Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Help for the Brokenhearted"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from Sandollar
This story was great! It sure sounds as if you had a lot of experience dealing with other people's heartache. I agree with everything you said. I also agree with your mother. Everything passes with time. I just have one little issue. I list it below.
Thanks for writing this. I certainly enjoyed the humorous style. Great job.
Usually, boys' appetites are seriously impaired. That's the female department.) In the context of the story is this what you meant to say? Seems like you meant their appetites are NOT seriously impaired. Or else why would you need to keep stuff to fill their bellies?
Sandollar
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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This story was great! It sure sounds as if you had a lot of experience dealing with other people's heartache. I agree with everything you said. I also agree with your mother. Everything passes with time. I just have one little issue. I list it below.
Thanks for writing this. I certainly enjoyed the humorous style. Great job.
Usually, boys' appetites are seriously impaired. That's the female department.) In the context of the story is this what you meant to say? Seems like you meant their appetites are NOT seriously impaired. Or else why would you need to keep stuff to fill their bellies?
Sandollar
Comment Written 08-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2009
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Sandollar, Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments. I thought I had written aren't. Thank you for catching that. I can't believe no one else noticed it.
Cheers,
Beth
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You're welcome. Anytime.
Comment from light
Beth,
I've been through this broken heart stuff and it isn't easy. Both my daughters fell for the same man and it was hell. The one who didn't marry his was the lucky one. Her heart was broken then and she got over it. The other one married the idiot and divorced him after eighteen years and three sons. It wasn't just her heart that was broken. Your advice is sound and I enjoyed reading your essay.
Elaine
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Beth,
I've been through this broken heart stuff and it isn't easy. Both my daughters fell for the same man and it was hell. The one who didn't marry his was the lucky one. Her heart was broken then and she got over it. The other one married the idiot and divorced him after eighteen years and three sons. It wasn't just her heart that was broken. Your advice is sound and I enjoyed reading your essay.
Elaine
Comment Written 06-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Elaine, Thank you for the review. You are right it ins't easy. I glad you liked the essay. I appreciate your input.
Beth
Comment from SlipWriter
You have a lot of life experience that is worth sharing.
Let me start by saying that you should avoid using "Let me start by saying" as an opener. You follow it with negatives: "Don't tell me ..." and "I got lucky" and "what qualifies me."
By the time I finish that paragraph. I don't know what advice you're about to impart and you've convinced me that whatever it is, your don't believe you're qualified to give it.
State your points clearly and keep your credibility high.
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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You have a lot of life experience that is worth sharing.
Let me start by saying that you should avoid using "Let me start by saying" as an opener. You follow it with negatives: "Don't tell me ..." and "I got lucky" and "what qualifies me."
By the time I finish that paragraph. I don't know what advice you're about to impart and you've convinced me that whatever it is, your don't believe you're qualified to give it.
State your points clearly and keep your credibility high.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Thanks for the review and comments. I was trying for humor. I'm sorry you didn't get it.
All the best,
Beth
Comment from peach
Good advice and very well written. I may have disagreed with you a little bit about girls' responses to heartache, but that was a good thing. You definitely made me think. Thanks.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Good advice and very well written. I may have disagreed with you a little bit about girls' responses to heartache, but that was a good thing. You definitely made me think. Thanks.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Thanks for your review and your comments. That was my experience with my girls but everyone is different. Some girls eat when they are unhappy.
Beth
Comment from Aussie
I liked your short story that speaks of healing the broken-hearted. Of course you can offer help but in the end the broken heart belongs to the person that received it in the first place. Time heals all wounds and one must be allowed to grieve and work their way through the lessons of life. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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I liked your short story that speaks of healing the broken-hearted. Of course you can offer help but in the end the broken heart belongs to the person that received it in the first place. Time heals all wounds and one must be allowed to grieve and work their way through the lessons of life. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Aussie, Thank you for the review and for the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Personally, I think you're very well qualified to speak on such matters. As a mother myself I instantly recognised all you describe -- especially the bit about boys putting fists into walls!
