Nature's Finest
Looking at the beauty of a spider's web28 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully written NONET for him in the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day. And may you have a wonderful week as well Patricia
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is a beautifully written NONET for him in the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a wonderful day. And may you have a wonderful week as well Patricia
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I will now. Thank you.
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello Kahlani!
This is an excellent poem, for several reasons:
---First, the image you have chosen. Poetry purists would say that the words of a poem are all that matters, but in the 21st Century, when we have access to so many beautiful images, we can actually use them as part of the presentation of our work; in fact, make them a vital part.
---Second, I love shape poetry. This is another way in which we can reinforce our poetic theme. I understand that the nonet form dictates this to you, but it still makes for a nice presentation.
---Third, I really like the font you chose and that you varied the size of the words and lines.
---Fourth, your subject is perfect. There are not too many things in nature that are as beautiful and fascinating as spider webs.
---"They spin fine, velvety labyrinths/with their tangled gossamer threads." --Although I like the entire poem, these are my favorite lines. The description of "velvery labyrinths" is just so evocative. I especially liked the idea that the web is like a maze. Excellent comparison! And the second line has such a pleasing rhythm, as it is perfectly iambic and bouncy.
I am so happy that I have met you this weekend and that you have joined our community. I hope you decide to stay. It is a great place to make friends, have people read and comment on your work, and most of all, to be prompted to always be creating your next masterpiece.
If you are all interested in darker themes like mystery, thriller, or horror, feel free to join our club The Little Workshop of Horrors. We have weekly prompts in both poetry and prose and run a contest every weekend.
And by the way, I love your profile picture! That is my favorite shade of blue!
I will talk to you again soon!
Patrick
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Hello Kahlani!
This is an excellent poem, for several reasons:
---First, the image you have chosen. Poetry purists would say that the words of a poem are all that matters, but in the 21st Century, when we have access to so many beautiful images, we can actually use them as part of the presentation of our work; in fact, make them a vital part.
---Second, I love shape poetry. This is another way in which we can reinforce our poetic theme. I understand that the nonet form dictates this to you, but it still makes for a nice presentation.
---Third, I really like the font you chose and that you varied the size of the words and lines.
---Fourth, your subject is perfect. There are not too many things in nature that are as beautiful and fascinating as spider webs.
---"They spin fine, velvety labyrinths/with their tangled gossamer threads." --Although I like the entire poem, these are my favorite lines. The description of "velvery labyrinths" is just so evocative. I especially liked the idea that the web is like a maze. Excellent comparison! And the second line has such a pleasing rhythm, as it is perfectly iambic and bouncy.
I am so happy that I have met you this weekend and that you have joined our community. I hope you decide to stay. It is a great place to make friends, have people read and comment on your work, and most of all, to be prompted to always be creating your next masterpiece.
If you are all interested in darker themes like mystery, thriller, or horror, feel free to join our club The Little Workshop of Horrors. We have weekly prompts in both poetry and prose and run a contest every weekend.
And by the way, I love your profile picture! That is my favorite shade of blue!
I will talk to you again soon!
Patrick
Comment Written 07-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful review of Nature's Finest. I'm learning so much with all the feedback that I'm receiving and it's helping me to fine tune my craft! I will check out The Little Workshop of Horrors as I'm interested in all types of writing. I'm starting with poetry because it allows me to express myself. Thank you for your constructive feedback, Patrick.
Comment from gansach
This is a great entry for the Nonet Poetry competition. Your presentation is wonderful with the beautiful photograph of the spider's web and the different size printing to emphasize your lines and words. Very effective! Well done!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is a great entry for the Nonet Poetry competition. Your presentation is wonderful with the beautiful photograph of the spider's web and the different size printing to emphasize your lines and words. Very effective! Well done!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. Your feedback is appreciated.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is terrific. I love how you describe the threads as "fine, velvety labyrinths" - that creates such a clear picture in my mind. The word choices are fanastic including weaving "divine tapestries". This flows smoothly and was a joy to read. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is terrific. I love how you describe the threads as "fine, velvety labyrinths" - that creates such a clear picture in my mind. The word choices are fanastic including weaving "divine tapestries". This flows smoothly and was a joy to read. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Your feedback is appreciated. You have made my day.
Comment from zanya
Yes - a Nonet that portrays the many intricacies of a spider's web and how strong it is to withstand even harsh climatic conditions - Nature truly is amazing.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Yes - a Nonet that portrays the many intricacies of a spider's web and how strong it is to withstand even harsh climatic conditions - Nature truly is amazing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Yes, it certainly is. Thank you for your lovely feedback.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation, Kahlani.
-You wrote a good nonet with a good topic.
-Effective imagery, good syllable count,
shape and use of different fonts.
-A very good opening line and your
description of their "divine tapestries."
-Very good detail about the nature of their web,
and very good concluding lines.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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-Good artwork and nice presentation, Kahlani.
-You wrote a good nonet with a good topic.
-Effective imagery, good syllable count,
shape and use of different fonts.
-A very good opening line and your
description of their "divine tapestries."
-Very good detail about the nature of their web,
and very good concluding lines.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful feedback. Have a great day.
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You are very welcome and have a great day, too.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is a fine Nonet about nature's spider webs - they really are fine spun labyrinths they can stand up to anything Nature throws at them.
In a perfect Nonet, is it supposed to resemble an upside down triangle. Someone here told me once that the actual visual is important too. Your lines are long in places for that.
I like the poem, just wanted to mention that in case there's something in the "rules" that suggest it.
Good luck, Kahlani:-)
Pam
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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This is a fine Nonet about nature's spider webs - they really are fine spun labyrinths they can stand up to anything Nature throws at them.
In a perfect Nonet, is it supposed to resemble an upside down triangle. Someone here told me once that the actual visual is important too. Your lines are long in places for that.
I like the poem, just wanted to mention that in case there's something in the "rules" that suggest it.
Good luck, Kahlani:-)
Pam
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Oh, thank you, Pam. I'm new to this site and trying out different poem styles. Any feedback is welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Did you know that spiders sometimes weave their webs to show off their designs? Well it is all true, they are natural artists. I enjoyed your nonet, a divine tapestry of words, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Did you know that spiders sometimes weave their webs to show off their designs? Well it is all true, they are natural artists. I enjoyed your nonet, a divine tapestry of words, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2024
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Coming from a master of words, I sincerely thank you, Dolly.
