Life's Lesson
but they are just words, right?23 total reviews
Comment from royowen
How many folk have heard those words, instead of something deep to comfort, but most people aren't usually like, he'd found a way to lock out out the hurt, and bow he'd passed it on. I can really identity with this, but when we grow up, emotional pain is hard to deal with, particularly a child. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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How many folk have heard those words, instead of something deep to comfort, but most people aren't usually like, he'd found a way to lock out out the hurt, and bow he'd passed it on. I can really identity with this, but when we grow up, emotional pain is hard to deal with, particularly a child. Beautifully written, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Roy! I drew some of it from my past and some of it from others, but regardless we need to know that words are idle things...they carry big punches especially with a young child's mind. Appreciate the review!
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Well done
Comment from pome lover
very well told; understandable and it certainly incited anger and sympathy for the boy. The only thing that flashed through my mind was, did he hit his head on something as he fell, something that would definitely have killed him? Just hitting the floor didn't seem "deadly" enough to me.
But you really got his mean spiritedness across and the long years of sadness and suffering by the boy. Very convincing argument for the outcome.
Katharine
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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very well told; understandable and it certainly incited anger and sympathy for the boy. The only thing that flashed through my mind was, did he hit his head on something as he fell, something that would definitely have killed him? Just hitting the floor didn't seem "deadly" enough to me.
But you really got his mean spiritedness across and the long years of sadness and suffering by the boy. Very convincing argument for the outcome.
Katharine
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Wow and double wow! thank you so much Katherine. this was a tough one for many reasons but staying within the 1000 word count limite. I sat for hours, trying to cut it down. I too questioned about his father's death, but word count made me decide to leave it questionalbe...like Patches never returned and Grandpa's death. Thank you so much! It's my first review and I am thrilled. Have a great day!
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well, I'm sure you'll have many more great pieces!
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Good use of this time warn idiom: 'It's for the best."
i like how it has echoed in throughout his life in character's mind and memory. Readers may have the same repulsive reaction to this phrase also. The awareness is excellent: "I laughed -- knowing he knew nothing about love or what was right for me. He'd never known what was best for me -- it was always about him." what a great and Justifiable ending. Well done.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Good use of this time warn idiom: 'It's for the best."
i like how it has echoed in throughout his life in character's mind and memory. Readers may have the same repulsive reaction to this phrase also. The awareness is excellent: "I laughed -- knowing he knew nothing about love or what was right for me. He'd never known what was best for me -- it was always about him." what a great and Justifiable ending. Well done.
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much, Liz. I had to eliminate a few of my favorite phrases because I hadn't realized there was a 1000 word count and I was over. It was disappointing but I think the story is still good. I appreciate your review and thoughts. Have a great day!
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you handled it well