CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from mermaids
Excellent poem about depression, adequately describes it's impace, "senses numb" is so true. One can enter the world of how depression feels, well written.
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Excellent poem about depression, adequately describes it's impace, "senses numb" is so true. One can enter the world of how depression feels, well written.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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mermaids, thank you for your very kind review and your comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hi Sixteezkid,
You've touched on a topic with which I identify. Sadly, (no pun intended), some of my most creative moments occur when I find myself in a deep funk. I suddenly find myself looking at life from a different angle. I'm sure many others identify with the condition you describe. I like the way you end the poem.
"Senses numbed... crafty lies
In webs spun by my hands
Ought not feed their demands
Nor yield to dismay."
Ray
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Hi Sixteezkid,
You've touched on a topic with which I identify. Sadly, (no pun intended), some of my most creative moments occur when I find myself in a deep funk. I suddenly find myself looking at life from a different angle. I'm sure many others identify with the condition you describe. I like the way you end the poem.
"Senses numbed... crafty lies
In webs spun by my hands
Ought not feed their demands
Nor yield to dismay."
Ray
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Ray, it's during your "funk" that perhaps you can get in touch with your deepest emotions. Yes, many have identified with these words. I most certainly appreciate your kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from joan marie
A powerful and emotional write. As one who has suffered from this debilitating disease. It is so misunderstood. You have aptly described a mind losing the battle. joan marie
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A powerful and emotional write. As one who has suffered from this debilitating disease. It is so misunderstood. You have aptly described a mind losing the battle. joan marie
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Joan, Thank you for your very kind review. Yes, debilitating, it can be. But, hope is always there. It is not understood by anyone who has not lived with it. Not possible. I always just tell myself, "it's back and I accept that that is what's wrong; it's not "me". That is why I won't "yield". You know what I mean. With warmest regards, Sue
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A doctor told me to let myself be depressed because if I don't acknowledge it I can't fix what is making it happen. I never forgot that. jm
Comment from AlvinTEthington
You describe the apathy and loneliness of depression extremely well. There's a good juxtaposition of picture and poem, because that is what at least my mind feels like when I go through depression. Good alliteration in the last line. "Seeking day" sums it all up, for that is what I think all depressives hope for. Good work. We must not "yield to dismay", which is a wonderful way to end the poem.
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You describe the apathy and loneliness of depression extremely well. There's a good juxtaposition of picture and poem, because that is what at least my mind feels like when I go through depression. Good alliteration in the last line. "Seeking day" sums it all up, for that is what I think all depressives hope for. Good work. We must not "yield to dismay", which is a wonderful way to end the poem.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Alvin, I'm glad you saw the "hope" in the end of this poem. Each and every time there is a "down" time, it does not seem there is a way out, but there always is!! Yielding is not an option for me. I'm glad you read this and thank you for your kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from phild
I know you were going for depression and that came through, but a strong feeling of evilness also came through. Good writing with a very dark sense to it.
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I know you were going for depression and that came through, but a strong feeling of evilness also came through. Good writing with a very dark sense to it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Well, to me, depression is like evil incarnate, so maybe that was what came through. It is a dark place. But, I was feeling great when I wrote it! Go figure.... Thanks so much for your great review and specific comments. Much appreciated with regards, Sue
Comment from nukrz
You are so talented. your poetry, it has a darkness to it but yet some of it can be light. This one felt like tangled depression. Well done!
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You are so talented. your poetry, it has a darkness to it but yet some of it can be light. This one felt like tangled depression. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Nukrz, I really thank you for your very kind review and generous words. My work may have that dark side, and it's poetry that allows me to bring that part forward. Yet, I always have hope....always! With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from kassey
I think it is excellent work and in your author notes you put very clear count, I think that was a great idea. The poem is very good with great descriptions of depression
"Senses numbed...crafty lies'.
Excellent work Kay
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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I think it is excellent work and in your author notes you put very clear count, I think that was a great idea. The poem is very good with great descriptions of depression
"Senses numbed...crafty lies'.
Excellent work Kay
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Kassey, I've noticed how so many reviewers have identified with certain lines here. It's not a pretty picture, but it is good for others to know someone has tried to put words to something that sometimes can't be named. I know that I like it when people "understand".
Thank you for your very kind review and your comments are much appreciated.
With regards,
Sue
Comment from grassroots08
There is a lot of feeling in this poem that is spilt and getting through - great job getting across the emotion and feeling of this awful word. I thought you pretty much covered the mood of it. Don
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There is a lot of feeling in this poem that is spilt and getting through - great job getting across the emotion and feeling of this awful word. I thought you pretty much covered the mood of it. Don
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Don, very glad you read this work and I really appreciate your specific comments. Always a help to keep learning and growing. With regards, Sue
Comment from Scarlettdreams
I totally understand fighting off depression and I think many are right now with the recession and all. This is a well crafted write. Bravo
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I totally understand fighting off depression and I think many are right now with the recession and all. This is a well crafted write. Bravo
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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Scarlett, it is a fight at times. Hence, the final line. I thank you for reading this work and appreciate your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from mindseye
You did a great job fulfilling the acrostic form in a natural way. The opening line is the perfect starter to define what depression feels like. Good job!
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You did a great job fulfilling the acrostic form in a natural way. The opening line is the perfect starter to define what depression feels like. Good job!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2008
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mindseye, glad you liked this poem. Thank you for your very kind review and specific comments, as they are appreciated. Regards, Sue