Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Nicnac
It's so funny when some relationships start out where the couple aggravate the fire out of each other. LOL There are some sparks there though - and I expect they'll ignite before long. :)
I'm not sure about the 'right way' to put the English/Spanish words. They didn't distract me at all and I found them helpful, but I'm not really sure how they would be incorporated in a book. Sorry, not much help there. LOL
Couldn't you have had Steven take his shirt off or something, Barb? (hee hee) Oh, I guess that comes later, when I come to visit him at the safe house. ;)
I enjoyed this chapter. Can't wait for the next.
Nic
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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It's so funny when some relationships start out where the couple aggravate the fire out of each other. LOL There are some sparks there though - and I expect they'll ignite before long. :)
I'm not sure about the 'right way' to put the English/Spanish words. They didn't distract me at all and I found them helpful, but I'm not really sure how they would be incorporated in a book. Sorry, not much help there. LOL
Couldn't you have had Steven take his shirt off or something, Barb? (hee hee) Oh, I guess that comes later, when I come to visit him at the safe house. ;)
I enjoyed this chapter. Can't wait for the next.
Nic
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Some sparks happen very soon, Leya is a hot little number, Steven attempts to stay professional.
Comment from Mariea
Another good chapter with well developed characters and dialogue. Did u mean 'work-aholic' in the first paragraph.
I look forward to the next one.
Regards Mia
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Another good chapter with well developed characters and dialogue. Did u mean 'work-aholic' in the first paragraph.
I look forward to the next one.
Regards Mia
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Yes. Wow. I had someone correct a few other hyphenated words but didn't saya word about that one. HUMMM. Thank you.
Comment from darkgreennights
Dear Barbara, I am so glad that you have begun another romantic story line, this one starring the uber hot Steven lol. I agree with Leya's taste and like what Dani said about task force men lol I shall read on
Kathleen
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Dear Barbara, I am so glad that you have begun another romantic story line, this one starring the uber hot Steven lol. I agree with Leya's taste and like what Dani said about task force men lol I shall read on
Kathleen
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I'm glad you find Steven hot. It helps when the reader finds the hero, interesting, shall we say???
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lol yeah he's interesting
Comment from TillMcCauley
I enjoyed reading this chapter and was kept interested the entire way through. I think your characters are very likable and believble. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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I enjoyed reading this chapter and was kept interested the entire way through. I think your characters are very likable and believble. Keep up the good work and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Somer
Again, great chapter! I have to read the first few to catch up, but i still like it! Steven seems like a good character too :P Great work, :)
Thanks,
Somer
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Again, great chapter! I have to read the first few to catch up, but i still like it! Steven seems like a good character too :P Great work, :)
Thanks,
Somer
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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He is and I think you will like Steven. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Freeflyer
Poor Leya. I sympathize with her. Now she has broken from her family she must feel as if she is out on a limb. I hope she finds trust with the good guys, soon.
Keep 'em coming.
Freeflyer
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Poor Leya. I sympathize with her. Now she has broken from her family she must feel as if she is out on a limb. I hope she finds trust with the good guys, soon.
Keep 'em coming.
Freeflyer
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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As a typical heroine, at least in my novels, she makes some stupid mistakes. Thanks for reading.
Comment from wierdgrace
Your doing so great, this is wonderful, the dialogue, keeps the reader and all involved, I loved this chapter, thank you so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Your doing so great, this is wonderful, the dialogue, keeps the reader and all involved, I loved this chapter, thank you so much for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate your kind words.
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you are so welcome
Comment from FredCollingwood
Another enjoyable read--keep them coming. The only comment I have is in your notes:
I have not figured out (an) perfect way to write in English translations to the Spanish words. >"a"
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Another enjoyable read--keep them coming. The only comment I have is in your notes:
I have not figured out (an) perfect way to write in English translations to the Spanish words. >"a"
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Of course, I didn't recheck them. Thanks.
Comment from rmdelta
barbara,
another excellent chapter, my friend. YOu have the gift of using great descriptives and wonderful dialogue, which enable the reader to visualize and understand what's going on. Well done.
Reggie
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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barbara,
another excellent chapter, my friend. YOu have the gift of using great descriptives and wonderful dialogue, which enable the reader to visualize and understand what's going on. Well done.
Reggie
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciat your kind words.
Comment from Shane Marquardt
I think you translate the words smoothly. I honestly can't think of a better way to do it. It also appears you are finding your groove with the story. The plot was already great, but there is momentum to the action now.
I'm here to the finish :)
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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I think you translate the words smoothly. I honestly can't think of a better way to do it. It also appears you are finding your groove with the story. The plot was already great, but there is momentum to the action now.
I'm here to the finish :)
Comment Written 14-Aug-2009
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2009
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Thank you for your review. I appreciate the confidence. I hope I can follow through.