CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from The Guardian
I do love the image and title of your tetractys. Enigma is such an apropos term for someone not understood. The visual presentation of your verse with the image creates this internal discomfort, not necessarily unpleasant. It makes me uncomfortable, as though there's a challenge presented to grasp that which eludes. A wonderful entry.
Best
Merle
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I do love the image and title of your tetractys. Enigma is such an apropos term for someone not understood. The visual presentation of your verse with the image creates this internal discomfort, not necessarily unpleasant. It makes me uncomfortable, as though there's a challenge presented to grasp that which eludes. A wonderful entry.
Best
Merle
Comment Written 27-Nov-2008
Comment from starkat
Enjoyed your tetracyts that's accompanied by your fascinating painting expressing the enigma. This piece invites the reader to explore and try to comprehend and understand the world of autism. Thanks for your authors notes. I would tend to write that ten syllable line with "different" spelled "diff'rent", to emphasize the two syllable aspect. Or, another way to write the last line would be to leave off the "How"...simply "Can we comprehend her different world?" (I think most writers see the word, "different" as three syllables)
I can see perhaps you will enjoy writing form poetry. So, look forwards to reading more of your work. There are a lot of forms out there that I never knew existed before joining FanStory. I've have much fun creating poems using forms.
Well done,
Be well,
starkat
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Enjoyed your tetracyts that's accompanied by your fascinating painting expressing the enigma. This piece invites the reader to explore and try to comprehend and understand the world of autism. Thanks for your authors notes. I would tend to write that ten syllable line with "different" spelled "diff'rent", to emphasize the two syllable aspect. Or, another way to write the last line would be to leave off the "How"...simply "Can we comprehend her different world?" (I think most writers see the word, "different" as three syllables)
I can see perhaps you will enjoy writing form poetry. So, look forwards to reading more of your work. There are a lot of forms out there that I never knew existed before joining FanStory. I've have much fun creating poems using forms.
Well done,
Be well,
starkat
Comment Written 27-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Starkat, what excellent suggestions! I believe I may revisit it and take out the "How" as you recommend, as it is not a necessary word. And it gives the work a slight change. I like it a LOT! Thank you for our most kind review and all of your generous comments. VERY much appreciated and with warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Lois Delaney
So much said in so few words. This must be a difficult ordeal for the victim and the parent. My daughter has worked with some children that suffer from this disorder, but they weren't real hard cases. Thank you so much for sharing. Blessings to you dear one.
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So much said in so few words. This must be a difficult ordeal for the victim and the parent. My daughter has worked with some children that suffer from this disorder, but they weren't real hard cases. Thank you so much for sharing. Blessings to you dear one.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2008
Comment from BillBologna
A very distressing situation to not be able to understand the thoughts and the heart of one you love so much. A wonderful poem and tribute.
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A very distressing situation to not be able to understand the thoughts and the heart of one you love so much. A wonderful poem and tribute.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from writechick
This is a great poem. I love the artwork you did to accompany it! I have never before seen that pattern, but I liked it and you did a great job following its rules. :]
Happy Thanksgiving!
~~writechick
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This is a great poem. I love the artwork you did to accompany it! I have never before seen that pattern, but I liked it and you did a great job following its rules. :]
Happy Thanksgiving!
~~writechick
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from George Rivers
I've never seen this form before, but I think your choice to express this disorder. Autism is very difficult to understand indeed. I wish the best to both you and her.
To the poem, there is one thing that I would recommend: the first is to change "autism" to a different word; I think it takes away from the poem. Considering how complex the disorder is, and by directly giving its name, in a way, you're "defining" it.
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I've never seen this form before, but I think your choice to express this disorder. Autism is very difficult to understand indeed. I wish the best to both you and her.
To the poem, there is one thing that I would recommend: the first is to change "autism" to a different word; I think it takes away from the poem. Considering how complex the disorder is, and by directly giving its name, in a way, you're "defining" it.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
Comment from bluefly
Hello again, kid,
This very special poem has meaning for me too. My daughter works with autistic as well as kids with other types of disorders, and it has been quite fulfilling and rewarding for her. Your words are simple and profound. Your painting is truly a work of amazing art.
Scott
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Hello again, kid,
This very special poem has meaning for me too. My daughter works with autistic as well as kids with other types of disorders, and it has been quite fulfilling and rewarding for her. Your words are simple and profound. Your painting is truly a work of amazing art.
Scott
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Scott, how noble of your daughter to choose a field that requires so much patience, understanding, dedication and love. I have always given full credit to all of my daughter's "special helpers" for all of her achievements. Thank you for your most generous review. (and thank you also for your very kind remark on my painting). With appreciation and my regards, Sue
Comment from The Unlikely author
Autism is a tragic thing to watch a child live with, I know from being a father of an autistic child myself. This poem is an enlightening way to let others in on their world. well done.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Autism is a tragic thing to watch a child live with, I know from being a father of an autistic child myself. This poem is an enlightening way to let others in on their world. well done.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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My daughter is 21 years old. You think that at some point you can "adjust", but when it comes to your children, that is not so. But, I cherish her every day and continue to try to walk in her shoes and to respect her "own world". As a father of an autistic child, I'm sure you know just what I am saying. I want to thank you for your very generous review of this work and your kind words. With much appreciation and warmest regards, Sue
Comment from jenelleish
Great poem. In just a few words you managed to express so much. All the words blended perfectly together. And you chose a very nice artwork for your poem. My heart is with you and your daughter...
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Great poem. In just a few words you managed to express so much. All the words blended perfectly together. And you chose a very nice artwork for your poem. My heart is with you and your daughter...
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2008
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Jenelleish, your comments are so kind and heart-felt. I want to thank you for giving my work a most esteemed review! And for your very special words. With my warmest regards, Sue
Comment from robeth
Excellent poem. Wonderful use of language that I think does convey an adequate discription of this enigmatic problem. Job very well done! Thanks for sharing!
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Excellent poem. Wonderful use of language that I think does convey an adequate discription of this enigmatic problem. Job very well done! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2008