Comment from BenThrone

Excellent

What a touching reflection on the course of a relationship over time. You make good use of the poet's tools to achieve a flowing rhythm, and the rhymes (probably because you only have two end rhymes per quatrain) are not cloying. Generally speaking I'm not a fan of refrains but it works well in this poem. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Ben and thank you for the beautiful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.

Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

reply by BenThrone on 30-Sep-2023

I am glad to hear of these good tidings.

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

powerful and moving poem about the night one first made love to one's lover. nicely done, not too graphic but told the story. I like the extended metaphors

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Jake and thank you for the thoughtful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.

Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

Comment from LovnPeace

Exceptional

Wow, hot. Well done. It sounded like a song. Very soft and romantic. It makes me hope it wasn't just a memorie in June to end there. Lovely visuals. XO Blessings B

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response and thank you for the beautiful review and precious six stars.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.
Thank you again dear friend.
Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

reply by LovnPeace on 01-Oct-2023

Godisgood. God Bless you all. XO B

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Oh my gosh. Your poem was lovely. It was written through the eyes of innocent youth but you conveyed a history of the relationship. The imagery was lovely. You described a magical moment of first love that morphed into something more. Gretchen

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Gretchen and thank you for the beautiful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.

Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

Comment from Ginda Simpson

Excellent

What gifts we have in memories shared with someone we love. We all have some memory that lingers like your night in June. I like the way reading your words brings back our own memories.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Ginda and thank you for the beautiful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.

Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

Comment from Val Crisson

Exceptional

What a stunning love poem! Love the rhyming pattern here with "June" Love the line "We may have tomorrow but...I'll always have that night in June". True love goes through many passages as we age, and somehow can get sweeter with time. Hope all is well with your husband. I send hugs and love.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Val and thank you for the beautiful review and precious six stars.
My husband is recovering nicely from his heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.
Thank you again dear friend.
Blessings to you and yours and hugs to you as well.
Hopefully, I can get back to reviewing. I saw you had a post recently and hope to read it soon. I just love your JSF poetry.
Janet

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's words are lovely as it goes back in memories of a night
in June! The author's description of this scene was filled with the beauty of nature, creativity and memories! The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork is awesome! Hi Janet, hope you are doing well.....Maria

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Maria and thank you for the beautiful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.
Thank you again my friend and I am doing so much better too.
Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

Comment from grace l kelly

Good

i love the descriptiveness of your writing. the hinting of things that are about to happen. it made me smile and think of my own memories. best wishes to you and yours

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Grace and thank you for the thoughtful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.

Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

Comment from Irene Bratton

Exceptional

Hi, Janet. This is so lovely. Memories like these are so bittersweet. Your rhymes and meter are flawless, and the presentation is beautiful. It brought tears to my eyes. Thank you for sharing, and I hope you enjoy the rest of your week with many blessings. Well done!

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Irene and thank you for the beautiful review and precious six stars.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.
Thank you again my friend.
Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

reply by Irene Bratton on 30-Sep-2023

That's all wonderful news, Janet. I'm so happy to hear it.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Janet,
This is a smoothy flowing abcb love poem about a memory of a first love and maybe the first time making love with someone.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023

So sorry for this late response Joan and thank you for the beautiful review.
My husband is recovering nicely from heart surgery so hopefully we have many more tomorrows.
Grandson's brain surgery while he was traveling in Taiwan was also very successful and he is back home with family.
Everyday is a gift and we feel His blessings everyday.
Thank you again my friend.
Blessings to you and yours.
Janet

reply by dragonpoet on 01-Oct-2023

Hi Janet,
No apology necessary with all that going on. I am glad everything turned out well.
You're welcome
Joan