This is wonderful writing, Beth. I saw no nits or spags and it flows very well indeed. I think your brood are very lucky to ahve such a loving mother!
Warmest wishes and big hugs
Kat
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Personally, I think you're very well qualified to speak on such matters. As a mother myself I instantly recognised all you describe -- especially the bit about boys putting fists into walls!
This is wonderful writing, Beth. I saw no nits or spags and it flows very well indeed. I think your brood are very lucky to ahve such a loving mother!
Warmest wishes and big hugs
Kat
Comment Written 06-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2009
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Thank you Kat, I'm so glad you like this story. I lived through all those heartbreak moments and I still am. Just being older doesn't allow you to retire from dealing with the brokenhearted kids.
Cheers,
Beth
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No. I agree. We may well 'retire' from work but being a mum just carries on for ever!
Comment from Trybuck
I believe your Grandma to be a wise woman, "this too shall pass". Too bad we don't realize that at the moment we're going through something bad or painful. Teen-agers are tuff, Buck
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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I believe your Grandma to be a wise woman, "this too shall pass". Too bad we don't realize that at the moment we're going through something bad or painful. Teen-agers are tuff, Buck
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and for the great comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from zydecosal
Yes, a very sad story about heartbreak that I can identify with. Married 19 years and I never saw it coming. Didn't know we had any problems. Then, one night he said he wanted a divorce. I asked why, admidst a flood of tears and shock. Said he wasn't happy. No explanation. Guess he thought it was my fault. It wasn't. Happiness has to come from within. Good job with your story. So far, my three children are all happily married.
Oh, later that night he said he changed his mind. No good. Two years later he told me again, one week before Christmas. Said he's give me $100 for each of the girls and that's all. Our son was away at college. I went and saw a lawyer and he changed his mind again. Things got worse, so 3 years later I got out. He didn't want the girls and I around anyway and it was damaging all of us mentally and emotionally. End of sermon.
Sally
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Yes, a very sad story about heartbreak that I can identify with. Married 19 years and I never saw it coming. Didn't know we had any problems. Then, one night he said he wanted a divorce. I asked why, admidst a flood of tears and shock. Said he wasn't happy. No explanation. Guess he thought it was my fault. It wasn't. Happiness has to come from within. Good job with your story. So far, my three children are all happily married.
Oh, later that night he said he changed his mind. No good. Two years later he told me again, one week before Christmas. Said he's give me $100 for each of the girls and that's all. Our son was away at college. I went and saw a lawyer and he changed his mind again. Things got worse, so 3 years later I got out. He didn't want the girls and I around anyway and it was damaging all of us mentally and emotionally. End of sermon.
Sally
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Yes, it happens sometimes. Luckily for my daughter, there were no children involved. My son is going through the same thing right now and there are three children involved. Thanks for reading and for the comments. I'm sorry it happened to you. I'll bet your Mom was probably going through it with you.
Beth
Comment from eliz100
You have done wonderful entertaining job with this topic. Your description are great. Being the mother of 3 grown children, two girls one boy, I can surely relate
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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You have done wonderful entertaining job with this topic. Your description are great. Being the mother of 3 grown children, two girls one boy, I can surely relate
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your nice comments.
Cheers,
Beth
Comment from joan marie
I really love the way you summed this great narrative up in the last paragraph. But when we are young time passes so slowly. I remember my first broken heart many years ago. I loved the chicken pox analogy. Great writing. joan marie
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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I really love the way you summed this great narrative up in the last paragraph. But when we are young time passes so slowly. I remember my first broken heart many years ago. I loved the chicken pox analogy. Great writing. joan marie
Comment Written 05-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2009
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Thanks Joan Marie, I appreciate you reading and reviewing this and also your great comments.
Beth
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You're welcome, joan marie
