Revival
The Fabulous Free Versers Club. Topic- dust38 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
A fantastic poem truly well done by a very challenged hand and quality work as I come to expect from you. I see, no issues with grammar or esthetics. This is an excellently written poem. And there's only one thing that can be done about such a poem as this! Hope your night is great!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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A fantastic poem truly well done by a very challenged hand and quality work as I come to expect from you. I see, no issues with grammar or esthetics. This is an excellently written poem. And there's only one thing that can be done about such a poem as this! Hope your night is great!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Lea thank you so much!!!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Ah ha, I love this poem. It reminds me I ought to get back to practicing piano. Had no argument with any stanza but did stumble over a single word:
potentials
I think it would sound better as potential.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Ah ha, I love this poem. It reminds me I ought to get back to practicing piano. Had no argument with any stanza but did stumble over a single word:
potentials
I think it would sound better as potential.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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I appreciate the suggestion and agree! I made that edit- thanks so much!
Comment from royowen
Back in my performing days, I couldn't stop writing songs, so instrumentally I was always playing, I still lead worship in kid's church, but only once every three weeks, so this appealed to me naturally, I love this very much, it was reflective, poignant and skilfully written, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Back in my performing days, I couldn't stop writing songs, so instrumentally I was always playing, I still lead worship in kid's church, but only once every three weeks, so this appealed to me naturally, I love this very much, it was reflective, poignant and skilfully written, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Roy! Xo
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Well done
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jessica,
This is a good free verse answering the club challenge. It is sad when an instrument is neglected for any reason. It is good personification with the single word line gerunds. I would think a piano with so much dust on it would need to be tuned before anything played on it would sound good.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
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Hi Jessica,
This is a good free verse answering the club challenge. It is sad when an instrument is neglected for any reason. It is good personification with the single word line gerunds. I would think a piano with so much dust on it would need to be tuned before anything played on it would sound good.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
Oh, if only I could write free verse as good as you. I'm all over the place and have to stick in some sort of rhyme. I loved the way each of your stanzas paved the way for, and smoothly flowed into the following stanza.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Oh, if only I could write free verse as good as you. I'm all over the place and have to stick in some sort of rhyme. I loved the way each of your stanzas paved the way for, and smoothly flowed into the following stanza.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim! Means a lot to me!
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And your writing means a lot to me!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great poem post for the contest.The free verse is not forced and flows well. I wish i could play piano
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Great poem post for the contest.The free verse is not forced and flows well. I wish i could play piano
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Gypsy!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think this is one of your best writing that I've read. Thank you for sharing this free verse contest entry with us. I really enjoyed reading it. This poem was filled with emotion.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I think this is one of your best writing that I've read. Thank you for sharing this free verse contest entry with us. I really enjoyed reading it. This poem was filled with emotion.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Barbara!!
Xo
Comment from Lisasview
Hi Jessica,
As I play piano I was immediately drawn to the piano image....and the words.
I really love this poem of yours....so clever...to write about dust.
Good luck with your club entry.
Lisa
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Hi Jessica,
As I play piano I was immediately drawn to the piano image....and the words.
I really love this poem of yours....so clever...to write about dust.
Good luck with your club entry.
Lisa
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Lisa. That means a lot!!
Comment from June Sargent
I enjoyed this beautiful trip down memory lane, following a trail of dust. Often perceived as a nuisance, dust can actually be a protective covering of memories that can comfort and inspire us to make new memories. I loved this response to the club challenge. Well done!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I enjoyed this beautiful trip down memory lane, following a trail of dust. Often perceived as a nuisance, dust can actually be a protective covering of memories that can comfort and inspire us to make new memories. I loved this response to the club challenge. Well done!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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June, thank you so much for your valued feedback. I?m so pleased you liked it, and understood the message I was trying to convey so well. Thank you!!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Sally Law
I love your free verse poem, Jess. We all lie in the dust until brought to life by the Creator of Life and a melody is played. That's my take on your beautifully, spiritual poem. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the challenge.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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I love your free verse poem, Jess. We all lie in the dust until brought to life by the Creator of Life and a melody is played. That's my take on your beautifully, spiritual poem. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the challenge.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much for your always perceptive reviews, Sal!
Xoxo
Jess
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Most welcome, my friend. Blessings, Sal xoxo's