DUEL with the DEVIL
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well once again, Jim, I'm in awe of your versatile mind! And this latest venture is sounding full of great potential. I don't know what's the matter with me but I was reading 'prologue' as 'epilogue' and thinking 'what a shame' because I want to know more. So, yes, you've completely captured my attention. Your protagonist is as down on his luck as he could possibly be. I could practically smell him! His food supply sounds dire and his laundry and general hygiene also leave a lot to be desired. On top of that, an addiction and no power... Can he possibly claw his way back up? With you at the helm, Jim, anything could happen! Great start! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Well once again, Jim, I'm in awe of your versatile mind! And this latest venture is sounding full of great potential. I don't know what's the matter with me but I was reading 'prologue' as 'epilogue' and thinking 'what a shame' because I want to know more. So, yes, you've completely captured my attention. Your protagonist is as down on his luck as he could possibly be. I could practically smell him! His food supply sounds dire and his laundry and general hygiene also leave a lot to be desired. On top of that, an addiction and no power... Can he possibly claw his way back up? With you at the helm, Jim, anything could happen! Great start! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much, Debbie. This one has a bit darker theme than the others I've written, so it's new for me and should be fun to create a character with some personality flaws. I've only written a few chapters so far with no outline and only a vague idea of what will happen, so I guess I'll be going where my character leads me. No idea yet if he will make out well in the end.
Comment from jmdg1954
Alright. I'm hooked.
This dude is under rock notion looking up at the snakes skin and lawyers soles on their shoes!
Even my college apartment didn't look that bad and we played soccer in it.
Way to go. Can't wait to see how this all came about.
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Alright. I'm hooked.
This dude is under rock notion looking up at the snakes skin and lawyers soles on their shoes!
Even my college apartment didn't look that bad and we played soccer in it.
Way to go. Can't wait to see how this all came about.
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Yep, he's definitely at the bottom of the abyss right now. Will he make it out? I don't know yet. All I've thought about so far is how he got here. It will be fun for me to see where it leads, hopefully for my readers too.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
WOW!! I have a feeling this is going to intense, and I can't wait to read more. I am definitely waiting for the next chapter. You have created an interesting character and a huge problem.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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WOW!! I have a feeling this is going to intense, and I can't wait to read more. I am definitely waiting for the next chapter. You have created an interesting character and a huge problem.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Barbara. This one promises to be a little different from the past few I've written. I'm not quite sure how it's going to end up just yet, and it may not be quite as happy an ending as the others. But you never know. We'll see where he takes me.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Boy oh boy! What a sad predicament.
Well written.
Bet that slimy carrot was yummy.
I owned a ow rent trailer park. Can't tell you how may left with the trailer looking like that.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Boy oh boy! What a sad predicament.
Well written.
Bet that slimy carrot was yummy.
I owned a ow rent trailer park. Can't tell you how may left with the trailer looking like that.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Yikes! I wonder if they had the same problem my MC has? Or maybe they were just slobs.
This one isn't going to be quite as rosy as my last few.
Comment from royowen
How fascinating, still I suppose not feeling debilitating pain might be considered a worthwhile venture, wel, done Jim, this does seem like you, making an experiment, deliberately going to rock bottom, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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How fascinating, still I suppose not feeling debilitating pain might be considered a worthwhile venture, wel, done Jim, this does seem like you, making an experiment, deliberately going to rock bottom, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Gee thanks, Roy! I'm kind of at that point now with my diet, which is one of the things that helped inspire this tale. There are all kinds of addictions. My current ones happen to be sweets and playing chess online.
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As long as we overcome, that?s the key.
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You got it.
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Well done
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What a olio of who's knows whats and this is only the beginning?
I understand it is fiction but at what age is the story being told. 32?
I am in your corner and await what's next
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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What a olio of who's knows whats and this is only the beginning?
I understand it is fiction but at what age is the story being told. 32?
I am in your corner and await what's next
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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It's a present day story, but Part 1 will take place in the past and bring us up to the present. Part 2 will deal with what happens now.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ah, he's a chemist and that's how he knows to cook up his own Dipraxa. If he's looking for a way to make some money, he could sell that.
This is going to be a woeful tale, isn't it, Jim? I can't talk, as I've been known to tell a few of those too.
I'm not familiar with the drug, but it sounds like it causes you not to care about anything - especially in that quantity!
When is the first chapter posted?
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Ah, he's a chemist and that's how he knows to cook up his own Dipraxa. If he's looking for a way to make some money, he could sell that.
This is going to be a woeful tale, isn't it, Jim? I can't talk, as I've been known to tell a few of those too.
I'm not familiar with the drug, but it sounds like it causes you not to care about anything - especially in that quantity!
When is the first chapter posted?
xo
Pam
Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Woeful, yes. That's a good word for it. Hopefully by the end he will understand things better and figure out what to do with this discovery.
I'll post Chapter 1 later this week. I've written about 6 so far.
Comment from Begin Again
I've been faced with some serious depression at times, but luckily I never wanted nr thought of succumbing to drugs or alcohol. Lucky for me! It appears that your 32 year guy was hit by something more than he could deal with and he lost the battle.
Nice introduction of the story.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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I've been faced with some serious depression at times, but luckily I never wanted nr thought of succumbing to drugs or alcohol. Lucky for me! It appears that your 32 year guy was hit by something more than he could deal with and he lost the battle.
Nice introduction of the story.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Hi, Carol. Yes, that is lucky because that can lead to a deeper hole that's much harder to get out of. He may not be depressed, but he's in a very deep hole right now.
Comment from Nicole Schmidt
The image was shocking. In six months, I had gone from a not-bad-looking, clean-shaven 32-year-old guy with normal-length, sandy-brown hair and an average build for my 6'2" frame to a beanpole with a permanent bedhead of long, stringy, unkempt hair and a thick, scraggly beard
Doesn't take long does it?
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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The image was shocking. In six months, I had gone from a not-bad-looking, clean-shaven 32-year-old guy with normal-length, sandy-brown hair and an average build for my 6'2" frame to a beanpole with a permanent bedhead of long, stringy, unkempt hair and a thick, scraggly beard
Doesn't take long does it?
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2024
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Not too long, no. He's pretty much lost the will to do anything other than partake of this extreme high.