The go-between
A life of luxury for ...28 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Who in their right mind buys a chihuahua? They are very YAPPY, that's for sure. I assume this story is real, and wonder if Jana is still a friend after your introductory introduction? "showed off her fake tan and a body which displayed extensive enlargement in various areas and reduction?"
As usual, I liked it.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Who in their right mind buys a chihuahua? They are very YAPPY, that's for sure. I assume this story is real, and wonder if Jana is still a friend after your introductory introduction? "showed off her fake tan and a body which displayed extensive enlargement in various areas and reduction?"
As usual, I liked it.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Yes, true story. She's a friend, yes. Thanks for reviewing - always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am glad you let your guard down and let Jana into your world Wendy. We are sometimes intimidated by someone's outward appearance only to find they have the same feelings inside as we do. How lovely that you had a few days of luxury to enjoy and Sunny settled in easily and made everyone feel comfortable. It is funny that Jana, with her fake appearance had dogs with problems, whereas you, with you natural glamour and different priorities had a nurturing and caring dog. Glad you made a new friend Wendy, A fine post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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I am glad you let your guard down and let Jana into your world Wendy. We are sometimes intimidated by someone's outward appearance only to find they have the same feelings inside as we do. How lovely that you had a few days of luxury to enjoy and Sunny settled in easily and made everyone feel comfortable. It is funny that Jana, with her fake appearance had dogs with problems, whereas you, with you natural glamour and different priorities had a nurturing and caring dog. Glad you made a new friend Wendy, A fine post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you Dolly. I had never thought of it like that.
But yes, it was good to get to know her beneath the surface. She's just set off in her luxury car with an elderly guest, driving him to the airport - about an hour away. A kind heart. Thank you for reviewing so thoughtfully.
Wendy
Comment from damommy
Sunny is a special little boy. I know what you mean when you first met Jana. I'm that way, too. Women intimidate me because they're all so glamorous and here I come in sharp contrast.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Sunny is a special little boy. I know what you mean when you first met Jana. I'm that way, too. Women intimidate me because they're all so glamorous and here I come in sharp contrast.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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You understand perfectly. I will try to remember this story myself when I next meet someone very glamorous. Many thanks for reviewing. It's always good to see you.
Wendy
Comment from CD Richards
A bit of indulging yourself every once in a while doesn't hurt, Wendy. Glad you managed to make friends with Jana -- people with lavish lifestyles can seem a bit intimidating, but they're not all bad... just many of them ;-)
When I was a young lad, my dog would go berserk when we turned on the garden sprinkler. Her favourite thing was to go nuts jumping in and trying to eat it, or get it to stop... I'm not sure what was in her head. She'd do it until she made herself sick by swallowing so much water.
I enjoyed the story very much.
Craig
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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A bit of indulging yourself every once in a while doesn't hurt, Wendy. Glad you managed to make friends with Jana -- people with lavish lifestyles can seem a bit intimidating, but they're not all bad... just many of them ;-)
When I was a young lad, my dog would go berserk when we turned on the garden sprinkler. Her favourite thing was to go nuts jumping in and trying to eat it, or get it to stop... I'm not sure what was in her head. She'd do it until she made herself sick by swallowing so much water.
I enjoyed the story very much.
Craig
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you Craig. In the photo he is lying happily near the infinity pool next to the spa, and I know he is in no danger of falling in. That's as close as he will go. Dogs seem to be at the extremes re water, either loving it or hating it. Your dog sounds like she was a fun personality. Thanks so much for your super review.
Wendy
Comment from LisaMay
Your descriptions are so effective I felt awkward about Jana at first too! Some people strive so hard to alter their natural appearance, but your encounter proves that appearances don't matter - humans are very similar once communication becomes friendly and relaxed.
Sunny's personality (dogality?) certainly makes him the perfect go-between.
Suggestions:
In first sentence a word is missing:
As we approached the beautiful home where (we) were to spend the next five nights,
I feel that the following sentence is too long and needs a break; it also looks like it is the wrinkles that feel awkward.
Then there was me, natural in every way, plain, with a sprinkling of silver threads through my hair, and life's experiences etched on my face in fine wrinkles, feeling a little awkward, shy, and intimidated. Would I be out of place? Perhaps it could be restructured thus:
Then there was me, natural in every way, plain, with a sprinkling of silver threads through my hair, and life's experiences etched on my face in fine wrinkles. Feeling a little awkward, shy, and intimidated, I wondered would I be out of place?
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Your descriptions are so effective I felt awkward about Jana at first too! Some people strive so hard to alter their natural appearance, but your encounter proves that appearances don't matter - humans are very similar once communication becomes friendly and relaxed.
Sunny's personality (dogality?) certainly makes him the perfect go-between.
Suggestions:
In first sentence a word is missing:
As we approached the beautiful home where (we) were to spend the next five nights,
I feel that the following sentence is too long and needs a break; it also looks like it is the wrinkles that feel awkward.
Then there was me, natural in every way, plain, with a sprinkling of silver threads through my hair, and life's experiences etched on my face in fine wrinkles, feeling a little awkward, shy, and intimidated. Would I be out of place? Perhaps it could be restructured thus:
Then there was me, natural in every way, plain, with a sprinkling of silver threads through my hair, and life's experiences etched on my face in fine wrinkles. Feeling a little awkward, shy, and intimidated, I wondered would I be out of place?
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review, and also for noticing the missing word. It is fixed and I also agreed with your other comment so altered that as well. Many thanks. I always appreciate your careful reviewing and insights. I would like to nominate you but have run out, so I will try to remember on Sunday
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Now, that is my idea of "roughing it!" A good description of Jana and your first impression of her by her looks. It turned out, it is a good example of not judging a book by its cover. Sunny it appears knew from the start that it was a comfortable place.
I enjoyed the story - well written.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Now, that is my idea of "roughing it!" A good description of Jana and your first impression of her by her looks. It turned out, it is a good example of not judging a book by its cover. Sunny it appears knew from the start that it was a comfortable place.
I enjoyed the story - well written.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Thank you, yes, exactly right. Superficial external appearances mean nothing. I am happy you enjoyed this one, and thank you for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Wow. It would be very easy for me to have slowly walked backwards out of that place. Doesn't sound like me at all. But I'm glad it all worked out. Good job, Sunny.
As we approached the beautiful home where were to spend the next five nights, - (we) were?
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Wow. It would be very easy for me to have slowly walked backwards out of that place. Doesn't sound like me at all. But I'm glad it all worked out. Good job, Sunny.
As we approached the beautiful home where were to spend the next five nights, - (we) were?
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Thank you Wayne. Yes, not my style for a home but fine for a few days. Yes, all good now. Thanks for picking up the typo. Fixed. I read it about five times after I finished and didn?t see it. My brain must be on holidays too.
Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
It sounds like you were in a luxury rental. They must pay teachers more in Australia than they do in the states. Good job, but I think you left out a "we" in the first sentence.
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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It sounds like you were in a luxury rental. They must pay teachers more in Australia than they do in the states. Good job, but I think you left out a "we" in the first sentence.
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Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Lol. Probably not. I organised the first two nights and the last two nights, and they were comfortable but not outstanding. My husband organised this place because it was dog friendly and not far from where my relatives live. I haven?t asked him what it cost per night. Probably double what the others were. But I?m not going to ask. Lol. And thank you for picking up the typo which I have fixed. Grr. How many times did I read it before I posted it? Many thanks for reviewing. Always appreciate hearing from you.
Wendy