Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "How to Make a Holiday Memorable"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from Douglas Goff
In the end the whole family got together, so mission complete! That is more important than all the other traditional nonsense. So, just a fine tune. I would identify Evan as your husband the first time he pops up. When you names him later, it stopped the flow and took a second to figure out that he was the husband.
I;m the only independent in a family full of right-wingers and liberals so I dread the holidays and can feel your pain.
This is well-written and is a nice piece of work. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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In the end the whole family got together, so mission complete! That is more important than all the other traditional nonsense. So, just a fine tune. I would identify Evan as your husband the first time he pops up. When you names him later, it stopped the flow and took a second to figure out that he was the husband.
I;m the only independent in a family full of right-wingers and liberals so I dread the holidays and can feel your pain.
This is well-written and is a nice piece of work. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 29-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you Douglas for a great review. I so glad you liked this. I'm no fan of the holidays. I, too, am and independent and I despise people bringing up politics at a family gathering. My son asked what was my favorite holiday. I said Martin Luther King day, because I'm not required to celebrate it.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
Beth, That had to be a really rough holiday for you. I know how some of the E.R. doctors can be, especially on holidays. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. Thank you for sharing with us. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Beth, That had to be a really rough holiday for you. I know how some of the E.R. doctors can be, especially on holidays. You used very good descriptive words and very interesting imagery. Thank you for sharing with us. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2022
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Thank you Teri. I wasn't expecting that from a doctor. I imagine the with everyone rushing around there are a lot of accidents during that time of year. Doctors should be used to it.
Beth
Comment from joan marie
Never had one like that. Maybe because I was a girl scout that I was always prepared. Just kidding. Well your family must have some great stories to tell around the holiday tables. Terrific story. joan marie
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Never had one like that. Maybe because I was a girl scout that I was always prepared. Just kidding. Well your family must have some great stories to tell around the holiday tables. Terrific story. joan marie
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Joan Marie, Thank you for review and for your remarks. We do have some stories to laugh about. What's the fun of always being prepared. How boring. Just kidding. LOL
Beth
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You're right, but at my Sicilian grandmother's house on holiday's it was way different. jm
Comment from patwannabe
Beth, this sounds like around our house. It happens on vacation, too. I have a post on the first page (about #21), that I wrote about disasters, however, nobody got hurt in mine. Actually, mine was funny after a while. Broken ankles aren't funny. Hope it healed without the rheumatism setting in years later. Check into my post if you wish. It's entitled, "Please, No More Vacations Like This". Your story is great. Have a good one, pat
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Beth, this sounds like around our house. It happens on vacation, too. I have a post on the first page (about #21), that I wrote about disasters, however, nobody got hurt in mine. Actually, mine was funny after a while. Broken ankles aren't funny. Hope it healed without the rheumatism setting in years later. Check into my post if you wish. It's entitled, "Please, No More Vacations Like This". Your story is great. Have a good one, pat
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Pat, Thanks for review and for your comments. I will definitely check out your post.
Beth
Comment from zlp22
A very good story. You should maybe put all your stories in a book.You write like you were standing next to me. Enjoyable read. Looking forward to the next one.
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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A very good story. You should maybe put all your stories in a book.You write like you were standing next to me. Enjoyable read. Looking forward to the next one.
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Thak you for the review and for the encouragement. I am thinking about putting them into a book. A lot of people are suggesting that I do that.
Beth
Comment from oledihard
How fun! Not only are you an excellent writer making this stroy stick out long after I read it, but you made me less lonely in this world. Do you know anyone who hasn't met Murphy? What the heck is that all about. Has anyone ever had things go right? I have the luck of the Irish...like hey Kandie you can have my car. Gee thanks, I say. But it doesn't run. Wouldn't you know it. I bet we could fill books with Murp Stories. Love yours. You really get down.
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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How fun! Not only are you an excellent writer making this stroy stick out long after I read it, but you made me less lonely in this world. Do you know anyone who hasn't met Murphy? What the heck is that all about. Has anyone ever had things go right? I have the luck of the Irish...like hey Kandie you can have my car. Gee thanks, I say. But it doesn't run. Wouldn't you know it. I bet we could fill books with Murp Stories. Love yours. You really get down.
Comment Written 19-May-2009
reply by the author on 19-May-2009
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Thank you for the review. I loved your comments Murphy is a constant in my life but as you say, at least it's something to write about.
Beth
Comment from Cairn Destop
The injury did sound like a bad break, no pun intended. What made this comical is the happenings at the hospital. If I hadn't assisted my mother to the emergency room on three occassions, I would accuse you of inventing those events. Bet nobody helped until the hospital confirmed you had insurance. Don't you wish doctors received the same level of compassion they give their patients? No SPAG found.
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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The injury did sound like a bad break, no pun intended. What made this comical is the happenings at the hospital. If I hadn't assisted my mother to the emergency room on three occassions, I would accuse you of inventing those events. Bet nobody helped until the hospital confirmed you had insurance. Don't you wish doctors received the same level of compassion they give their patients? No SPAG found.
Comment Written 18-May-2009
reply by the author on 18-May-2009
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Thanks for reading and for your comments. This doctor should not be practicing. He was a total jerk. Hospitals are sometimes scary.
Beth
Comment from Artasylum
well i was happy to find it was nothing more than a broken leg...those heal and other holiday's come soon enough and it becomes fodder for the family...yours, diana
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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well i was happy to find it was nothing more than a broken leg...those heal and other holiday's come soon enough and it becomes fodder for the family...yours, diana
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Thanks for reading and commenting. There have been worse things that have happened on the holidays in my family but some are so bad I haven't figured out a way to make them seem funny. I don't want to depress people who read them.
Beth
Comment from adewpearl
scrap the ice off the windshield scrape
Oh, it is totally your fault that I'm laughing till I cry over your broken body and misery - every incident along the way in this story is hysterical - the mysterious disappearing piece of metal in your ankle probably being the highlight for me. LOL You are the consummate comic storyteller, and your family is my absolute favorite dysfunctional family. Brooke
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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scrap the ice off the windshield scrape
Oh, it is totally your fault that I'm laughing till I cry over your broken body and misery - every incident along the way in this story is hysterical - the mysterious disappearing piece of metal in your ankle probably being the highlight for me. LOL You are the consummate comic storyteller, and your family is my absolute favorite dysfunctional family. Brooke
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Brooke, Thank you for the review. I love being able to make you laugh. You are certainly one of my favorite reviewers. Thanks for pointing out the misspelling.
Beth
Comment from bkrighter
You DO have a way of adding excitement to a holiday. Good storytelling.
There are a couple of things you might want to look at. when you have arrived at the emergency rooom "Naturally, he was in more stress than I," I think that you want "distress" rather than "stress"
toward the end of the story, you have "I was starving since I had eaten since, and" I think you want to say "had not eaten" and then to specify when you last ate.
Good job--for your sake, I hope you are not planning to celebrate Memorial Day; stick to a quiet day of remembering.
Steve
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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You DO have a way of adding excitement to a holiday. Good storytelling.
There are a couple of things you might want to look at. when you have arrived at the emergency rooom "Naturally, he was in more stress than I," I think that you want "distress" rather than "stress"
toward the end of the story, you have "I was starving since I had eaten since, and" I think you want to say "had not eaten" and then to specify when you last ate.
Good job--for your sake, I hope you are not planning to celebrate Memorial Day; stick to a quiet day of remembering.
Steve
Comment Written 16-May-2009
reply by the author on 16-May-2009
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Steve, Thank you for your review and for the nice comments. I do appreciate you pointing out the spots that needed helf. I have the corrections.
Beth
