Golden Anniversary
Dinner for Two33 total reviews
Comment from Neil Samways
Hahaha enjoyed this a lot and the ending was hilarious. No mater how long you've been together, a man's fries are a man's fries.
Good luck in the contest.
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Hahaha enjoyed this a lot and the ending was hilarious. No mater how long you've been together, a man's fries are a man's fries.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
Comment from jessizero
I must admit I laughed at the last line of this fifty-word story. You really built up the scene very well, also. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
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I must admit I laughed at the last line of this fifty-word story. You really built up the scene very well, also. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
Comment from hullabaloo22
You described such a romantic set-up, building up the feeling of romance and leading your reader in the totally wrong direction for that hilarious conclusion.
Well done!
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You described such a romantic set-up, building up the feeling of romance and leading your reader in the totally wrong direction for that hilarious conclusion.
Well done!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Brilliant! It was always building up to a fun punch line but I didn't expect that one which left me with a definite smile on my face. Clearly expressed and presented, a great story for the contest! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Brilliant! It was always building up to a fun punch line but I didn't expect that one which left me with a definite smile on my face. Clearly expressed and presented, a great story for the contest! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Debbie.
Thank you so much for stopping by to read.
Comment from Teri7
The dinner was going so well and then she had to try to sneak some fries! lol This is a very cute and very well written Flash Fiction story. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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The dinner was going so well and then she had to try to sneak some fries! lol This is a very cute and very well written Flash Fiction story. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Gotta watch those hands!
Thank you.
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seems so! lol
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, this is a wonderful entry for this contest! First, you got a twist at the end, and it's a good one. Second, you set the scene up nicely, and being a senior citizen myself, I can relate to the scene and the humor. Well done. Terry.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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LOL, this is a wonderful entry for this contest! First, you got a twist at the end, and it's a good one. Second, you set the scene up nicely, and being a senior citizen myself, I can relate to the scene and the humor. Well done. Terry.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Awesome. Thanks Terry fora great review.
Welcome back!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 50-word story, Golden Anniversary, has the proper word count and follows the typical couple still fighting over who gets the fries and who gets the check.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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This 50-word story, Golden Anniversary, has the proper word count and follows the typical couple still fighting over who gets the fries and who gets the check.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Yup. He probably loses out on both.
Thanks for reading.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
See, when you've been together that long, you know ALLLL your partners crafty little ways.
Very cute and funny misdirect and ending. Good luck with it in the 50 Word Flash Fiction!!
xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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See, when you've been together that long, you know ALLLL your partners crafty little ways.
Very cute and funny misdirect and ending. Good luck with it in the 50 Word Flash Fiction!!
xoxo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle.
I always appreciate your kind reviews.
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Always my pleasure! xo
Comment from Mark Jackson
Funny, yes I like it, it made me laugh and I had no idea where you were going with this one. 50 words seems a lot and yet when they are placed on a page we see just how few that actually is. I notice you put a few line spaces at the top to ensure the text wrapped around the image. Another sign that you care about your craft. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Funny, yes I like it, it made me laugh and I had no idea where you were going with this one. 50 words seems a lot and yet when they are placed on a page we see just how few that actually is. I notice you put a few line spaces at the top to ensure the text wrapped around the image. Another sign that you care about your craft. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Awesome review. Thank you so much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
Great artwork for your story. It sets the mood very well. A very good opening gets our attention.
A very good description of this special anniversary. They are definitely in love as they
"gaze into each other's eyes." A good ending, but their romance needs a little work!
A good entry; good luck in the contest. You capture the scene very well.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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Great artwork for your story. It sets the mood very well. A very good opening gets our attention.
A very good description of this special anniversary. They are definitely in love as they
"gaze into each other's eyes." A good ending, but their romance needs a little work!
A good entry; good luck in the contest. You capture the scene very well.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2024
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I appreciate the great review. Thanks for reading.
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You are very welcome.