Comment from Mike K2

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem and there is a spookiness about it. I am glad that the world poet wasn't included. Well written and does excite the emotions.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2009

Thanks Mike, I am pleased that you liked it.
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Comment from margota

Excellent

Terrific description of the wiles of the devil and his evil deceptions; you don't realize the trap you're in until nearly too late to back out. Excellent job!

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Thanks Margota, I appreciate your encouraging comments in this review.
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Comment from Justin Chopin

Excellent

Great job with the poetry. And your write if you do make a deal with the devil then everybody would burn in the eternal fires of damnation.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Thanks bozroz, I appreciate your review and kind support.
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Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, PUPA. Maybe;
'Which made their voices hum along' - I think that's smoother as it's metered. ?

you've sure 'disguised' the required words in this spooky warning of a poem.
Good luck n best wishes, Ray xx

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Ray, what would I have done without you? Thanks for the suggestion, changed it already. I did feel something was wrong with that line

reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Ray, what would I have done without you? Thanks for the suggestion, changed it already. I did feel something was wrong with that line.
Thanks again dear friend.
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Comment from prodigal

Excellent

Great job on this one, Pupa. I have not attempted a poem in which I had to work certain words into it. It looks difficult and I think you did great with this one- Sam

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Well, it is my first attempt at such a poem with chosen words. Glad you liked it Sam, try one!
Thanks a lot.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Well, it is my first attempt at such a poem with chosen words. Glad you liked it Sam, try one!
Thanks a lot.
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Pupa

Comment from The Rivaling Mimic

Excellent

You used the chosen words with flair. I l9oved how easily you made them work and can think of no way to improve upon this entry. Good luck.

The Rivaling Mimic

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

TRM, thank you so much for your encouraging comments, glad you liked my poem.
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Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A brilliant foray into the realm
of fools gold. It is not what is
seen on the surface but what beats
beneath, what is in the soul.
You have taken the words designated
for this contest and turned them
into a poem that flows in rhyme and
tells the story of all that glitters
is not gold.
Well done and good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Thanks fasdigits, I always value your comments.
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Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I liked this poem and I have but one suggestion for it in this line...
they heard the spiteful devil sing> try this
they heard the spiteful devil's song
this way your ending word comes into focus with the other ending word rhythms. I still liked this poem enough to give it a five star review... John

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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009

Thanks John, also for your suggestion. It sound much better, but I had to use the word 'sing' in this poem.
I appreciate your 5 stars.
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