The Ice Princess
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "(5) Waiting! (6) The Verdict"Love, Hate, Conflicts and Fear
27 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
You have a very good story under your pen. This is well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Now that the beginning is over with, I'm ready for the meat of this fantastic drama.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
  |
You have a very good story under your pen. This is well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Now that the beginning is over with, I'm ready for the meat of this fantastic drama.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Charlie
Thank you for continuing to read the story. I am glad that you are enjoying it. Thanks for the review. Carol
-
You welcome, Carol, I'm enjoying it very much. Charlie
Comment from lola29
Carol, another great chapter. I'm falling in love with Max myself. I'm so happy that he was found 'not guilty.'
I'm really enjoying the dialogue between Reilly and Max because I can almost sense the sexual tension.
I just found one thing that jumped out at me:
Wouldn't the nightmares still be plaguing her about Max being behind bars?
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
Carol, another great chapter. I'm falling in love with Max myself. I'm so happy that he was found 'not guilty.'
I'm really enjoying the dialogue between Reilly and Max because I can almost sense the sexual tension.
I just found one thing that jumped out at me:
Wouldn't the nightmares still be plaguing her about Max being behind bars?
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Lola
After they called her and told her the jury had reached a verdict, she had nightmares all night waiting to go to court the next day. Never before had a verdict worried her...this time she was afraid if she failed Max would be behind bars. I better check that section if it's not very clear. Thanks so much for the review. Smiles to you, Carol
Comment from L.lora
Carole, this was excellent,
so true to life. The detailed
description of the court room
scene down to the dialogue
was right on the money. Wow,
you had me sitting on the edge
of my chair waiting for them
to get to the verdict..the anticipation
level was phenomenal.. Great job
on this chapter.. Lora
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
Carole, this was excellent,
so true to life. The detailed
description of the court room
scene down to the dialogue
was right on the money. Wow,
you had me sitting on the edge
of my chair waiting for them
to get to the verdict..the anticipation
level was phenomenal.. Great job
on this chapter.. Lora
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Lora
Thank you so much for the detailed review. I was nervous about the courtroom scene appearing realistic. I am glad that you liked it. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from irishauthorme
As you progress into the story, so does your writing. This is the best chapter so far.
The settings, the actions between Reilly and Max are becoming more real and believable.
I feel that you are working as well as possible within the restrictions, and this is a good story that will stand on it's own, regardless.
I am still just an amateur, but I firmly believe that every good writer pulls the words from their heart, and that what you are doing here.
Good job.
Irish
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
As you progress into the story, so does your writing. This is the best chapter so far.
The settings, the actions between Reilly and Max are becoming more real and believable.
I feel that you are working as well as possible within the restrictions, and this is a good story that will stand on it's own, regardless.
I am still just an amateur, but I firmly believe that every good writer pulls the words from their heart, and that what you are doing here.
Good job.
Irish
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Irish
Thank you so much for appreciating the story. It is difficult to cram so much information into 10,000 words and still make it sound believable. Thanks again for reading and especially for enjoying. Carol
Comment from Shirley B
This was very well written. I felt like I was right there in the court room. You painted such a believable picture. I really did feel, like I was there or I was watching either The praitice or one of those shows. You made it very believable. Great job. I enjoyed reading it. Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
This was very well written. I felt like I was right there in the court room. You painted such a believable picture. I really did feel, like I was there or I was watching either The praitice or one of those shows. You made it very believable. Great job. I enjoyed reading it. Shirley
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Shirley
Thanks so much..I was hoping I got the courtroom stuff as least close to normal. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review. Carol
-
I've only gone to court with my husband a couple of times, You did a great job! Shirley
Comment from pixiemillie
Well you dragged that tell of the verdict out cleverly. Max just as cool as a cucumber in the office and Reilly not such an ice princess when it comes to his touch. So he's found 'not guilty'- -no prison time and one can only imagine what's going to happen with this relationship.
Interesting you pick NM- -Lord knows there is a lot of corruption in several of the counties and in the state government as well.
Excellent descriptives throughout.
NOTE: military background, (H)e had= =that's all I saw.
Thanks.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
Well you dragged that tell of the verdict out cleverly. Max just as cool as a cucumber in the office and Reilly not such an ice princess when it comes to his touch. So he's found 'not guilty'- -no prison time and one can only imagine what's going to happen with this relationship.
Interesting you pick NM- -Lord knows there is a lot of corruption in several of the counties and in the state government as well.
Excellent descriptives throughout.
NOTE: military background, (H)e had= =that's all I saw.
Thanks.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Pixie
I picked New Mexico because when I googled for a newspaper headline that's the one I got...the bodies in the desert. Actually it was for adult women but I changed it to fit the story. I think I was fixing the nit the same time you were typing. Thanks though for catching it. Thanks again for the review. CArol
Comment from dmjones
Another really good chapter. I can see in the chapters you've done that this could turn into a book much larger than 10,000 words. It'll be hard.
background, (h)He had resisted
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
|
Another really good chapter. I can see in the chapters you've done that this could turn into a book much larger than 10,000 words. It'll be hard.
background, (h)He had resisted
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
-
Donna
It was a lot to squash into 10,000 words. I could have expanded this so much more. Maybe if it doesn't do anything here, I'll consider doing that later. I could see sequels with the two..investigating and investigating ...LOL
Thanks for the review. I'll catch that nit asap.
Carol