Comment from Jnetgame

Excellent

Pretty good haiku. I'm not sure that your last line is really a satori though. What about "ambulance arrives"? Just a thought, of course.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009

I can't believe you suggested "ambulance arrives"! That was my original satori, but thought it may be a bit weak. I think I may change it back. Thanks so much for your feedback and input. Regards, Sue

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Sue,

Wow, you've really hit a home run with this sharp and very humorous writing, my friend. Great descriptives in the words you chose for your poem and made this a fantastic contest entry. Well done, Sue. Good luck in the contest.

Reggie

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009

Reggie, I'm always SO pleased when you like my poems. Love your visits! Thanks so much for this awesome review! :-)) Sue

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Sue.
This is great fun and I can well picture it. I stopped usin the knife after ten trips ta hospital, as I finally learned my lesson, LOL. Excellent.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx

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 Comment Written 05-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2009

LOL!! My actually saw my sister do this a few weeks ago and was horrified! I thought this practice was something of the past! HA!! Thanks for your review and well-wishes, Ray.... your friend, Sue