CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 86 "In Song or Silence"A collection of poetry
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Comment from Dave-Aranda-Richards
Good job. Very strong and moving narrative with the writing prompt as your guide. Loved the oceans scene, and was moved knowing how a voice carries on the edge of that great water.
Dave
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Good job. Very strong and moving narrative with the writing prompt as your guide. Loved the oceans scene, and was moved knowing how a voice carries on the edge of that great water.
Dave
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Dave, very nice comment on the "voice carries on the edge of the water". What a great compliment. Thank you very much for your kind review! :-)) Sue
Comment from Brutiboy
What I really enjoyed about this was that I wasn't really noticing that it rhymed until I read the authors note. For me, I think that is a good thing, because your poem was natural and sounded like it was "meant to be." I am very impressed with your ability to do
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rhyming. As you probably already know, this is the hardest form of rhyme. I congratulate you on your efforts to touch the hearts of many with your thorough description of your muse. Excellent work, and I look forward to seeing more of your poems in the future.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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What I really enjoyed about this was that I wasn't really noticing that it rhymed until I read the authors note. For me, I think that is a good thing, because your poem was natural and sounded like it was "meant to be." I am very impressed with your ability to do
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rhyming. As you probably already know, this is the hardest form of rhyme. I congratulate you on your efforts to touch the hearts of many with your thorough description of your muse. Excellent work, and I look forward to seeing more of your poems in the future.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Butiboy, what wonderful compliments that are so encouraging. Sonnets are beautiful and I do love the ABAB rhyme. Challenging, but very fulfilling. Thank you very much for this great review and your compliments. :-)) Sue
Comment from EdwardVal
This is a very beautiful piece and very true about true love. Often it can stretch miles and carry us through something you described well in this piece. I enjoyed the read and found no mistakes however I wanted to point out that you used Exact and non-exact rhyme here. Take Care
E'Val
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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This is a very beautiful piece and very true about true love. Often it can stretch miles and carry us through something you described well in this piece. I enjoyed the read and found no mistakes however I wanted to point out that you used Exact and non-exact rhyme here. Take Care
E'Val
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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E'Val, if you were referring to the word, "prayer", I did look it up and found it is also correct as a single syllable word (that's the only one I could find that you probably meant). But, I thank you for your very kind review, compliments and comment. With regards, Sue
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With exact and non-exact or off rhtme I was talking about the first stanza and part of another. exact rhyme is where the words end with the same letters. night/ light off rhyme is goodbye/ nigh these produce the same ending sound but are non-exact. I mentioned this to be sure you were aware of it, because often people try for exact rhyme and make slight mistakes. Take care and I hope this clears things up.
E'Val
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You learn something new every day!
I hope you did not think I was offended by your review. Not at all! I was just trying to guess what maybe you referred to. Thank you for teaching me. Yes, it is something to be aware of and I most certainly appreciate your highlighting this.
Respectfully,
Sue
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is really very good...
has a smooth flow to the
words, and to both rhythm
and rhyme - a great entry
for the contest.
Good luck to you,
Margaret.
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This is really very good...
has a smooth flow to the
words, and to both rhythm
and rhyme - a great entry
for the contest.
Good luck to you,
Margaret.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from mmichelle97219
Itis so very pretty. Of lte most of the sonnets I have read had ended with a loud thud, but this one carris the wonderful tone and lyrical quality down to the last word. Nice job.
Michelle
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Itis so very pretty. Of lte most of the sonnets I have read had ended with a loud thud, but this one carris the wonderful tone and lyrical quality down to the last word. Nice job.
Michelle
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a beautiful and well articulated poem. It contains some profound nuggets of truth that have universal applicability. I enjoyed reading it. kudos.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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This is a beautiful and well articulated poem. It contains some profound nuggets of truth that have universal applicability. I enjoyed reading it. kudos.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Helo Perp, so glad you enjoyed this sonnet. And thank you for your very kind review! Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Brandenpaul
I thought this was beautifully written. I won't even attempt a sonnet and you seem to pull it off so easily. good luck in the contest.
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I thought this was beautifully written. I won't even attempt a sonnet and you seem to pull it off so easily. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - You are masterful writing a storyline in such a structured format. I couldn't do it. Make sure your em-dashes look like em-dashes. Well written. I bow to your talent. Charlie
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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Sue - You are masterful writing a storyline in such a structured format. I couldn't do it. Make sure your em-dashes look like em-dashes. Well written. I bow to your talent. Charlie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2009
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uh-oh! You already taught me that and I messed up again! Use a hammer next time - HA! You have me blushing again, Charlie. Your compliments go straight to my heart. I sure do strive to get better and your encouragement has always been so appreciated. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from sara-beth
Wow girl, this is fabulous! I really love the formality of a sonnet, and you described your muse like a lover.....which I relate to because mine is....well I couldn't even begin to explain lest you think me crazy. But, writers are a little crazy, right? Anyway, great writing!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Wow girl, this is fabulous! I really love the formality of a sonnet, and you described your muse like a lover.....which I relate to because mine is....well I couldn't even begin to explain lest you think me crazy. But, writers are a little crazy, right? Anyway, great writing!
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Save that "crazy story" for me. Hold that though, cuz I want to hear about it one day! HA!! Thank you so much for your great review and compliments. Always appreciated, :-)) Sue
Comment from adewpearl
Bridges made of love will keep us nigh - that is a killer line!! With ease we both unfold also resonates with me because it captures so well that time in a relationship when the barriers are down and people do become "at ease" with each other, able to be intimate and vulnerable without any trouble or resistance. Nicely stated! Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Bridges made of love will keep us nigh - that is a killer line!! With ease we both unfold also resonates with me because it captures so well that time in a relationship when the barriers are down and people do become "at ease" with each other, able to be intimate and vulnerable without any trouble or resistance. Nicely stated! Brooke
Comment Written 22-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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You're SUCH a romantic, Brooke! Thank you for highlighting those lines you liked. And for your very kind review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue