Finding Annie
A little girl lost31 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
There would have been no better way to tell this story than through the eyes of the fetus. It was a bit dark, and the ending set me back.
I love pieces away from the norm and out of the box, Mary. Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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There would have been no better way to tell this story than through the eyes of the fetus. It was a bit dark, and the ending set me back.
I love pieces away from the norm and out of the box, Mary. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you John. I appreciate your review and kindness.
I am truly appreciate the six stars.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment from lyenochka
That's heartbreaking to think about the double loss of your mother and also a baby sister you never got to meet. So what permission did your father give to the doctors? Permission to do experiments on the newborn? When I had my babies, I was not asked for permission but found out later that they took the placenta to harvest for cells and research.
I like how you took your child's imagination to make this story. It's those stories we tell ourselves in our youth that remain with us.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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That's heartbreaking to think about the double loss of your mother and also a baby sister you never got to meet. So what permission did your father give to the doctors? Permission to do experiments on the newborn? When I had my babies, I was not asked for permission but found out later that they took the placenta to harvest for cells and research.
I like how you took your child's imagination to make this story. It's those stories we tell ourselves in our youth that remain with us.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Helen, for your review and kind words. I am honored by the six stars.
The baby was stillborn as my mother had a massive stroke from eclampsia. The doctors told Dad they wanted to find out how the baby died. To me, I think that it would be obvious it would be a lack of oxygen. I do not know if I am using the reasoning of the present.
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I'm so sad that you lost your mom when you were so young. I do like your imagination. 💖
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a poignant, dark and moving story! By hearing a story incomprehensible to a child and then having this surreal dream must be so disturbing if not harrowing and I'm relieved it's only fiction. To contain such an emotive piece of prose in such a short form has strong impact on the reader. So many layers here of trauma and heartache. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This is such a poignant, dark and moving story! By hearing a story incomprehensible to a child and then having this surreal dream must be so disturbing if not harrowing and I'm relieved it's only fiction. To contain such an emotive piece of prose in such a short form has strong impact on the reader. So many layers here of trauma and heartache. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Debbie. I appreciate your review and that you found the story moving. Thank you for your kindness.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment from royowen
How terrible for you Mary. I like the way you take the story as if the baby is talking, and how awful for your dad. I don't know how gopher put up with it my friend, this is beautifully written my friend, most sympathetic, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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How terrible for you Mary. I like the way you take the story as if the baby is talking, and how awful for your dad. I don't know how gopher put up with it my friend, this is beautifully written my friend, most sympathetic, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Roy for your kindness and review. I appreciate it.
Blessings,
Mary
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a deeply moving and also sad write Mary, imagined or not, it is food for thought and we never know someone else's suffering, a fine post Mary, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This is a deeply moving and also sad write Mary, imagined or not, it is food for thought and we never know someone else's suffering, a fine post Mary, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Dolly, I truly appreciate your review and your thoughtfulness.
Mary
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You are most welcome Mary x x x
Comment from w.j.debi
Poor little Annie. She never had the chance to live her life. The story is well told and the author notes make this a poignant story. She would probably have preferred to be with her mother. Your personification of Annie watching from her jar is heart-tugging.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Poor little Annie. She never had the chance to live her life. The story is well told and the author notes make this a poignant story. She would probably have preferred to be with her mother. Your personification of Annie watching from her jar is heart-tugging.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your review and for your empathy towards a little girl who never had a chance to life.
I appreciate it
Mary
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Finding Annie, starts us off a bit unsteady as to Annie;s condition. The situation gets scary as we are left to think she is almost a prisoner in her apartment. Then the horrific imagined end of being made a specimen is both bizarre and a bit deflating for me.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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This story, Finding Annie, starts us off a bit unsteady as to Annie;s condition. The situation gets scary as we are left to think she is almost a prisoner in her apartment. Then the horrific imagined end of being made a specimen is both bizarre and a bit deflating for me.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you Bill
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Thinking of you dearly at this moment. It was horrible to think of a child being locked in behind a window then it got worse because it was actually a loss in your life. Thank you for being vulnerable to share this story.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thinking of you dearly at this moment. It was horrible to think of a child being locked in behind a window then it got worse because it was actually a loss in your life. Thank you for being vulnerable to share this story.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you Liz. I appreciate your review and kind words.
Best wishes,
Mary
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Comment from kiwisteveh
A heartbreaking and poignant story and a dark secret in the family.
I would like to say that part of your notes does not make it immediately clear what the doctors were asking and their precise reasons. Of course that does not affect in any way the power of the story itself.
Strong stuff.
Steve
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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A heartbreaking and poignant story and a dark secret in the family.
I would like to say that part of your notes does not make it immediately clear what the doctors were asking and their precise reasons. Of course that does not affect in any way the power of the story itself.
Strong stuff.
Steve
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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They wanted the baby to see what killed her. It most likely was lack of oxygen. I think that would have been obvious to them since the mother died. My own thoughts today are that they did not get many full term babies for medical research and Harvard Medical School was close by.
Thank you for your kind review. I am truly honored with the six stars. I appreciate it.
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Thank you. What was not clear was the sequence of events. From what you say it seems your Mum died first and then they delivered the baby stillborn. The pronouns she/her may be what confused me since they could apply to baby or mother. For one dreadful moment I thought they had sacrificed the baby to find out what had killed the mother.
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I see your point.
The massive stroke killed Ma almost immediately, which would leave only minutes to save the baby. It was too late.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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Am I a chapter behind. I see where the wife died but what put her into a vegetative state? And then, how did the baby die? Was she a fetus? The piece itself flowed with no grammatical challenges.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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M V
Am I a chapter behind. I see where the wife died but what put her into a vegetative state? And then, how did the baby die? Was she a fetus? The piece itself flowed with no grammatical challenges.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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My mom was 9 months pregnant. She died of eclampsia. This means pregnancy-related high blood pressure. The baby most likely died from a lack of oxygen. It caused a massive stroke and Ma only lived a few hours. The doctors put her in an iron lung to try and save the baby. Sadly, she was warned by her doctor two weeks before, he wanted to put her in the hospital but she refused because of us and being able to afford it.
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Now I understand
Sad story