CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Brandenpaul
So sorry for your lost Sue. So many good writings come from the heart and so many great ones comes from heartbreak such as losing a loved one. Good luck in the contest, you did a great job.
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So sorry for your lost Sue. So many good writings come from the heart and so many great ones comes from heartbreak such as losing a loved one. Good luck in the contest, you did a great job.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from Tedisking
Good Job, I enjoyed it very much. Not that I enjoyed your misery but what I am trying to say is I enjoyed the way you channeled you misery into words so that others could understand what you feel, for this is the reason why we write.
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Good Job, I enjoyed it very much. Not that I enjoyed your misery but what I am trying to say is I enjoyed the way you channeled you misery into words so that others could understand what you feel, for this is the reason why we write.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from dportwood
Sad poem, yet a happy remembrance of your father. i like the doublet construction of the poem and the rhyming scheme. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Duane
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Sad poem, yet a happy remembrance of your father. i like the doublet construction of the poem and the rhyming scheme. Well done and good luck in the contest.
Duane
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from Jean Lutz
Perfect timing for a sad poem in remembrance of one you loved. Yet it holds beautiful memories and that he lives on in your heart. Here's wishing you the best with this entry.
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Perfect timing for a sad poem in remembrance of one you loved. Yet it holds beautiful memories and that he lives on in your heart. Here's wishing you the best with this entry.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from bkrighter
This is a very nice memorial to your father. It is certainly a sad poem, addressing, aas it does, your feelings at your loss. The feelings will lose their sharpness over time, but never go away. It will be fifteen years on May 4, but there are still times, when I really wish I could hear my dad's voice or see him sitting in a favorite chair. Still, we at least have memories. Good work.
Steve
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This is a very nice memorial to your father. It is certainly a sad poem, addressing, aas it does, your feelings at your loss. The feelings will lose their sharpness over time, but never go away. It will be fifteen years on May 4, but there are still times, when I really wish I could hear my dad's voice or see him sitting in a favorite chair. Still, we at least have memories. Good work.
Steve
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from Rottie
I am so sorry for your loss. Your poem clearly shows how much you loved him. I say that because I didn't meet mine until I was 16 and only a handful of times there after. Sometimes I wonder if I had turned out a little better if I had one.
Thanks for sharing!
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I am so sorry for your loss. Your poem clearly shows how much you loved him. I say that because I didn't meet mine until I was 16 and only a handful of times there after. Sometimes I wonder if I had turned out a little better if I had one.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from jadedgemini2
This definitely classifies as a sad poem; I'm very sorry for your loss. The poem itself was rather good. I found it flowed nicely had a good rhyming scheme and was extremely heartfelt (which I enjoy that kind of reading very much, ones that mean something). I didn't find any flaws to speak of.
Great job and best of luck!!!!
Jaded:)
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This definitely classifies as a sad poem; I'm very sorry for your loss. The poem itself was rather good. I found it flowed nicely had a good rhyming scheme and was extremely heartfelt (which I enjoy that kind of reading very much, ones that mean something). I didn't find any flaws to speak of.
Great job and best of luck!!!!
Jaded:)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful piece. Somehow, i think you managed to keep the sadness that goes with death out of these lines. At least i saw it like a celebration of life. kudos
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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This is a beautiful piece. Somehow, i think you managed to keep the sadness that goes with death out of these lines. At least i saw it like a celebration of life. kudos
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2009
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I guess I wanted to imply sadness because I didn't want to write a long, drawn-out piece. Wanted it very simple without discussing tears, etc. Red roses were his favorite flower and that is what was in abundance at his funeral. But, you are right...it is also a celebration of his life. Thank you for your lovely words and review. Sue
Comment from moosegal
Indeed sad and deeply touching. The first anniversary must be the worst. Your dad would be proud. Very good job *sniff, sniff, looks for kleenex*
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Indeed sad and deeply touching. The first anniversary must be the worst. Your dad would be proud. Very good job *sniff, sniff, looks for kleenex*
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009
Comment from KYPollard/El Gato
Your poem really brought me down. But, that is how it should be, I guess. It was my pleasure to read your contribution to this contest. Good luck.
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Your poem really brought me down. But, that is how it should be, I guess. It was my pleasure to read your contribution to this contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2009