CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
great artwork with a powerful impact;
this is creative and what many people attempt until the pain of the past rears it's ugly head:
"Ensuring they were sterilized
I kept them stitched and sanitized
Before too long they lay benign
All buried deep, without a sign"
touching:
"Exposed! A fraud. I'm weak, not strong
For now, not sure where I belong
Behind these doors, I keep them closed
In isolation, self-imposed"
I suggest that forgiveness is the way out :-) well done!
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great artwork with a powerful impact;
this is creative and what many people attempt until the pain of the past rears it's ugly head:
"Ensuring they were sterilized
I kept them stitched and sanitized
Before too long they lay benign
All buried deep, without a sign"
touching:
"Exposed! A fraud. I'm weak, not strong
For now, not sure where I belong
Behind these doors, I keep them closed
In isolation, self-imposed"
I suggest that forgiveness is the way out :-) well done!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue....another fine poem from your talented pen. The picture you chose to enhance your words is haunting and hard not to look at. Sometimes our past sins or mistakes come home to haunt us and I think that is your message here. I feel the pathos in the written lines and what might lie between them. I do like this piece and guess I am prone to poems that are dramatic like this one....well done....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue....another fine poem from your talented pen. The picture you chose to enhance your words is haunting and hard not to look at. Sometimes our past sins or mistakes come home to haunt us and I think that is your message here. I feel the pathos in the written lines and what might lie between them. I do like this piece and guess I am prone to poems that are dramatic like this one....well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from sherrygreywolf
A beautifully written and insightful poem. Everyone seems to have those secrets from their past that can pop up at the most inconvenient and unexpected times to slap us in the face. The picture works extremely well with your words. I didn't see any problems. Good work, Sue.
have a great day - sherry
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A beautifully written and insightful poem. Everyone seems to have those secrets from their past that can pop up at the most inconvenient and unexpected times to slap us in the face. The picture works extremely well with your words. I didn't see any problems. Good work, Sue.
have a great day - sherry
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from mushroom
well it comes across as someone who has old ghosts to lay to rest, but it seems to me that there would be no need to hide away it's better to face things, love the artwork too
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well it comes across as someone who has old ghosts to lay to rest, but it seems to me that there would be no need to hide away it's better to face things, love the artwork too
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from lkatka
This poem has a consistent flow and reads well. I can really relate to the ideas and feelings expressed within. Your words have sense of wit and express insightful reflection.
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This poem has a consistent flow and reads well. I can really relate to the ideas and feelings expressed within. Your words have sense of wit and express insightful reflection.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Minglement
In this short poem, you manage to beautifully portray the conflict we all can identify with. It isn't always easy, but you keep trying. Great job. PS - I hope you don't really smoke. You have to take better care of yourself than that. Hugs -
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In this short poem, you manage to beautifully portray the conflict we all can identify with. It isn't always easy, but you keep trying. Great job. PS - I hope you don't really smoke. You have to take better care of yourself than that. Hugs -
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
I cannot say i really understand the story this poem is trying to tell. However, i like the way it reads, the nice rhymes and perfect rhythm. kudos
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I cannot say i really understand the story this poem is trying to tell. However, i like the way it reads, the nice rhymes and perfect rhythm. kudos
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
I'm reading your poem and feeling the words are coming out of my mind. I can't believe how exactly the same I felt for 8 years. I am now taking a medication that lets me be my old happy self. The poem is excellent. The words all easily understood. Great command of the language. Great rhyme, great rhythm. Brilliant!!
Sincerely
Delora PS Hope you feel better than the end of it.
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I'm reading your poem and feeling the words are coming out of my mind. I can't believe how exactly the same I felt for 8 years. I am now taking a medication that lets me be my old happy self. The poem is excellent. The words all easily understood. Great command of the language. Great rhyme, great rhythm. Brilliant!!
Sincerely
Delora PS Hope you feel better than the end of it.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from bard owl
YOu describe memories that create melancholia's prison. Such thought-provoking words this poem creates in my mind. And probably in the mind of all who read this post. For all of us have memories we want to suppress that seem to never, truly die. The flow in this poem made it a smooth read. Excellent writing. Blessings, Linda
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YOu describe memories that create melancholia's prison. Such thought-provoking words this poem creates in my mind. And probably in the mind of all who read this post. For all of us have memories we want to suppress that seem to never, truly die. The flow in this poem made it a smooth read. Excellent writing. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from carolm5415
This is excellent. Our past experiences can shape our lives forever. At 5, my father yelled at me for accidentally bumping my brother when he was putting a log on the fire. I reacted with tears. My father in a rage spanked me furiously and I have never been able to trust a man to this day. On that day, I realized that no one was on my side and I gave up trying. I have never told anyone this before.
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This is excellent. Our past experiences can shape our lives forever. At 5, my father yelled at me for accidentally bumping my brother when he was putting a log on the fire. I reacted with tears. My father in a rage spanked me furiously and I have never been able to trust a man to this day. On that day, I realized that no one was on my side and I gave up trying. I have never told anyone this before.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009