The Romeo's
A lifetime of love27 total reviews
Comment from Charlene0513
To jmdg1954,
A writing prompt that describes the conversation between an elderly couple.
The woman making light of what they did 56 yrs. and his urge to perform then she speaks up and reminds him with only one "V"----only if he had his L.I. paid up in case he suffered a heart attack.
Charlene
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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To jmdg1954,
A writing prompt that describes the conversation between an elderly couple.
The woman making light of what they did 56 yrs. and his urge to perform then she speaks up and reminds him with only one "V"----only if he had his L.I. paid up in case he suffered a heart attack.
Charlene
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you
Comment from Barthalamew
I really like this story. It's funny, humorous, entertaining and a really easy read. The characters are very believable and the flow is really easy and comfortable. Everything is really well written. Really good job.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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I really like this story. It's funny, humorous, entertaining and a really easy read. The characters are very believable and the flow is really easy and comfortable. Everything is really well written. Really good job.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you, I am very appreciative of your comments.. John
Comment from riley289
Funny and well written. The beginning leads the reader down a blind alley which gives you license to have the unusual twist of including a long lasting love affair. I liked this very much.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Funny and well written. The beginning leads the reader down a blind alley which gives you license to have the unusual twist of including a long lasting love affair. I liked this very much.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you riley289
Comment from Changeisgood
Pretty good 1954. You use a device to separate your characters that works, heaving us out of Alex's dream and into Jen, who is presented from the outside. That door slamming must really prey on his mind, and it was clever that you make him get the years wrong. There is one place to fix: "The Romeos agreed to take out THEIR..."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Pretty good 1954. You use a device to separate your characters that works, heaving us out of Alex's dream and into Jen, who is presented from the outside. That door slamming must really prey on his mind, and it was clever that you make him get the years wrong. There is one place to fix: "The Romeos agreed to take out THEIR..."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you for your commentary.. change has been made to "their"..... John
Comment from SamanthaD.
Ha! Love it! What a fun easy to read story you have here! I like the way it is broken yp into two time periods. I also like the way this elderly couple still love each other and enjoy being together. Very nicely done!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Ha! Love it! What a fun easy to read story you have here! I like the way it is broken yp into two time periods. I also like the way this elderly couple still love each other and enjoy being together. Very nicely done!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you SamanthaD for reading and reviewing... John
Comment from poetknowit
You have very expertly woven the past and present together in this heart-warming story. Even the word "oops" being overused is endearing and lovable in the main character, Alec.
I was glad to find out that Jen came back that first night!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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You have very expertly woven the past and present together in this heart-warming story. Even the word "oops" being overused is endearing and lovable in the main character, Alec.
I was glad to find out that Jen came back that first night!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you for reading and reviewing... JOohn
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
A good entry, an interesting story, confident writing style but the reason here that i am giving it a 5 starer is the [ Characterization] Of Alec in particular and others generally.
You are a master in this art, my friend.
Whether It was enjoyably enough to be a winner in the Valentine's Day theme, i do not know, But I certainly liked it owing to the element i mentioned above.
Regards
K
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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A good entry, an interesting story, confident writing style but the reason here that i am giving it a 5 starer is the [ Characterization] Of Alec in particular and others generally.
You are a master in this art, my friend.
Whether It was enjoyably enough to be a winner in the Valentine's Day theme, i do not know, But I certainly liked it owing to the element i mentioned above.
Regards
K
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2010
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2010
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Thank you K for reading and commenting.. John
