Comment from skye

Excellent

What a beautiful poem of love throughout a life.
Your lines are well crafted, taking the reader from early to late love.
Very well done.
Would that every love affair last a lifetime.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Skye, thank you for your lovely review. Yes, don't we all pine for that comfortable love. Again, thank you. With regards, Sue

Comment from jeslaf

Excellent

This is beautiful, the way you take the reader through your romantic stages, implying tastefully the erotic and mixing it with the pride and bond shared in raising so many children. Excellent... but doesn't speak of divorce, as one of your other pieces recently did. I'm confused: was the divorce piece biographical--it sounded so, but this one leaves the reader with a satisfied feeling, that you stayed the course. Just wondering, not my business for sure. :)

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

No, the divorce poem is true. The thoughts and words of this sonnet were easy for me think of because that was how both of us thought it was going to be. We did live the first and second stanza. But, the 3rd was not ours. Not difficult to imagine what could have been, though. I very much over what happened to us, but it sure would have been nice, as a family is the best part of life. To enjoy the adult children together and not separately. Thank you so much for such a lovely review. Yours, Sue

reply by jeslaf on 28-Jan-2009

Thanks for sharing, Sue. Sorry you two didn't make it to the final stretch. I wonder at times if I will, as we're still raising 'em...time will tell. Blessings and hugs, jeslaf :)

Comment from jshep

Excellent

What a beautiful description of soulmates, Sue. Alove story that worked and is still working- which in this day is an accomplishment. Beautiful descriptions and the execution of the sonnet is perfect IMHO. May the flame always keep burning. Excellent job and no suggestions for improvement on this well written poem. Joyce

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Joyce, what a lovely review. I am so glad you enjoyed this. I do love a sonnet! Thank you for your great review and very kind compliments. So appreciated...Sue

Comment from DreamChaser

Excellent

This is what love's all about. You've done a wonderful job of relating the deep, comfortable, everlasting feelings of love. We should all be so lucky to have this. Heartwarming verse.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

DreamChaser, I like the way you put that: "deep, comfortable, everlasting". So glad the words came through like that. Thank you very much for your lovely review. With regards, Sue

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Sue,

Beautiful piece of writing, my friend. You tell this story so strongly, yet so gently it touchs readers. Great descriptives throughout. Well done.

Reggie

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

I'm so glad you enjoyed this one, Reggie. Thanks for your very kind review. And your compliments, which mean a lot to me. Always, Sue

Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr

Excellent

Good morning poet friend Sue.
This was a beautiful sonnet and reveals a wonderful romantic part of your personality. Good luck in the contest. Loyd

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Loyd, thank you very much for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue

Comment from Roisin

Excellent

Hi Sue,

This is just beautiful. It's such a soft, romantic poem, with wonderful words of love and appreciation for your family. Perfect rhyme and meter too. I wonder if 'our darlings' would sound better than 'the darlings'. Just a suggestion, but I see there's strict rules about the meter and maybe it would interefere with the 'da dum' thing. It wouldn't be my strongest point. Good luck in the contest anyway - a great contender.

Warm regards.

Roisin

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Hi Roisin, I'll have a look at that. I see what you mean. But,maybe I wrote that because I used the word "our" a lot. But thanks so much for the keen eye! Thank you very much for your lovely review. So glad you enjoyed it. With regards, Sue

Comment from ulster3

Excellent

Hi sixteez.
You've done it again. This is a perfect sonnet as far as I can see. Excellent meter, rhyme and a wonderful sentiment. You should rank well in this contest.
Fondly, Rebecca

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Rebecca, I do love a sonnet. Thank you so much for your lovely review and compliments! With warmest regards, Sue

reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009

Rebecca, I do love a sonnet. Thank you so much for your lovely review and compliments! With warmest regards, Sue

Comment from Perp Ihebom

Excellent

This is a nice poem that chronicles the various stages in the life of a marriage. This particular model you chose seems to be the ideal, in which the embers never wane throughout life. well done.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009

Comment from Minglement

Excellent

Oh, this is absolutely love. You've penned a great, romantic poem well-expressing the ebb and flow of the passion in a long-term relationship and the message that love can last. Just lovely.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2009