CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from NightWriter
"Melancholy Way" is a well written poem with perfect rhythm and rhyming from beginning to end. Depression is certainly this and more. For some, it's uncontrollable and even unknowing. It's chemical, it's biological, it depletes energy and robs resources. It's a virus, a bug, a menace. For some though, medicines can help restore the communication in the brain to relieve some of it. Foods like beets and fish help too. Well written poem.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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"Melancholy Way" is a well written poem with perfect rhythm and rhyming from beginning to end. Depression is certainly this and more. For some, it's uncontrollable and even unknowing. It's chemical, it's biological, it depletes energy and robs resources. It's a virus, a bug, a menace. For some though, medicines can help restore the communication in the brain to relieve some of it. Foods like beets and fish help too. Well written poem.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Thanks for picking out the number one food that I do loathe! Beets! HA! I never heard of that one before. Will have to look up its nutrition value online. My mother certainly loves 'em. Yeah, if you understood this poem, you know that evil menace. Thanks for your generous review and great comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from FredCollingwood
I've heard that depression increases during wonter months and wanes during springtime. I love the rhyme scheme. Great job.
Fred
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I've heard that depression increases during wonter months and wanes during springtime. I love the rhyme scheme. Great job.
Fred
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
Comment from Arkine
Been there, it's not fun. I remember during the day I just wanted to stay in the house, not go outside to do anything. At night I just wanted to sleep, wanted to be left alone. It's taken a long time but I think things are better now. I'm not reluctant to go outside, nor do I mind folks being around...most of the time. ;) Great job on this poem, and an intriguing picture to go with it. Fits very well.
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Been there, it's not fun. I remember during the day I just wanted to stay in the house, not go outside to do anything. At night I just wanted to sleep, wanted to be left alone. It's taken a long time but I think things are better now. I'm not reluctant to go outside, nor do I mind folks being around...most of the time. ;) Great job on this poem, and an intriguing picture to go with it. Fits very well.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Evening Sue - This is a great poem. It captures the pain and hopelessness of depression in a well-written form. The rhyming is consistant and the words create a vivid picture for the reader.
Great work - sherry
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Evening Sue - This is a great poem. It captures the pain and hopelessness of depression in a well-written form. The rhyming is consistant and the words create a vivid picture for the reader.
Great work - sherry
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Sherry, thank you for your very kind review and compliments. I always appreciate your close reads and reviews. With regards, Sue
Comment from fictionwriter
What a sad state to be in. I hope that there are a very few people who actually feel that way. I want to give them light and happiness. Great job.
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What a sad state to be in. I hope that there are a very few people who actually feel that way. I want to give them light and happiness. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
Comment from K-Patrick
I had to think on this one a bit. Not your usual cheery, bubbly stuff, but just as masterfully done.Unfortunately, the subject of depression is very real and can stick us in a deep rut.
The rhyme was superb and the flow was perfect. The words painted a gray time. I think you a accomplished it.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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I had to think on this one a bit. Not your usual cheery, bubbly stuff, but just as masterfully done.Unfortunately, the subject of depression is very real and can stick us in a deep rut.
The rhyme was superb and the flow was perfect. The words painted a gray time. I think you a accomplished it.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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K-Patrick, hoping I'm "bubbly" in a few days and can reflect that in another work. Thank you so much for your very generous review and kind remarks. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from rhymelord
Sue, As usual, a startling display of word choice, rhyme and metre and, in particular, I particularly admire the rhyme scheme and the drop to a dimeter in you last lines. It really drives the points home. Can't find a thing wrong, Dammit! LOL (Do I really need to say that to you? By now, I hope you have learned to expect my ribbing). Anyway,
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2009
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Sue, As usual, a startling display of word choice, rhyme and metre and, in particular, I particularly admire the rhyme scheme and the drop to a dimeter in you last lines. It really drives the points home. Can't find a thing wrong, Dammit! LOL (Do I really need to say that to you? By now, I hope you have learned to expect my ribbing). Anyway,
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2009
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Damnit, Rhymelord! I was counting on you to find at least one nit! You've let me down - LOL!! Thank you for your comments on word choice. I strive for that. Thank you for your lovely review and compliments. Always, Sue
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Keep writing. The hyena waits to gnaw upon the skeleton of the slightest error, even if merely to justify it's existence. I hunger!!!!!
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The lions are competing with you!
Comment from glacierbabe
The rythm is great. It is a very clear description of depression. You very effectively show melancholy. It is wonderfully written. :)
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The rythm is great. It is a very clear description of depression. You very effectively show melancholy. It is wonderfully written. :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
Comment from Minglement
Unfortunately, we all must go through some dark time, as you describe so poignantly, here. Your descriptions are very evocative, any your illustration and color mood perfect, too. Take care,
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Unfortunately, we all must go through some dark time, as you describe so poignantly, here. Your descriptions are very evocative, any your illustration and color mood perfect, too. Take care,
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
Comment from Poetic Friend
Wow, Sue, you persoinfied depression so well! The sadness practically screams from the computer screen.
Many people have traveled "melancholy way." My prayer is that they find a way out.
Excellent usage of metphors.
Another great one from your pen.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Wow, Sue, you persoinfied depression so well! The sadness practically screams from the computer screen.
Many people have traveled "melancholy way." My prayer is that they find a way out.
Excellent usage of metphors.
Another great one from your pen.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2009
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Poetic Friend, your review and compliments are very much appreciated. With regards, Sue