Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

LOL. I love the idea of metamorphosis with the clouds in the morning. It's so true. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024

Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate your review of this older haiku. Clouds are fun to watch as they change.
Beth

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

I smiled, Beth, at your description of where you were when you were inspired to writing this lovely offering.
I absolutely loathe going to the dentist, and I often gaze out the window, and seek inspiration for poetry while the dentist drills!
Much enjoyed, Beth!

One edit needed: Mornting (in title)

Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane


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 Comment Written 21-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024

Thank you, Diane. I appreciate your pointing out spag in my title. I was involved and trying to spell the longer word right. LOL Anything to take your mind off of dental work works for me.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

You have a typo in your title - not sure if FS will let you change it at this late stage.

A pretty 5-7-5 and I like the feather metaphor in the final line.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

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 Comment Written 21-Nov-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024

Thank you, Steve. I guess I got carried away with spelling the longer word. You can change things until the contest starts. I appreciate the review.
Beth