Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Beth, this poem is beautiful on many levels! It was cleverly written and deeply encouraging. I'm glad you chose the loop style for your message. It compliments your message perfectly.

I love the idea of the timeline. I think I'll do that this year. It's much much more than a list of self improvement, but one that gives structure to your goals.

Hugs,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thank you Rhonda. THis was the first time I've tried the loop form. I've not particularly liked this form and thought I would try it. I glad you think it worked out well.
Beth

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 28-Dec-2023

Loved it!

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

Kudos for taking on the "loop poetry" form - I tried once and got tangled in the loops!

Putting fears aside in order to live and full and happy life should be everyone's number one goal for the new year. I've yet to make my list, but I always try to put at least one thing on there that allows me to step outside my comfort zone.

Best of luck and health and happiness for 2024:-)

xo

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

I really don't like loop poetry. If I can just putting off everthing I Don't want to deal with. I will being doing good.
Beth

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I must admit that fear is a most negative emotion, in fact scripture tells us not to fear for the Lord our God is with, so many scriptures covering that. You've done such a good job on this poem dear Beth. Good abcb rhyming, great flow in pentameter well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thank you Roy. I'm not fond of the loop poem format. I know like reapeating things but I thought I'd try one. I really appreciate the review.
Beth

reply by royowen on 28-Dec-2023

You handled better than most, makes you a good writer.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Good advice for the young at heart but for me, my resolution will be to rise another day and give thanks even for the aches and pains that accompany advancing age. God is great. May I adhere to his words, and say to Satan 'Get ye behind me." If I can be successful there, I will propser and live long, like SPOCK proposed.

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thank you Tom. Did you dock me a star because this advice didn't work for you? I dislike loop poems too, and they are not easy to write. I didn't ask it to go this route. It did its own thing.
Beth

reply by Tom Horonzy on 28-Dec-2023

Nooo. What did you see? Anyhow, if it was less than five it was a mistake, and it should be five now. I did not even see it was a loop poem

reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thanks Tom. It was a four and I've accidentally done that before too. It is easy to do. I'm flattered that you didn't know is was a loop poem. I don't care for that format.

reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thanks Tom. It was a four and I've accidentally done that before too. It is easy to do. I'm flattered that you didn't know is was a loop poem. I don't care for that format.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Life is far too precious to waste and we need to embrace the new year and hope it brings all the joys we hope for, happy new year Beth to you and yours, a fine read for 2024, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thank you Dolly. I'm not sure If I'll accomplish more this year but if I just stop putting things off it will be progress.
Beth

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Beth,
You've given us an excellent loop poem. It read fluently with the end word as the beginning word.

You also made many a good point for what to expect in 2024.

Now,lets make it happsn.
John

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023

Thank you John, I appreciate the review and comments. I'd like to make it happen.
Beth

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This looping poem, Personal Goals for the New Year, again places people with better goals in mind up to attend those achievements they may never see otherwise.....................................................

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023

Thank you Bill. I tend to be a procrastonator but at my age, it is time to stop with that foolishness.
Beth

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Wow! You've been really rocking in writing this year, Beth! I love this loop poem because it makes each repeated word fresh and used differently. Hope this does well in the contest!!

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023

I've never cared for loop poems and I didn't plan to ever write one but then I decided I'd enter all of free to enter contests. I'm glad you think it words.

reply by lyenochka on 27-Dec-2023

It's one of the best I've read ! Great job!

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

A very timely loop poem on the topic of setting and achieving goals. You are offering some very good advice that is summed up perfectly in the concluding verse. I am glad to read it this evening and thank you for posting it here at FS. Smiles and hugs, Lily

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023

Thank Lily. I'm so glad you liked my loop poem. They are a bit of a challenge.
Beth

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

An accomplished loop poem with the added benefit of metric consistency and a rhyme scheme. It should do well in the contest both for its skilful structure and for the common sense of its message.

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 Comment Written 27-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2023

Thank you for the great review. I'm no fan of loop poems and I vowed I never do one, but I decided to take the challenge.
Beth

reply by tfawcus on 27-Dec-2023

No, I don't like the form either, but you've made the best of it here by making sure the repetitions fulfil a dual purpose.