Tantalizing Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Chapter 5; Part 3"Dishonesty VS Love. Which will win?
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Comment from Freeflyer
I can certainly see they none of them can afford to take the risk with too much trust, concerning Leya. Though this must be heartbreaking for her if she is innocent.
Keep up the good work.
Maz.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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I can certainly see they none of them can afford to take the risk with too much trust, concerning Leya. Though this must be heartbreaking for her if she is innocent.
Keep up the good work.
Maz.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hiya Barbara,
My bet is on Peggy finding a "hidden" cell phone and setting Leya up as a fall guy. I think Peggy has some serious issues here and Steven better wake up fast. Is he leading this team or allowing Peggy to take over his authority in her personal vendetta.
Patrick
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Hiya Barbara,
My bet is on Peggy finding a "hidden" cell phone and setting Leya up as a fall guy. I think Peggy has some serious issues here and Steven better wake up fast. Is he leading this team or allowing Peggy to take over his authority in her personal vendetta.
Patrick
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Peggy is a piece of work. It only getts better. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I like the story in this chapter and how it has been told. I love the fact that Steven decided to keep an open mind in the end, rather than condemn Leya outright. kudos
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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I like the story in this chapter and how it has been told. I love the fact that Steven decided to keep an open mind in the end, rather than condemn Leya outright. kudos
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from knowledge
This is a good post. You have a good understanding of mixing dialog into your writing. This makes it move along for your reader.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowldge
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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This is a good post. You have a good understanding of mixing dialog into your writing. This makes it move along for your reader.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowldge
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from jadapenn
Excuse me, I need this Peggy eliminated. She's the mole the jealous little rat. Uhg, jada is getting beside herself here. Leya has my sympathies again. She seems a sweet innocent in this whole debacle. I need to form a concrete picture of Steven. Tall, auburn hair, green eyes? Anything else for jada? Loved the read. You dialogue is good. Next chapter please. luv jada
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Excuse me, I need this Peggy eliminated. She's the mole the jealous little rat. Uhg, jada is getting beside herself here. Leya has my sympathies again. She seems a sweet innocent in this whole debacle. I need to form a concrete picture of Steven. Tall, auburn hair, green eyes? Anything else for jada? Loved the read. You dialogue is good. Next chapter please. luv jada
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Nic had laid claim to Steven, so you have some competion. Thank you for your review.
Comment from wierdgrace
I just can not amagine Leya being quilty, and I love the character Steven, that is my Sons names, another wonderful chapter, and I am so sorry I am behind, trying to read voting booth, storys and write has been hard, well done, thank you
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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I just can not amagine Leya being quilty, and I love the character Steven, that is my Sons names, another wonderful chapter, and I am so sorry I am behind, trying to read voting booth, storys and write has been hard, well done, thank you
Comment Written 30-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and continued support. I understand getting behind.
Comment from christopherjl
This is another great entry into your novel. Thank you for sharing. I have no suggestions for you as there was no obvious SPAG! Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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This is another great entry into your novel. Thank you for sharing. I have no suggestions for you as there was no obvious SPAG! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jordan Rose
Ooh this just gets better! I'm really learning to dislike Peggy! I hope Leya and Steven make it! Thanks for sharing. I'm enjoying your story. Jordan
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Ooh this just gets better! I'm really learning to dislike Peggy! I hope Leya and Steven make it! Thanks for sharing. I'm enjoying your story. Jordan
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from laurelp
An interesting chapter. You explore the characters beyond their surface which I don't always see. Nicely written, you brought out the characters emotions as well.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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An interesting chapter. You explore the characters beyond their surface which I don't always see. Nicely written, you brought out the characters emotions as well.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from fictionwriter
Wow, they really have their backs against the wall. I enjoyed the chapter and didn't see any spag. Another good addition to the story. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Wow, they really have their backs against the wall. I enjoyed the chapter and didn't see any spag. Another good addition to the story. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you. I appreciate your review and continued support.
