CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from glacierbabe
Very interesting and very well written. The rythm and ryhme work great. It was easy to read, though I must confess I don't have a full understanding of what it says. I still enjoyed reading it. :)
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Very interesting and very well written. The rythm and ryhme work great. It was easy to read, though I must confess I don't have a full understanding of what it says. I still enjoyed reading it. :)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from rhymelord
A beautiful, well balanced poem, in the usual excellent rhyme and metre, by which all your work can be judged. A well expressed allegory of introspective self doubt, I hope it does not reflect any recent sadness in your life.
Regards
Reg
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A beautiful, well balanced poem, in the usual excellent rhyme and metre, by which all your work can be judged. A well expressed allegory of introspective self doubt, I hope it does not reflect any recent sadness in your life.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Great last line; you describe so well the way one feels when that reliable strength seems shaky in new circumstances. It is a startling occurrence, but survivors are what they are, and you are one. :)
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Great last line; you describe so well the way one feels when that reliable strength seems shaky in new circumstances. It is a startling occurrence, but survivors are what they are, and you are one. :)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
We should all be able to identify with this beautifully written poem. The years go by so fast, and it's easy to pass opportunities. We often wonder if we can still meet goals we set so long ago. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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We should all be able to identify with this beautifully written poem. The years go by so fast, and it's easy to pass opportunities. We often wonder if we can still meet goals we set so long ago. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from BethShelby
This poem flow beautifully. It has very natural rhymes and rhythm that is excellent and what is says is easily understood. Sometimes we all feel we are losing the strength and resolve we once had. I think you are too young to feel it as keenly as I do but have said it well.
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This poem flow beautifully. It has very natural rhymes and rhythm that is excellent and what is says is easily understood. Sometimes we all feel we are losing the strength and resolve we once had. I think you are too young to feel it as keenly as I do but have said it well.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
Oh, there you are. I was wondering if you'd gone on vacation, HA! I sense a sadness in your poem, as beautiful as it is. Of course I must tell you my favorite part: "So foreign, these dualities The twain cannot agree" is the perfect way to sum up the feeling of fighting with oneself.
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Oh, there you are. I was wondering if you'd gone on vacation, HA! I sense a sadness in your poem, as beautiful as it is. Of course I must tell you my favorite part: "So foreign, these dualities The twain cannot agree" is the perfect way to sum up the feeling of fighting with oneself.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from amada
This is a great poem in introspection, and I like it because you use fresh words, I don't see any cliches. My fav phrase is "But, as of late, a sense of loss..." A very poignant work.
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This is a great poem in introspection, and I like it because you use fresh words, I don't see any cliches. My fav phrase is "But, as of late, a sense of loss..." A very poignant work.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Very well written piece, not hard to follow. a very good write and a wonderful take on life. very well done I love the form too, keep up the good work an powerful poetic There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
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Very well written piece, not hard to follow. a very good write and a wonderful take on life. very well done I love the form too, keep up the good work an powerful poetic There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
I liked the way you put elements in opposition to emphasize your quandary. I especially admired the phrases "from birth to giving birth" and "drops of past resolve". The self-doubt resonates so well in the picture you chose, as well.
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I liked the way you put elements in opposition to emphasize your quandary. I especially admired the phrases "from birth to giving birth" and "drops of past resolve". The self-doubt resonates so well in the picture you chose, as well.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from spellbound
Excellent poem taking us from youth to age.
Very emotional.
I really like this line: My old endurance fights this change-this is so true.
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Excellent poem taking us from youth to age.
Very emotional.
I really like this line: My old endurance fights this change-this is so true.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009