Grasping the Elusive Dream
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Comment from JSD
Is there anything low key or normal in your lives? This is a fascinating continuation of your story. Well done and thank you for sharing these tales.
John x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Is there anything low key or normal in your lives? This is a fascinating continuation of your story. Well done and thank you for sharing these tales.
John x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you John. I really apprecate you reviewing this.
Beth.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
My Goodness, such activity! My head would have been spinning! I'm admiring you and Evan so much in managing this busy lifestyle. Love the humour with Connie's name. But what awful experiences for Carol! Just one of those could have had a lasting effect at her age and credit to you that it seems it didn't. There are some minor edits: the title "Experiences";first para - how he should react (no 'to'); para starting Carol did have some friends from Church.... They both wanted to go to a (college); last para The (actual) graduation; 'graduate ' has half normal sized font, half much smaller. Thoroughly enjoyable story as ever, Beth. Debbie x
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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My Goodness, such activity! My head would have been spinning! I'm admiring you and Evan so much in managing this busy lifestyle. Love the humour with Connie's name. But what awful experiences for Carol! Just one of those could have had a lasting effect at her age and credit to you that it seems it didn't. There are some minor edits: the title "Experiences";first para - how he should react (no 'to'); para starting Carol did have some friends from Church.... They both wanted to go to a (college); last para The (actual) graduation; 'graduate ' has half normal sized font, half much smaller. Thoroughly enjoyable story as ever, Beth. Debbie x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you Debbie I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for pointing out the spags. I had corrected some of the already.
Beth
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In title experience is misspelled.
Seems the four of them were beginning to become their own selfs.
Church does not need to be capitalized.
Appears Carol experienced several traumatic situations.
actually should be actual.
graduate should be graduates.
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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In title experience is misspelled.
Seems the four of them were beginning to become their own selfs.
Church does not need to be capitalized.
Appears Carol experienced several traumatic situations.
actually should be actual.
graduate should be graduates.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023
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Thank you Brett. I really appreciate you good eye for finding the spags.
Beth
