The Senator's Mistress?
Opening Lines - Ten Chapters Contest27 total reviews
Comment from Ash Madox
Georgia sounds like a real braveheart--an inviting character. That's a good hook in itself. All of the opening lines showcase the plotline, intrigue, challenge and contraversy, so it sounds like good value. Well thought out and executed, it should do really well. Good entry. Much luck in the contest, I liked it. Ash.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Georgia sounds like a real braveheart--an inviting character. That's a good hook in itself. All of the opening lines showcase the plotline, intrigue, challenge and contraversy, so it sounds like good value. Well thought out and executed, it should do really well. Good entry. Much luck in the contest, I liked it. Ash.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, Ash, for your kind and generous review and those lovely stars and your good luck wishes. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from hotstuff
This entry into the competition really intrigues me. I wonder of you will expand upon this and write a short story? I would love to read on. Good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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This entry into the competition really intrigues me. I wonder of you will expand upon this and write a short story? I would love to read on. Good luck.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much, hotstuff, for your kind and generous review and those lovely stars. I may write the story one day, but not right now, quite busy with another novel and some short stories. Warmest regards my friend, Marijke
Comment from vickib
Good job! Now you HAVE to write the story too. This is a fun contest, a great way to get a book started too I would think, gets the mind all stirred up to read the book or write more. I like the picture too.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Good job! Now you HAVE to write the story too. This is a fun contest, a great way to get a book started too I would think, gets the mind all stirred up to read the book or write more. I like the picture too.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you Vicki, I enjoyed this, it was a challenge to see if I could come up with a concept to keep the readers interested. Thanks for your warm and generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Bridge
Well the lines are interesting enough. I'd really like to read the stories....yes they seem interesting enough to me.
Shetu
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Well the lines are interesting enough. I'd really like to read the stories....yes they seem interesting enough to me.
Shetu
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you Shetu. Sorry, can't give you the stories - against the contest rules, but I hope the lines were interesting enough, that if I wrote a novel with those lines, it would make you pick up the book and wish to keep reading. Thank you for your review and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from adewpearl
You've certainly intrigued me about this murder mystery by just these ten chapter-starting lines, Marijke - it sounds like there's lots of passion and intrigue going on. You've piqued my curiosity for sure. Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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You've certainly intrigued me about this murder mystery by just these ten chapter-starting lines, Marijke - it sounds like there's lots of passion and intrigue going on. You've piqued my curiosity for sure. Brooke :-)
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you Brooke, but was she his mistress? I'm pleased I've piqued your curiosity. Thanks for reading and your generous review. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from Kingsland
I found that each and every line is a very good line that might be added to a storyline. I found this piece to be well written. It was my pleasure to have read and written a review for it... John
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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I found that each and every line is a very good line that might be added to a storyline. I found this piece to be well written. It was my pleasure to have read and written a review for it... John
Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you John, for your kind review and generous rating. Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment from rmdelta
fionageorge,
an excellent contest entry, my friend. Great descriptives within each line allow our minds to follow the story quite easily. Nice work and I wish you luck in the contest.
Reggie
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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fionageorge,
an excellent contest entry, my friend. Great descriptives within each line allow our minds to follow the story quite easily. Nice work and I wish you luck in the contest.
Reggie
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2010
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Thank you so much Reggie, I appreciate your encouraging comments. Warmest regards, Marijke