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Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.

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Comment from Liam Womack
Excellent
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I love mythology. This chapter is an exciting one, as it is the beginning of a battle. I particularly liked the line "The golden sunlight seemed to make the man, part Centaur and part god, glow like he was on fire, an ancient god fighting an eternal battle." I feel like the chapter so far had been visual, but this line stuck out to me. The string of descriptive words painted a picture for me. I feel like through this line alone, I can visualize the tone of the whole encounter.
I liked your interpretation of Hades. Once again you paint a visual of him with his "long saber that glowed with a black flame." I liked this chapter because I am a very visual reader and the main highlight from reading your story is even though I have not read previous chapters, I could see this encounter.


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 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
    Hi Liam!!
    Thanks for stopping by to review and leave your comments. They all seemed very positive. Did you mean the 4 stars? If so, that's great, but usually when a person gives that, they make suggestions for improvement.
    Thanks again
    Rhonda