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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Another well written chapter, and the love story must go on together with the detective work. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and I cannot wait for the next chapter.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
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Sami has a way of speaking our acting without thinking first. Noah is determined not to let it go too far but it is obvious he enjoys it. it surprises me that the Naoh can work with th head of prostution team. These girls don't seem to object to turning tricks. They must have gotten use used to it and being paid will. It sort of blows my mind they can do that and be okay with it.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. I don't understand the working girl trade either, but in some areas they make really good money, according to research. LOL
Comment from royowen
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I guess the trouble with those that want you harmed is they lurk in the darkness, and Noah wouldn't be effective if he didn't have that sixth sense, being in love with Sami, can sure complicate things, and perhaps blunt a little that sixth sense, well done Barbara, great job, blessings Roy
Typo : I don't want you to(o)

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catch. I've corrected it. I appreciate the help.
reply by royowen on 10-Jun-2024
    Well done
Comment from Ulla
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I think, Sami is making things very difficult for Noah. She's starting to annoy me quite a bit. She's not only immature but a hindrance as well. She needs to get her act together. Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Sami will annoy Noah a little longer. LOL Thank you for the kind review. She is the baby of five children.
Comment from jim vecchio
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Another great installment. I'm surprised the meeting with Mr. T went on offstage, or off print. Glad Noah's okay. You reveal a lot about him and Sami through your use of dialogue. Looking forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    The only part of this meeting that moved the story forward was what I printed. We don't need to know exactly what happened. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by jim vecchio on 09-Jun-2024
    I concur. I was just wanting to be a fly on the wall.
Comment from nomi338
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Sounds and looks like things may be ramping up to a point where Chen may be close to being caught and stopped. That would be good and exciting news. I would love to witness Sami and Noah having a chance to further develop their budding relationship.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    We will see their relationship growing stronger. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Teri7
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I am so glad I have six stars to give you for this post. I wish I had six for every one of your posts. This chapter was very full of great descriptive writing and great imagery from your words and the artwork you chose. Looking forward to the next one! love and blessings, teri

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the wonderful encouragement!
Comment from judiverse
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Sami is acting immature in this chapter. She's making things more difficult for Noah. He has to be focused on his difficult operation instead of having Sami clinging to him, and especially her saying she didn't want Noah to go to the meeting. The team members are great. They understand the risks involved but know Noah is good at his job and accept his decisions. It's a good thing if Noah has plans to discuss, he wants to make sure Sami doesn't hear. Great job with all the details of the meeting at the zoo. Planning is going to be important, like changing out the cars, etc. Just a thought--instead of including so much dialogue from the past chapter why not just give a brief summary of what happened? j udi

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    I thought about what to put in from the previous post be decided this was best. Maybe not. Yes, Sami wants things her way. Part of being the youngest of five girls. The baby. I appreciate the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 09-Jun-2024
    Yes, that sounds typical. My sister was the youngest in the family, and she always wanted her own way. judi
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Sami has four older sisters.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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You've done a great job here, Barbara, with the dialogue and preparation for the operation underway. What we need now is some big drama and I'm delighted to hear it's going to come from Noah and Sami. Looking forward. Thanks fro sharing. Debbie. Small edit below:
leaned her head again(st) his arm

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the catch. I have added those tow missing letters. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Nice job setting up for the upcoming operation, Barb. The reader is now anxiously awaiting the next chapter. Looking forward to the sparks flying.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. I hope I do the sparks justice.