CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from bard owl
I suppose that reget rightfully claims a piece of our time, but then when forgiveness is rendered, it is time to move on. And it is very important to forgive ourselves. I think satan likes to see us feed on our guilt, long after God has forgiven us. Your poem is such an excellent reminder not to give regret the air time he would like to overwhem us. Excellent emotion in this one, Sue. Flawless rhythm and rhyme. It is always a pleasure to read your work. Blessings, Linda
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I suppose that reget rightfully claims a piece of our time, but then when forgiveness is rendered, it is time to move on. And it is very important to forgive ourselves. I think satan likes to see us feed on our guilt, long after God has forgiven us. Your poem is such an excellent reminder not to give regret the air time he would like to overwhem us. Excellent emotion in this one, Sue. Flawless rhythm and rhyme. It is always a pleasure to read your work. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from malachi1206
Well it looks like you met the form as far as I could tell and better yet the poem had sustenance which is hard to do when trying a new style excellent write malachi1206
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Well it looks like you met the form as far as I could tell and better yet the poem had sustenance which is hard to do when trying a new style excellent write malachi1206
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from scobbydoo
Not sure that I have seen this type of poetry before , but I have a lot to learn yet.
Very well written, and great job.
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Not sure that I have seen this type of poetry before , but I have a lot to learn yet.
Very well written, and great job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - That is the problem with making a mistake. It bit you then and now it still bites with each thought of regret. Well written in good pace and rhyme. I enjoyed it. Charlie
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Sue - That is the problem with making a mistake. It bit you then and now it still bites with each thought of regret. Well written in good pace and rhyme. I enjoyed it. Charlie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from EKPoet
I like this form, my friend Judian James does quite a lot of these very well. i like the circling minimalism of the repeating patterns of sound, it is entrancing, but the language is very abstract and I think it could be better with a few more images, more color and shape and texture. musically, this a great example of this form. it is difficult to pull off well. eKPoet
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I like this form, my friend Judian James does quite a lot of these very well. i like the circling minimalism of the repeating patterns of sound, it is entrancing, but the language is very abstract and I think it could be better with a few more images, more color and shape and texture. musically, this a great example of this form. it is difficult to pull off well. eKPoet
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
I hate regrets, so I try to always follow my heart, and I find I have very few to muse over. I would hate to be the poor person who lives with many. Great job.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I hate regrets, so I try to always follow my heart, and I find I have very few to muse over. I would hate to be the poor person who lives with many. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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I'm with you. Thankfully, I don't live with regrets. I do know a couple of people who are sometimes plagued with it. And it saddens me to hear them speak of regrets and "what-ifs". Thanks for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from joan marie
I have only written one of these for a class. I believe the topic you chose makes a tremendous difference in whether or not it succeeds. You pick a great subject and the flow was wonderful. Kudos, joan marie
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I have only written one of these for a class. I believe the topic you chose makes a tremendous difference in whether or not it succeeds. You pick a great subject and the flow was wonderful. Kudos, joan marie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
And very cleverly thoughout
it is too - made a great job
of it - words and rhyme run
smoothly.
I've never tried this form myself.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
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And very cleverly thoughout
it is too - made a great job
of it - words and rhyme run
smoothly.
I've never tried this form myself.
Well penned, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Alexander E Poet
a great piece of poetry very well written piece, not hard to follow. Nice picture selection, a wonderful take on life. keep up the good work my friend, a powerfully . Excellent There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
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a great piece of poetry very well written piece, not hard to follow. Nice picture selection, a wonderful take on life. keep up the good work my friend, a powerfully . Excellent There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one Alexander QQ...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from jmkenpo
I have learned so much from people with your skill level since joining this site. You have done a lovely job here, not only with structure and technicality but also with subject matter. - Jmkenpo
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I have learned so much from people with your skill level since joining this site. You have done a lovely job here, not only with structure and technicality but also with subject matter. - Jmkenpo
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009