Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

I liked the piture that this poem brings to mind. It flowed well and the picture you picked is great. I marvel at it also. Well done.

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Comment from jeslaf

Excellent

Hey Sue, I loved your use of 'illuminance'--it rolls off the tongue and fits the syllable count in one gloriously delicious word. Like the contrasting harmony and turbulence, too. Good one...good luck, and congrats on your recent win! :)

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2009

jeslaf, thanks for saying you like that word. I really loved it also! Thanks so much for your very kind review (and your congrats). :-)) Sue

Comment from Roisin

Excellent

Another lovely minute, Sue, with great rhymes. You've chosen an interesting subject and made it into a great poem. I really like it. Good luck in the contest.

Warm regards.

Roisin

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Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent form in structure, rhyme and iambic meter - the meter messes some people up, but yours is perfect. You do a beautiful job of describing both the physical beauty of the milky way and the mysteries of its vastness - great word choices like glorious universe - turbulence/illuminance.
This is gorgeous!! Brooke

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Comment from howling harp

Excellent

great job. i loved the flow except for one little part in the middle verse. not sure what it was it just didn't flow as well as the rest. still loved it.

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2009

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009

I went back to check on the iambics, and they seemed okay. But, thanks for bringing it up. I'll have another look. And thanks for your very kind review. With regards, Sue

reply by howling harp on 11-Feb-2009

i am a rooky sue. but i do try to ell the truth as i see it becasue that might help adn vanity is such a chore isn't it?

reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009

I thanked you for your comments that may have been helpful. And took no offense. Was the only way I learned. Not quite sure what to make of your "vanity" comment.

Comment from findingmyroom

Excellent

Stunning concept rendered in all its glory "breathtaking sight" indeed. The smallness of man in the face of the universe is a universal theme. Just one tiny problem in your piece: It's should be Its... :-/

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009

I was always a stickler for the it's/its thing. Now, I've become a regular offender! HA! Thanks for your great review and comments. Regards, Sue

Comment from amada

Excellent

A very well written Minute Poem for this prompt of the day. I like the style because it's fresh and the subject, the Universe, is a mysterious and everlasting wonder.

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009

amada, to ponder the Universe is such a wonderful thing. Thank you for your compliments and very kind review. Regards, Sue

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Hello again Sue and what an enjoyable poe. It's very creative as well and keeps the reader's attention, great title and artwork as well. Loyd

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2009

Hi Loyd, thanks very much for your review. Glad you liked it. With regards, Sue

reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 11-Feb-2009

You are very welcome, Loyd