CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Roisin
A beautiful senryu Sue, making us think of those casualties of war. Your words blend together wonderfully and the picture is amazing.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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A beautiful senryu Sue, making us think of those casualties of war. Your words blend together wonderfully and the picture is amazing.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Yeah, I saw this photo and just had to write about it. Very heart-breaking. Thanks much for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
Your notes are worryin ta say the least. A cowardly and heartless deployment of explosives. If surviving, the poor victims have a lifetime of struggle and pain ahead of them. Also mental anguish as the scars will never heal, nor will the limbs. I wish them every comfort and bravery in dealing with things. Ray xx
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Hi, Sue.
Your notes are worryin ta say the least. A cowardly and heartless deployment of explosives. If surviving, the poor victims have a lifetime of struggle and pain ahead of them. Also mental anguish as the scars will never heal, nor will the limbs. I wish them every comfort and bravery in dealing with things. Ray xx
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Yes, I saw this photo and really felt like writing something about it. They survive and must go through so much to find themselves again. Heart-rending. Thanks for your kind review, Ray
Comment from fayesh
I just found this a bit troubling in its reasoning. The IED was triumphant in that the device stole the natural legs. No triumph here, just making the best of a horrible loss. Then again, the triumph could be the soldier survived with his life.
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I just found this a bit troubling in its reasoning. The IED was triumphant in that the device stole the natural legs. No triumph here, just making the best of a horrible loss. Then again, the triumph could be the soldier survived with his life.
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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The triumph is that he actually survived and then went through a year of physical therapy after getting his new legs.
Then, I said "bittersweet triumph". Not defending my poem here. Defending the soldiers. They would call it triumphant that they accomplished this. So many have.
In a much smaller way, we all go through life and get hurt and get back up again. To say that we aren't triumphant in "not giving up" is wrong. To look at it on the flip side would be:
double-amputee
defeated with no hope
So, I really have to stand by the soldiers on this one. But thanks much for your review.
Sue
Comment from jaeladarling
Thank you for sharing the background information along with this emotionally charged poem. It is so sad when people lose limbs - and even lives - from these bombs. I have heard of many people embracing their new way of life, but it devastates some.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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Thank you for sharing the background information along with this emotionally charged poem. It is so sad when people lose limbs - and even lives - from these bombs. I have heard of many people embracing their new way of life, but it devastates some.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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For sure, this is something you never fully get over. Totally life altering. And then asking, "For what?
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For sure, this is something you never fully get over. Totally life altering. And then asking, "For what?" That's very sad. I was just thinking of them and decided to write about it. Thanks very much for your review. Sue
Comment from amada
I understand that a senrye is like an haiku but referring to the human condition, instead of nature. You have wrote a perfect example of a great senryu.
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I understand that a senrye is like an haiku but referring to the human condition, instead of nature. You have wrote a perfect example of a great senryu.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009
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amada, I really appreciate your very kind review and compliment. With regards, Sue
Comment from foxtale
Creates teh imagery without the photo, and that is good. Senryu Haiku is hard to write.
This works. It could also work exchanging the first with the last stanza. That, I think, creates a more powerful haiku moment.
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Creates teh imagery without the photo, and that is good. Senryu Haiku is hard to write.
This works. It could also work exchanging the first with the last stanza. That, I think, creates a more powerful haiku moment.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2009
Comment from Jazh
What a graphic image of war this is. A great poem, Sue. We don't often see the living casualties of war - in some ways they and their families suffer more than the dead soldiers. Bittersweet indeed. Cheers. :)
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What a graphic image of war this is. A great poem, Sue. We don't often see the living casualties of war - in some ways they and their families suffer more than the dead soldiers. Bittersweet indeed. Cheers. :)
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2009