The Ice Princess
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Gasping for Air - Why Me?"Love, Hate, Conflicts and Fear
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Comment from lola29
Carol, I'm very impressed at how you are incorporating the characters' true colors into your story allowing us to access our own opinions. Sherrie is certainly someone who lacks morals and compassion and it seems she's only good at one thing. This chapter was an excellent read, and you are progressing very nicely.
Just noticed one things (cafe)
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2009
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Carol, I'm very impressed at how you are incorporating the characters' true colors into your story allowing us to access our own opinions. Sherrie is certainly someone who lacks morals and compassion and it seems she's only good at one thing. This chapter was an excellent read, and you are progressing very nicely.
Just noticed one things (cafe)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Lola
Thanks for catching the nit. I shall correct right away. Glad you are understanding the characters and enjoying the story line. Thanks so much. Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This chapter has a lot of action. The sex scene was steamy and well executed. The ex is a big loser who I'm sure will cause trouble for Reilly. You are developing the characters nicely.
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This chapter has a lot of action. The sex scene was steamy and well executed. The ex is a big loser who I'm sure will cause trouble for Reilly. You are developing the characters nicely.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Beth
Thanks so much for the kind review. As I said before, this book makes me nervous. I probably won't have any finger nails left by the time I finish.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sasha
This is an excellent chapter. You have done a great job showing the reader what a slimy creature Trent is. His girlfriend sounds like someone who is willing to do anything to keep her man happy. Not a good combination. You have definitely peaked my interest. I look forward to the next chapter.
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This is an excellent chapter. You have done a great job showing the reader what a slimy creature Trent is. His girlfriend sounds like someone who is willing to do anything to keep her man happy. Not a good combination. You have definitely peaked my interest. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Sash
Just exactly what I wanted to hear...The characters are believable then? Thanks for the great review and your continual support!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from misscookie
Wow I mssed the warring about your write I guess I kinda go t my interst for a while then it was getting to below the belt. for those who lke this kind of writting you go for it. I'm not a pride they do just about have sex on the dance floor with theses new dances and videio You go for it
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Wow I mssed the warring about your write I guess I kinda go t my interst for a while then it was getting to below the belt. for those who lke this kind of writting you go for it. I'm not a pride they do just about have sex on the dance floor with theses new dances and videio You go for it
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Miss Cookie
So sorry if you were offended...I don't usually write like this either but it's necessary for the contest I've entered ,,,very little of this continues in the future chapters so if you care to continue reading. It's really more of a suspense novel that got peppered with a few scenes. Thanks for the review. Carol
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Hi I'm a big old gal your writing was wonderful i wish I could write as raw as you did. you didnt offen me. It all goes to show you that you are a terrific writer to be able to write in any form that is a gift never stop it would be a sin pus so many people would mess great reading.(smile)
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Wow...I hope you will continuing reading and that we can share and become friends.
Smiles to you, Carol
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I will be looking forward seeing more of your work and hope you enjoy mine its not of your high scale but interestng until then bye my new friend
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We all must start somewhere and with a friends help we climb! CArol
Comment from maciascm
This was an overall well written story, but it didn't seem to add suspense in me or a tense sensation while reading it. I could tell that alot of thought was put into it, however, it still needs a little more suspense for me!! Overall, good writing!!
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This was an overall well written story, but it didn't seem to add suspense in me or a tense sensation while reading it. I could tell that alot of thought was put into it, however, it still needs a little more suspense for me!! Overall, good writing!!
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Maciascm
I think you needed to start from the first chapter in order to know what was going on...two bodies have been found in the desert, a police officer has been framed, and his lawyer is an old love...I think that's quite a bit of suspense for three chapters. Thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from ryanlion
this is the first chapter of this story i've read and its got a neat twist at the end and the main characters seem really good, you write well and the story flowed nicely
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this is the first chapter of this story i've read and its got a neat twist at the end and the main characters seem really good, you write well and the story flowed nicely
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Ryan
Thanks for the kind review. I hope you will go back and start from the beginning. I am writing this for a chance at a publishing contract and appreciate all the input I can get. Thanks again. Carol
Comment from melyuki
and the plot thickens. Good morning's work again Carol. This time portraying some different characters. Perhaps not so tantilizing as gorgeous Max. But with equal suspense built into their seemably, unsavoury personalities. Once again , the chapter flows well and is easy to read and comprehend. Very much an emotional tale caught up in the sensual, sexual desires of the basic human man and woman. A well described love scene. OOzing in desire and thence, fulfillment. Great use of descriptive vocabulary defined the picture in the reader's mind, very vividly and allowed the reader to share in the emotion between the couple. ( well figuratively speaking that is .... ) Great work Carol, this novel is taking hold well, and you can now tighten your bolts, loosen your belt and take a long , well earned deep breath.. luv Mel xxx
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and the plot thickens. Good morning's work again Carol. This time portraying some different characters. Perhaps not so tantilizing as gorgeous Max. But with equal suspense built into their seemably, unsavoury personalities. Once again , the chapter flows well and is easy to read and comprehend. Very much an emotional tale caught up in the sensual, sexual desires of the basic human man and woman. A well described love scene. OOzing in desire and thence, fulfillment. Great use of descriptive vocabulary defined the picture in the reader's mind, very vividly and allowed the reader to share in the emotion between the couple. ( well figuratively speaking that is .... ) Great work Carol, this novel is taking hold well, and you can now tighten your bolts, loosen your belt and take a long , well earned deep breath.. luv Mel xxx
Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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Mel
Whoosh! Did you hear my sigh escaping? As for the belt, it was loosened long ago or I couldn't sit so m=long in front of the computer. LOL
Glad you liked the action and these two shifty characters as well. It's so hard when you have to move the story along so fast with the limitation on words. Thank you as always!
CArol
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Yep,,, near blew my ars off the seat.... Maybe its time I went to bed anyway. 1.30am sweet dreams Mel x
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See you tomorrow or my tonight! Sleep well and dream of many more things to write!! Smiles,Carol
Comment from RebelRose
Wow. I need to take a cold shower!!! LOL.
Good read and another very interesting chapter. I look forward to your next posting.
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Wow. I need to take a cold shower!!! LOL.
Good read and another very interesting chapter. I look forward to your next posting.
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Comment Written 09-Oct-2009
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RebelRose
Oh..you ease my mind with your review. This writing "steamy" romance is giving me more gray hairs. The contest calls for it and I am attempting, so I am pleased that you enjoyed.
Carol
