CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Gramma Kathy
I'm with you on this one. My kids are long grown, but I still miss them - and their kids, too.
Your rhythm and rhyme are impeccable, and I love the photo. The bouncy lilt is perfect for this nostagic poem, and your word pictures tug at my heart.
Thanks so much for sharing this.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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I'm with you on this one. My kids are long grown, but I still miss them - and their kids, too.
Your rhythm and rhyme are impeccable, and I love the photo. The bouncy lilt is perfect for this nostagic poem, and your word pictures tug at my heart.
Thanks so much for sharing this.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Great... now I'll get to go through missing grandkids one day! ha! Thank you for your lovely compliments and review. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from amada
This is a great poem, the memory of those kids are so precious. I smiled at your memories, the mispelled notes, and their deo-eyed eyes. Is that their picture?
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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This is a great poem, the memory of those kids are so precious. I smiled at your memories, the mispelled notes, and their deo-eyed eyes. Is that their picture?
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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No, just an image I grabbed off the net. But, sure does remind me of them. They loved swinging and I loved giving them pushes from behind while they ask to go 'higher'. Thank you so much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue :-)
Comment from Summer Falls
You've done it! Nailed it! The memories keep us smiling with a little tear in our eyes, doesn't it? You have done a great job with this poem. You are quite gifted, the way you make a reader feel what your words convey is amazing.
Rhymes are unforced, I didn't trip over any of the rhythm.
No revision needed. Beautiful.
Summer
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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You've done it! Nailed it! The memories keep us smiling with a little tear in our eyes, doesn't it? You have done a great job with this poem. You are quite gifted, the way you make a reader feel what your words convey is amazing.
Rhymes are unforced, I didn't trip over any of the rhythm.
No revision needed. Beautiful.
Summer
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Summer, I am so honored with your wonderful review! So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for your most lovely compliments and 'exceptional' rating. Goes right to my heart. Most sincerely, Sue :-))
Comment from bard owl
This poem is flawless done. The rhythm and rhyme are right on and the subject is one very close to my heart. I often dream that the boys are young again. I kept a lot of those crayon and colored paper valentines and enjoy a walk through the halls of nostalgia they create for me. Excellent, Sue. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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This poem is flawless done. The rhythm and rhyme are right on and the subject is one very close to my heart. I often dream that the boys are young again. I kept a lot of those crayon and colored paper valentines and enjoy a walk through the halls of nostalgia they create for me. Excellent, Sue. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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It's a mixture of feelings, isn't it. But, thankfully, we do have those very full memories. Thank you so much for your lovely compliments and review. Always, Sue
Comment from Joan E.
How heartfelt and true, though I only have one son. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme and your use of childish phrases. Your black and white photo is dramatic. (Is anyone you know involved in the devastation in Australia?)
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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How heartfelt and true, though I only have one son. I enjoyed your rhyme scheme and your use of childish phrases. Your black and white photo is dramatic. (Is anyone you know involved in the devastation in Australia?)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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No, but I have relations where the fires are down in Victoria. The floods up in Queensland are much further north than other family. What a horrible time they've been having there. Thank you for asking. You are so fortunate to have your son near you. Wishing I had at least one of them close by - boo hoo. Thanks for your very generous review. With regards, Sue
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I wasn't even aware of the fires until "honeytree" wrote me about them on Saturday. She was getting ready to evacuate at the time; I've responded twice but haven't heard anything more from her. I can only hope that she was spared most of the tragedy.
-Joan
P.S. We see our son less frequently since he moved from Culver City to Downtown, Los Angeles, in order to be able to ride the train to work at the Disney Studios (he's a total train buff). However, it is still comforting to know he is rather nearby, and I think he feels the same way.
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I've just read that the Premier of Victoria said that 166 is now the death toll and they suspect the number is probably 200 now. And since the fires are far from being contained, they expect more. They are giving mandatory evacuations to entire areas, so that's probably why Honeytree left. Those bush fires can sweep through so fast. The hot summer winds come from the desert into Victoria. Of course, you know a lot about those kind of fires being in California.
