Quite Revealing
A Lovers Tiff Exposed28 total reviews
Comment from leesm
A very cute little story. Hard to tell a story in 100 words, but you've done a nice job here. Fun to read and see the photo. Is the photo from a real episode you've witnessed?
Good luck in the contest.
-Lee
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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A very cute little story. Hard to tell a story in 100 words, but you've done a nice job here. Fun to read and see the photo. Is the photo from a real episode you've witnessed?
Good luck in the contest.
-Lee
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I take the Fifth Amendment. No need to incriminate myself. Lol.
Comment from Marjorie D.
Okay, honestly now! Did you find the picture first or get lucky? LOL
Good one, author! Thanks for the laugh.
XO
Marjorie
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Okay, honestly now! Did you find the picture first or get lucky? LOL
Good one, author! Thanks for the laugh.
XO
Marjorie
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I'd like to say I got lucky, but I had the picture.
Comment from Mrs Jones
This is very cute, but without the picture the punchline would not make sense.
Carolyn and her boss were quietly kissing and groping each other in his office. It wasn't until Carolyn confronted him with: "When are you going to tell your wife you're divorcing her?" {that}he flew into a loud rage. Now this is going to change your word count, but if you change...
Meanwhile, the whole office began listening intently to
Meanwhile the whole office listened intently.
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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This is very cute, but without the picture the punchline would not make sense.
Carolyn and her boss were quietly kissing and groping each other in his office. It wasn't until Carolyn confronted him with: "When are you going to tell your wife you're divorcing her?" {that}he flew into a loud rage. Now this is going to change your word count, but if you change...
Meanwhile, the whole office began listening intently to
Meanwhile the whole office listened intently.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thanks for the suggestion, Rose.
Comment from Lynnda
You are just too good at this art form. Obviously you began with the picture and wrote the story to fit - very well, I might add. However, It's not as funny as "Cut!"
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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You are just too good at this art form. Obviously you began with the picture and wrote the story to fit - very well, I might add. However, It's not as funny as "Cut!"
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thanks for reading my story, Lynnda. I had fun with this one.
Comment from MollyO
The photo is the punch line. Good match-up. I would change "...office began..." to "office was" otherwise it's sounds like they don't hear the first part of the argument.
Nice irony.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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The photo is the punch line. Good match-up. I would change "...office began..." to "office was" otherwise it's sounds like they don't hear the first part of the argument.
Nice irony.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thanks for the suggestion, Molly. I agree.
Comment from chaswriter
blind author - A fun microfiction entry. The photo adds the punch to make this fly. Enjoyed the story and good luck in the contest.
Charlie
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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blind author - A fun microfiction entry. The photo adds the punch to make this fly. Enjoyed the story and good luck in the contest.
Charlie
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Thank you, Charlie. I just couldn't resist this one.
Comment from mbroyles2
A picture is worth a thousand words.
So you only need another 100 to enhance it.
Very nice.
Love the strong characters.
Good luck in the contest
Michael.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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A picture is worth a thousand words.
So you only need another 100 to enhance it.
Very nice.
Love the strong characters.
Good luck in the contest
Michael.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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Michael, thanks for reading and for your comments.
Comment from Thomas Raine
I laughed out loud at the picture after I read this - like, really? You think they would have handled this a bit more in the shadows; looks like he may be losing more than a marriage, but also his job!
Thanks for sharing, my friend,
- TR
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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I laughed out loud at the picture after I read this - like, really? You think they would have handled this a bit more in the shadows; looks like he may be losing more than a marriage, but also his job!
Thanks for sharing, my friend,
- TR
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2010
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TR, thanks for reading the story. Yeah, this guy would be toast!, Lol.