Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "Chapter 7; part 1"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Queenise
Barbara. Peggy is something else! I can't stand her! Which means that you have created a great bad girl for your story and that's good on your part. Good flow,pace,content,imagery and the suspense and antagonism is great. Steven and Leya are so wonderful together and their chemistry is felt throughout the story. Would recommend to others. Enjoyable to read. Queenise
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Barbara. Peggy is something else! I can't stand her! Which means that you have created a great bad girl for your story and that's good on your part. Good flow,pace,content,imagery and the suspense and antagonism is great. Steven and Leya are so wonderful together and their chemistry is felt throughout the story. Would recommend to others. Enjoyable to read. Queenise
Comment Written 02-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
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You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from Readywriter52
Peggy has gone off the deep end. Steven needs to have her reassigned to a different team. She is a woman who's bound to cause more trouble. I don't even think Peggy likes Steven. She sees him as a trophy husband.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Peggy has gone off the deep end. Steven needs to have her reassigned to a different team. She is a woman who's bound to cause more trouble. I don't even think Peggy likes Steven. She sees him as a trophy husband.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Peggy does cause more trouble. I appreciate your review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
i am really enjoying reading the chapters that you write--i wish you luck in finding a publisher--i want to know who's going to end up with who and who's going to be the bad guy in all of this
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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i am really enjoying reading the chapters that you write--i wish you luck in finding a publisher--i want to know who's going to end up with who and who's going to be the bad guy in all of this
Comment Written 02-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from NightWriter
"Chapter 7; part 1" is another riveting chapter. Lots of suspense here. I liked the sizzling begining, a real attention getter. There's a lot of dialogue in this which makes the story read fast. Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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"Chapter 7; part 1" is another riveting chapter. Lots of suspense here. I liked the sizzling begining, a real attention getter. There's a lot of dialogue in this which makes the story read fast. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from bookishfabler
I only saw a few little nits.
There's no simple (way) to say this,
Since her family manufactures and sell(s) drugs
Another good chapter. Looking forward to another soon.
hugs
book
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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I only saw a few little nits.
There's no simple (way) to say this,
Since her family manufactures and sell(s) drugs
Another good chapter. Looking forward to another soon.
hugs
book
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Thank you for finding these. This evening I rewrote that section and went over it and over it and still didn't catch those little mess-ups. I appreciate you finding them.
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I hear you.Not a problem. Happens to me all the time. Happy New YEar
If I don't catch you on Sunday, HAppy Birthday.
Hugs Heidi
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Thank you. That is very sweet. Of course I will be 21....Watch out for that lightening bolt
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Really< I will be twenty-two. LOL
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
I know that I had mistaken this tale before for an excert of a organized crime drama. Since reading the last chap. again, and this chap. , I've come to see the romance. But I also see a very interesting "air of suspense". I really like this story. You are a sexy minded author. LOL
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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I know that I had mistaken this tale before for an excert of a organized crime drama. Since reading the last chap. again, and this chap. , I've come to see the romance. But I also see a very interesting "air of suspense". I really like this story. You are a sexy minded author. LOL
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nucciwriter21
Thought this chapter gave a lot of insight into the characters and their personalities. It immediately grabbed my attention. Dialogue flowed nicely and was comedic at times and the use of imagery was very good. I definitely want to read more.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Thought this chapter gave a lot of insight into the characters and their personalities. It immediately grabbed my attention. Dialogue flowed nicely and was comedic at times and the use of imagery was very good. I definitely want to read more.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mengleoh67
Oh please please please let me kick Peggy in the teeth just once, please?
Okay sorry I'm better now. As usual excellent pace to the storyline, just the right combination of action and information. Fantastic character interaction and dialogue, even Peggy the pest is well developed and true to herself. An excellent job as usual.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Oh please please please let me kick Peggy in the teeth just once, please?
Okay sorry I'm better now. As usual excellent pace to the storyline, just the right combination of action and information. Fantastic character interaction and dialogue, even Peggy the pest is well developed and true to herself. An excellent job as usual.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Yes, you may kick Peggy.
Comment from Rama Rao
It made nice reading because it was not too short. We could see the friction between Peggy and Leya. I suppose the scene was meant for showing it, and it did achieve its purpose.
I thought I was a man of the world. I had the good luck of travelling all over the continental USA. This dressing gown with supports... surprised me.
I know Steve was not in love with Peggy, but if she on her own slips into his bed, would he refuse? If Peggy wanted to make love, why did she slap him first Couldn't she have used a gentler method to wake him up? Maybe she put him off with that. Just kidding. Very nice story. Good going. WISH YOUA HAPPY NEW YEAR.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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It made nice reading because it was not too short. We could see the friction between Peggy and Leya. I suppose the scene was meant for showing it, and it did achieve its purpose.
I thought I was a man of the world. I had the good luck of travelling all over the continental USA. This dressing gown with supports... surprised me.
I know Steve was not in love with Peggy, but if she on her own slips into his bed, would he refuse? If Peggy wanted to make love, why did she slap him first Couldn't she have used a gentler method to wake him up? Maybe she put him off with that. Just kidding. Very nice story. Good going. WISH YOUA HAPPY NEW YEAR.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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Peggy slapped Steven, because he assumed it was Leya. Steven would refuse for two reasons, first he is her supervisor and second he's in love with Leya. Thank you for your review.
Comment from L.lora
typo='Le(t) me show you how close we could be'
typo='For several [mom(n=m)ents], Peggy'
typo='See, even they have(a)mind of their'
You've out done yourself with this
one. I simply want to throttle Peggy.
You have made her so real and true to
the type of character she portrays that
it makes my blood boil at her egocentric
manipulations and her outrageous unexceptable
behavior. Excellent write, your characters,
narrative and dialogues are spot on and
perfect. Lora
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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typo='Le(t) me show you how close we could be'
typo='For several [mom(n=m)ents], Peggy'
typo='See, even they have(a)mind of their'
You've out done yourself with this
one. I simply want to throttle Peggy.
You have made her so real and true to
the type of character she portrays that
it makes my blood boil at her egocentric
manipulations and her outrageous unexceptable
behavior. Excellent write, your characters,
narrative and dialogues are spot on and
perfect. Lora
Comment Written 01-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2010
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I just rewrote parts of that scene. Darn I thought I caught all the typos. Thank you for catching them for me. I appreciate it.
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You are most welcome. L
