War Torn
Chill Wind43 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
What a cutting perspective on the damage war wreaks upon the young. Whatever hopes and dreams she might have had are now in grave danger. Yet she clings to them. Touching and sad.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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What a cutting perspective on the damage war wreaks upon the young. Whatever hopes and dreams she might have had are now in grave danger. Yet she clings to them. Touching and sad.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, June, for your kind review and such thoughtful comments, all greatly appreciated. Take care Debbie
Comment from w.j.debi
It is difficult to imagine how much fear and dread these poor children must be facing now. Hugging that stuffed animal offers some small comfort, but for these children, homes are gone, maybe even family members. The future is uncertain. Let's hope they can survive.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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It is difficult to imagine how much fear and dread these poor children must be facing now. Hugging that stuffed animal offers some small comfort, but for these children, homes are gone, maybe even family members. The future is uncertain. Let's hope they can survive.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you again for your time and thought invested in this kind review! Debbie
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent work for the challenge. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. Your Author Note explaining the phrase was very helpful. I enjoyed reading reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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This is excellent work for the challenge. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. Your Author Note explaining the phrase was very helpful. I enjoyed reading reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Alex, for your kind review and thoughtful comments, all greatly appreciated. Take care Debbie
Comment from Bridge
It is beyond heartbreaking , what is happening in Gaza. This poem touched me. The picture complements your poem perfectly and so well chosen. Very well written. I especially like your use of the word ' carnage' . Very powerful. I wish you the very best in the contest. With kind regards.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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It is beyond heartbreaking , what is happening in Gaza. This poem touched me. The picture complements your poem perfectly and so well chosen. Very well written. I especially like your use of the word ' carnage' . Very powerful. I wish you the very best in the contest. With kind regards.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and very encouraging comments all of which I greatly appreciate! Take care Debbie
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very profound a statement on the war going on in the Gaza Strip. I love the alliteration of collateral carnage and chill winds and the ending that says, she clings to torn dreams. Heavy and serious in its quiet sadness this piece shows all who care that it doesn't matter which side a child is on.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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This is very profound a statement on the war going on in the Gaza Strip. I love the alliteration of collateral carnage and chill winds and the ending that says, she clings to torn dreams. Heavy and serious in its quiet sadness this piece shows all who care that it doesn't matter which side a child is on.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Jesse, for your very kind review, thoughtful comments and full understanding. I greatly appreciate this from you. Take care Debbie
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Glad to hear it.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from karenina
It always comes down to this. The babies slain, the children killed or maimed or orphaned. In the name of religion, politics, or retribution.
What sins are upon their souls that they must bear the burden of mankind's inability to embrace humanity?
Tears in my eyes...
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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It always comes down to this. The babies slain, the children killed or maimed or orphaned. In the name of religion, politics, or retribution.
What sins are upon their souls that they must bear the burden of mankind's inability to embrace humanity?
Tears in my eyes...
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Karenina! Your kind review is greatly appreciated as, too, your very profound words. Take care Debbie
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I hope you had a nice weekend!
Comment from jmdg1954
I look at that little girl and my heart breaks. It shouldn't be! She should be enjoying her stuffed animals, hugging them and loving them, not trying to feel as if that's the last thing in her life as you wrote, torn dreams.
It's a shame the world is the way it is.
Great three line poem, Debbie.
John
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I look at that little girl and my heart breaks. It shouldn't be! She should be enjoying her stuffed animals, hugging them and loving them, not trying to feel as if that's the last thing in her life as you wrote, torn dreams.
It's a shame the world is the way it is.
Great three line poem, Debbie.
John
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, John! I really appreciate your words here and feel, like you, that this is an utterly shameful reflection on our world. Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent senryu for the 3 Line Poetry Contest. You capture the horror of war, especially when it involves innocent children. It's heartbreaking.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck!
I appreciate your writing talent. Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Excellent senryu for the 3 Line Poetry Contest. You capture the horror of war, especially when it involves innocent children. It's heartbreaking.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck!
I appreciate your writing talent. Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy! This is a real honour and I'm delighted by your kind and thoughtful comments! Debbie
Comment from gramalot8
Debbie... so much can be taken just from the picture that accompanies this short poem. I've shed tears watching the news lately when they show these poor innocent children being affected from the travesty of war. I pray for them and for peace to soon arrive.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Debbie... so much can be taken just from the picture that accompanies this short poem. I've shed tears watching the news lately when they show these poor innocent children being affected from the travesty of war. I pray for them and for peace to soon arrive.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review and comments, all greatly appreciated. Take care Debbie
Comment from Daylily
It is especially heartbreaking to hear about what was done to scores children and infants in the past month. Their deaths, however, were not collateral damage since they were intentionally targeted by the killers. Such treatment of innocents is unfathomable.
You have written a striking three lines for the contest that cause readers to pause and think further about what is happening in this day and age.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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It is especially heartbreaking to hear about what was done to scores children and infants in the past month. Their deaths, however, were not collateral damage since they were intentionally targeted by the killers. Such treatment of innocents is unfathomable.
You have written a striking three lines for the contest that cause readers to pause and think further about what is happening in this day and age.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Lily! Your kind review, support and words are all greatly appreciated! Debbie