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Yes, I know only too well about such threats--during the last Malibu wildfire we thought we might have to evacuate, but we were spared that additional torture again. But we also have periodic mud and rock slides and earthquakes--the price we pay to live in paradise.
I've heard that coupled with 120 degree temperature and drought, all the makings of a perfect storm, there was also arson in Australlia and 850 square miles have been consumed.
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Yet another masterpiece from your pen! I love your poetry. This really applies to me now as mine are mostly grown and flown the nest. It seems a lifetime ago they were at home doing all sorts of naughty (and noisy) things! You are so very talented. All the best to you. Kat
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Yet another masterpiece from your pen! I love your poetry. This really applies to me now as mine are mostly grown and flown the nest. It seems a lifetime ago they were at home doing all sorts of naughty (and noisy) things! You are so very talented. All the best to you. Kat
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Kat, I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. It does seem a lifetime ago and then sometimes the memories just come flooding back. Thank you so much for your lovely compliments and review. Always appreciated, Sue :-)
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
Great memories are hard to forget, but sometimes that's all we have. Unfortunately, unless you're like the woman who had 8 embroyo's implanted and had octuplets, memories are all we are left with of our children when they were children. Great work, Sue.
Reggie
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Sue,
Great memories are hard to forget, but sometimes that's all we have. Unfortunately, unless you're like the woman who had 8 embroyo's implanted and had octuplets, memories are all we are left with of our children when they were children. Great work, Sue.
Reggie
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Reg, I miss my babies being babies sometimes. But, I sure wouldn't want the memory of an octo-thingy! lol - Don't even get me started on that or I may have to write a protest poem about it. Ha! Thanks for your review :-)) Sue
Comment from rhymelord
Excellent expression, Sue and a charming subject. One nitpick I'm afraid. No matter how hard I try, I keep pronouncing "into" (Verse 2. Line 1) as a trochee and not an iamb. This may be my limey upbringing, but there it is. Now for the blind leading the woman with 20/20 vision, I think that a better line might be "They'd get into such mischief too". I have the knife ready to slash my wrists in anticipation of your reply. But, anyway,
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Excellent expression, Sue and a charming subject. One nitpick I'm afraid. No matter how hard I try, I keep pronouncing "into" (Verse 2. Line 1) as a trochee and not an iamb. This may be my limey upbringing, but there it is. Now for the blind leading the woman with 20/20 vision, I think that a better line might be "They'd get into such mischief too". I have the knife ready to slash my wrists in anticipation of your reply. But, anyway,
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 09-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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Reg, get that razor out and pass it over to me! HA! I've been wrestling with that line for a whole day and you came up with the answer! YAY!!! Thank you SO much for putting so much thought into my poem to get it right! I had another line in mind, but yours was so much better. You Limey, you! HA! Thank you for such a great review and saving my arse! LOL! With regards, Sue :-))
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Dear Sue, Whew!! Thank God. I can't stand the sight of blood - especially mine. Glad I could help. Regards, Reg
Comment from Firefly54
A delightful poem that makes the reader think back to a time we all miss.
"How precious was each crayon line
On hand-made cards to show their love
With misspelled words like Valintine
And "Yur the best Mom from abuv" "
Loved that stanza!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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A delightful poem that makes the reader think back to a time we all miss.
"How precious was each crayon line
On hand-made cards to show their love
With misspelled words like Valintine
And "Yur the best Mom from abuv" "
Loved that stanza!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2009
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firefly, so glad you enjoyed this poem. And thank you for your very generous review. With regards, Sue
Comment from MJMuraco
You couldn't have said it better. your poem was sweet and I can really share your emotions. I think of the children's younger days when I see kids playing and I truly miss those days sometimes. Nice work.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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You couldn't have said it better. your poem was sweet and I can really share your emotions. I think of the children's younger days when I see kids playing and I truly miss those days sometimes. Nice work.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2009
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Yes, when I see some kids at a park playing...whoa! don't the memories come flying back. Sometimes I wish for just a day with them at that age. Thanks so much for your lovely review. Am glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue