CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from okiboy
I loved this poem. The tempo was very smooth. And the part where it says: our burdens lift, they always do really came out strong. I enjoyed it very much. And really felt uplifted. Thanks!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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I loved this poem. The tempo was very smooth. And the part where it says: our burdens lift, they always do really came out strong. I enjoyed it very much. And really felt uplifted. Thanks!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hi okiboy, so glad you liked this! Thank you very much for your kind review and lovely remarks. With regards, Sue
Comment from Narina Menderlin
I really liked this poem. I like the subject of this poem and how you presented it. I also liked the rhymes you used. good job!
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I really liked this poem. I like the subject of this poem and how you presented it. I also liked the rhymes you used. good job!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Sixteezkid
excellent use of the Triolet form expressing your feelings of Hope with hope we also must also have Faith.
Thank you for sharing you poetic voice
Gert
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hello Sixteezkid
excellent use of the Triolet form expressing your feelings of Hope with hope we also must also have Faith.
Thank you for sharing you poetic voice
Gert
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Hi Gert, thank you for your most kind review and lovely remarks. I am very happy you liked it! :-)) Sue
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Sue, you are so welcome
Gert
Comment from adewpearl
What a soft and gentle triolet, and so life-affirming - the form suits the message well here - a good marriage of craft and content. Excellent cadence and rhyme and beautiful alliteration - delve down deep - there is much to recommend this!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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What a soft and gentle triolet, and so life-affirming - the form suits the message well here - a good marriage of craft and content. Excellent cadence and rhyme and beautiful alliteration - delve down deep - there is much to recommend this!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Brooke, as always, thank you for your insight and very specific comments. With warmest regards, Sue.
Comment from Josipher32
I was never a fan of triolets simply because I dislike all the repetition.
In line 1, you have a comma that separates two thoughts. In line four, you put a period to separate the thoughts. Pick one. Line seven also should be changed in punctuation, just so they are all uniform.
The rhyme scheme is perfect.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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I was never a fan of triolets simply because I dislike all the repetition.
In line 1, you have a comma that separates two thoughts. In line four, you put a period to separate the thoughts. Pick one. Line seven also should be changed in punctuation, just so they are all uniform.
The rhyme scheme is perfect.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Josipher, I hear what you're saying, but triolets are written with the same words in a line, but one can change the punctuation. It's classic. It makes each of the repeated lines take on a new meaning in relation to the previous or next line. Thank you very much for your great review and comments. With regards, Sue
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Okay, I didn't know that. I thought everything had to be the same.
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No problem. I just only recently learned this myself! :-)) Respectfully, Sue
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi again Sue,
I like this triolet. It is very inspiring and reassuring. I caught the pattern much more quickly this time.
Ray
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Hi again Sue,
I like this triolet. It is very inspiring and reassuring. I caught the pattern much more quickly this time.
Ray
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
Comment from Joan E.
The Triolet was a good vehicle for your poem about hope.
I enjoyed your fresh description of time as the great healer: As time, our friend, makes all brand new.
Thank you for sharing this powerful promise.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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The Triolet was a good vehicle for your poem about hope.
I enjoyed your fresh description of time as the great healer: As time, our friend, makes all brand new.
Thank you for sharing this powerful promise.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Joan E, so glad you enjoyed this little bit on hope. Gotta keep it within hands reach at all times! Thanks so much for your most kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from Roisin
This format sounds quite complicated to me but I love the poem. It sends out a clear message of hope. Your rhyme scheme is great and the words flow beautifully.
Roisin
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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This format sounds quite complicated to me but I love the poem. It sends out a clear message of hope. Your rhyme scheme is great and the words flow beautifully.
Roisin
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Roisin, thank you for your very kind review and lovely comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
It is true they always do, the sun eventually shines and our lives get back on track. Interesting style with the rhyme scheme and repetitive lines, it cannot of been easy I'm thinking, yet you have done it well, of course, another feather in your hat, I'll have to start calling you Pocahontas, Ha ha
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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It is true they always do, the sun eventually shines and our lives get back on track. Interesting style with the rhyme scheme and repetitive lines, it cannot of been easy I'm thinking, yet you have done it well, of course, another feather in your hat, I'll have to start calling you Pocahontas, Ha ha
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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Or "Yankee Doodle Dandy"! HA!! Love writing in these formats. Gotta go hunt another one out and get tested! I know you got worn out on your last one. I'm not going to tax myself like that just yet - HA! Woops, you'd better go check that roast dinner in the oven. Thanks for your very kind review, Hitch. :-)) Sue
Comment from Susan E. Pennycuff
and yet another form from you...
you are just on a roll aren't you?
I say... keep going dear, your talent is shining
brightly and I enjoy the light you are emitting!
great poem here and well worth the read!
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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and yet another form from you...
you are just on a roll aren't you?
I say... keep going dear, your talent is shining
brightly and I enjoy the light you are emitting!
great poem here and well worth the read!
Comment Written 16-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2008
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And just when I thought I was out of words. Ha! Love trying out all the different formats. Thank you for your very generous review and most kind compliments. With warm regards, Sue