CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from RADIO
You certainly responded to the contest
prompt in a very powerful way. Sweet,
sad, I guess the moods move on their
own and they will always seem to find
the blue mist of hurt....and then the
sun comes out again.
Radio
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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You certainly responded to the contest
prompt in a very powerful way. Sweet,
sad, I guess the moods move on their
own and they will always seem to find
the blue mist of hurt....and then the
sun comes out again.
Radio
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Radio, thank you for your awesome review. The sun always comes out. :-)) Sue
Comment from jclark
My guess would be that you are referring to divorce (or not) and you do it very well! I think it is the one life changing event that runs the whole gamet of emotions and that last part of "letting go" of the hurt is the toughest. Great contest entry, as always! Good luck.
Judy
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My guess would be that you are referring to divorce (or not) and you do it very well! I think it is the one life changing event that runs the whole gamet of emotions and that last part of "letting go" of the hurt is the toughest. Great contest entry, as always! Good luck.
Judy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue, mercy--what hurt like hell? lol a very nice contest entry and a very strong piece of writing. I think you'll do quite well with this entry, my friend.
REggie
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Sue, mercy--what hurt like hell? lol a very nice contest entry and a very strong piece of writing. I think you'll do quite well with this entry, my friend.
REggie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Well, I didn't want to bore anyone with the details, but one day when I was visiting some of my folks down in Tennessee, I went into the barn and wouldn't you know it?? I stepped on a damned rusty nail. Hurt like HELL!!!! Well, I expected the pain to last for only a few weeks. Then, found out I have Lockjaw. So, denial didn't help me one bit. Shoulda got the tetanus shot. "So I keep saying". :-o
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue
I know where you're coming from. I still hurt occasionally, and it was 24 years ago...the bitch! LOL
Beautiful presntation and subtle, ironic expression.
Top stuff!
Good luck n love, Ray xx
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Hi, Sue
I know where you're coming from. I still hurt occasionally, and it was 24 years ago...the bitch! LOL
Beautiful presntation and subtle, ironic expression.
Top stuff!
Good luck n love, Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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LMAO!! As I always say, "you crack me up." Being a bit melodramatic here, but it's the "lost cohesive family" thing that hurts. (but him? what a numero uno prick!) LOL!!! Hey, this 15 word free verse thingy AIN'T easy! Thanks for your ace review. Sue :-))
Comment from Jazh
There is definitely heartbreak in this one - well done, I enjoyed it. You amaze me with your ability to say so much in just a couple of lines. I love the last line, which clearly contradicts the one before. Good luck with it. :)
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There is definitely heartbreak in this one - well done, I enjoyed it. You amaze me with your ability to say so much in just a couple of lines. I love the last line, which clearly contradicts the one before. Good luck with it. :)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from yamazakura
Hello Sixteezkid, "Denial" entered in the Best Short Poem love contest requiring a poem of 15 words is well conceived.
The central power of this poem is evoked in your subtle use if iron which emerges in your final statement:
~So I keep saying
This line balanced against your opening words and the title, "Denial" give an intense and ironic twist to the poem. Your use of irony exhibits a high degree of rhetorical skill.
Your use of the graphic displaying the tragedy & comedy drama masks also are a graphic exhibit the contains the ironic aspect of the poem in graphic form. Additionally, the colors chosen for the background and incorporated in the mask graphic seem appropriate the atmosphere of the poem.
Well done!
Denial by Sixteezkid
yamazakura
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Hello Sixteezkid, "Denial" entered in the Best Short Poem love contest requiring a poem of 15 words is well conceived.
The central power of this poem is evoked in your subtle use if iron which emerges in your final statement:
~So I keep saying
This line balanced against your opening words and the title, "Denial" give an intense and ironic twist to the poem. Your use of irony exhibits a high degree of rhetorical skill.
Your use of the graphic displaying the tragedy & comedy drama masks also are a graphic exhibit the contains the ironic aspect of the poem in graphic form. Additionally, the colors chosen for the background and incorporated in the mask graphic seem appropriate the atmosphere of the poem.
Well done!
Denial by Sixteezkid
yamazakura
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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yamazakura, I certainly appreciate your close read of this poem. So glad you picked up on the irony and duality. And glad you felt the artwork choice befitting. Thank you for your most kind compliments and review. With respect and regards, Sue
Comment from adewpearl
So I keep saying - well, that line says it all - this short poem about the sorrows of lost love packs quite a punch, Sue.
Good luck in the contest, Brooke
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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So I keep saying - well, that line says it all - this short poem about the sorrows of lost love packs quite a punch, Sue.
Good luck in the contest, Brooke
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Was wondering if that line would come across as intended. Although, I never have doubt that you never miss a thing! Thanks for the great review, Brooke. Sue :-)
Comment from Bard Constantine
Though short, it says a lot. I agree with the sentiment. Thought we deny our pain, it lingers longer than we'd like to admit. Nice job.
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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Though short, it says a lot. I agree with the sentiment. Thought we deny our pain, it lingers longer than we'd like to admit. Nice job.
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Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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Yes, it rears up its ugly head once in awhile. A reminder not needed. Thanks for your very kind review. Sue