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noir-inspired28 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Quite a lot of tension in this well written story Jim, no one knew what was going to happen, the only thing was I don't know who HIM. was, a good write my friend k and excellent work for this day, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Quite a lot of tension in this well written story Jim, no one knew what was going to happen, the only thing was I don't know who HIM. was, a good write my friend k and excellent work for this day, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you, but as always, I felt uncomfortable until I posted a work glorifying The Lord afterwarde.
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Well.done
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I will try to be more positive and upbeat when God allows it.
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Well done
Comment from patcelaw
I do not like this kind of writing. I do not like this kind of story. I am not into horror type things. I wish you the very best with your writing, however and I did listen to the whole thing all the way through.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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I do not like this kind of writing. I do not like this kind of story. I am not into horror type things. I wish you the very best with your writing, however and I did listen to the whole thing all the way through.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you. This is not my favorite kind of writing, but I have viewed many noir films of the forties and fifties and tried to emulate their style.
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I probably would?ve stopped reading it earlier, but you had mentioned yesterday that you wanted to see how many people would read all the way through it. Usually when I come across one of these things, I would not read it all the way through but I remembered what you said about posting it.
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Thank you. I won't try anything like this again.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You kept me on the edge of my seat with this write. It's very well written. Good job.
could only grab Billy from the seat next to him. (grab Billy from the seat beside him)
"...had a husband!" he laughed, (He laughed,)
pushing you to one end and sitting next to you. (sitting beside you)
, he sits next to you, stroking your hair. (he sits beside you)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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You kept me on the edge of my seat with this write. It's very well written. Good job.
could only grab Billy from the seat next to him. (grab Billy from the seat beside him)
"...had a husband!" he laughed, (He laughed,)
pushing you to one end and sitting next to you. (sitting beside you)
, he sits next to you, stroking your hair. (he sits beside you)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much! I will re-edit.
Comment from Sanku
You write very well and you have the ability to take readers through your work .I have read many of your work and most of them seem very dark...This is too dark ....too horrible..
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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You write very well and you have the ability to take readers through your work .I have read many of your work and most of them seem very dark...This is too dark ....too horrible..
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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I agree and I wrote it. I do not want this to be the type associated with me. I was trying to emulate noir films of the forties and fifties but I will try to return to other types of writing.
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I agree and I wrote it. I do not want this to be the type associated with me. I was trying to emulate noir films of the forties and fifties but I will try to return to other types of writing.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well, one of 'em's havin' fun anyway.
Them in the closet sure ain't. And I don't reckon Emily has either... mornin' or evenin' or in between.
Fun writin', anyway. (smiley face here)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Well, one of 'em's havin' fun anyway.
Them in the closet sure ain't. And I don't reckon Emily has either... mornin' or evenin' or in between.
Fun writin', anyway. (smiley face here)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Thank you for those kind words!
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Thank you for those kind words!
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Thank you for those kind words!
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Thank you for those kind words!
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Boy! I must've laid on the 'save button. Sorry.
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There have been several glitches on the site recently.
Comment from Yusita
Wow. What a riveting read that keeps the reader engrossed and at the edge of their seat. You are a great story-teller and writer. This story had a great plot.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Wow. What a riveting read that keeps the reader engrossed and at the edge of their seat. You are a great story-teller and writer. This story had a great plot.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Many, many thanks!
Comment from BethShelby
I was glad I found one of your stories that hadn't expired yet to read and then I read this horror story. Come on Jim, I thought your would never write something so horrible. I misjudged you.
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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I was glad I found one of your stories that hadn't expired yet to read and then I read this horror story. Come on Jim, I thought your would never write something so horrible. I misjudged you.
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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That wasn't my type of writing. I had seen some noir films and tried to emulate the style and dialogue. I would never write anything graphic and I don't think I'll try anything like this again.
Comment from Jacob1395
This is a really tense piece, and I thought the pace in your story was excellent. The dialogue between the character's held my attention and I could feel Emily's fear. I really enjoyed it.
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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This is a really tense piece, and I thought the pace in your story was excellent. The dialogue between the character's held my attention and I could feel Emily's fear. I really enjoyed it.
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Comment Written 19-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2023
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Many thanks for your kind words!