and loves you too.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for this kind review
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You deserved it poet,that is beautiful!!!
Comment from nucciwriter21
Great rhyme poem. It flowed smoothly from each verse to the next and instantly drew the reader in. I like the emotional attachment you bring into the piece, making the reader automatically feel they know who this soldier was. Great job!
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Great rhyme poem. It flowed smoothly from each verse to the next and instantly drew the reader in. I like the emotional attachment you bring into the piece, making the reader automatically feel they know who this soldier was. Great job!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2010
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thank you for the kind review
Comment from Pili Pubul
A very meaningful and loving poem about your father. Good style and powerful imagery of the horrors of war and those left behind.
this is my father whom I never met
his name is on a wall a Vietnam Vet
fought for his country a really great man
a father to be but the world had another plan
I see his picture he was very young
a life that had barely begun
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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A very meaningful and loving poem about your father. Good style and powerful imagery of the horrors of war and those left behind.
this is my father whom I never met
his name is on a wall a Vietnam Vet
fought for his country a really great man
a father to be but the world had another plan
I see his picture he was very young
a life that had barely begun
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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I'm glad you liked it thanks
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You welcome my friend.
Comment from Bellringer
Your poem of loss comes from the heart and is also well composed. I understand your bitterness for wars like the one in Vietnam; politicians use our young as the spearheads for what is labeled "defending democracy." All the while many take their freedoms for granted. The cure in your closing lines is a simple life with loved ones. Well done. Regards, Hector
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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Your poem of loss comes from the heart and is also well composed. I understand your bitterness for wars like the one in Vietnam; politicians use our young as the spearheads for what is labeled "defending democracy." All the while many take their freedoms for granted. The cure in your closing lines is a simple life with loved ones. Well done. Regards, Hector
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
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thank you
Comment from Jenn Starr
Hi hon- so sad, I'm so sorry you never got to meet him! He was so young!!!! So many young men- fathers/sons/loves were unnecessarily lost for that war! Because if fear! Because of politics! It angers me to see the waste and loss- my twin brother is in the Air Force and I worry about him dearly! Sweet poem- I'm sure you already know that his spirit is with you- always has been
Take care
JennStarr*
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Hi hon- so sad, I'm so sorry you never got to meet him! He was so young!!!! So many young men- fathers/sons/loves were unnecessarily lost for that war! Because if fear! Because of politics! It angers me to see the waste and loss- my twin brother is in the Air Force and I worry about him dearly! Sweet poem- I'm sure you already know that his spirit is with you- always has been
Take care
JennStarr*
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review Jenn and the comments.
Comment from Paulpl52
A warm sentimental poem about the memories of a father. Good imagery and flow to this. It is such a shame young lives are wasted for needless wars, when will it all end? Blessings, Paul.
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A warm sentimental poem about the memories of a father. Good imagery and flow to this. It is such a shame young lives are wasted for needless wars, when will it all end? Blessings, Paul.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
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thank you paulp
Comment from Tushy
Such poignant piece of work, and deeply personal.It is also very relevant, I watched some of our soldiers coming back from Afghanistan yesterday on the news, and thought about all those poor men who didn't make it. Your poem cuts straight to the heart ... capturing the needless waste of such young, beautiful lives. Beautifully crafted and pefect in its simplicity and tenderness. Love it.
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Such poignant piece of work, and deeply personal.It is also very relevant, I watched some of our soldiers coming back from Afghanistan yesterday on the news, and thought about all those poor men who didn't make it. Your poem cuts straight to the heart ... capturing the needless waste of such young, beautiful lives. Beautifully crafted and pefect in its simplicity and tenderness. Love it.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review
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thank you for the review
Comment from Irene D. Garces
A wonderful message in a poem to honor a loved one...and a war veteran. And although he's already dea, the memories and the heroic deeds remain in the heart of men.
I loved both the poem and the artwork.
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A wonderful message in a poem to honor a loved one...and a war veteran. And although he's already dea, the memories and the heroic deeds remain in the heart of men.
I loved both the poem and the artwork.
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2010
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thank you for the review
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thank you for the review
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Thank you too for sharing it...
irene