The Aspen Grove Murders
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. I also want to thank you for sharing Anne Murray with us. I love that song. There is so much love going on in this story. I really enjoy reading.
The besotted man continued, undaunted. (comma after 'undaunted')
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. I also want to thank you for sharing Anne Murray with us. I love that song. There is so much love going on in this story. I really enjoy reading.
The besotted man continued, undaunted. (comma after 'undaunted')
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Dear Barbara, thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter. It means so much to me. Sending my very best to you as always, Sally. XOs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Another good chapter I love the sweet ending with the dance and I enjoyed your dialogue throughout again, especially:
Fitzgerald Elling did not go quietly from the courtroom, hurling graphic threats at his attorney in parting. "This was a circus sideshow, Kenny! You're fired!"
"No, you're fired!" snapped Farnsworth. "Victoria came back from the dead and told on you!"
You truly have a gift for dialogue!
I'm attempting to finish a first chapter of a non fiction book about being the second of identical twins. I hope to be done in ten days and I would appreciate if you could review a paragraph or two before I post it. I can share it though a message. I've never written non fiction OR a chapter book. eek
Have a good day!
Alex xx :))
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Another good chapter I love the sweet ending with the dance and I enjoyed your dialogue throughout again, especially:
Fitzgerald Elling did not go quietly from the courtroom, hurling graphic threats at his attorney in parting. "This was a circus sideshow, Kenny! You're fired!"
"No, you're fired!" snapped Farnsworth. "Victoria came back from the dead and told on you!"
You truly have a gift for dialogue!
I'm attempting to finish a first chapter of a non fiction book about being the second of identical twins. I hope to be done in ten days and I would appreciate if you could review a paragraph or two before I post it. I can share it though a message. I've never written non fiction OR a chapter book. eek
Have a good day!
Alex xx :))
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the lovely review and kind stars, Alex. I'd be glad to look at your sampling. Send it to me by private mail on FanStory.
Blessings abundant,
Sal XOs
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Story continues to fascinate. I usually don't jump in unless I see somewhere. Can help.
I would suggest watching those pesky contractions in dialogue. You have some 'I will / It is/ and we are in the dialogue. People nearly always speak in contractions. I had much trouble with this myself.
Regardless, great read, my friend. Bless you!
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Story continues to fascinate. I usually don't jump in unless I see somewhere. Can help.
I would suggest watching those pesky contractions in dialogue. You have some 'I will / It is/ and we are in the dialogue. People nearly always speak in contractions. I had much trouble with this myself.
Regardless, great read, my friend. Bless you!
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thank, Douglas. I appreciate the comments and five star rating. I lived with my European grandparents for many years and write and speak using less contractions because they did, I suppose. I also say, "towards" instead of toward, and "go round" instead of around, and "pull the door to" instead of shut the door. Thankfully, my copy editor gets me.
I tend to use both throughout my writing because it's me. I'm a stickler on being true to myself. It serves me well overall.
Thank you, again. I appreciate you so much!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :))
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Makes sense. I know the English rarely write contractions. Regardless, a great read!
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Shame on you for making me cry right off the bat. You are making me like Farnsworth. Thus meaning there is some good in everyone. But now I can hardly see thru my tears. I just love a redeemed character and this one I never expected, but then I didn't expect to love Simon either. FEE eh', doubt that could ever happen. Then I just about stop crying and we get to go to France. Yay, except you make me cry again with the telegram. So I expect we will be seeing him in Aspen Grove soon. And I just can't be around Simon and Candace without total joy for them and the baby. I absolutely love that Hank and Betty are together and so in love. And that they love to dance, just like a couple couples I know. Awesome chapter. For sure without a doubt, my favorite so far!! ð???.. Thank you. I love this one most of all and for sure most of my tears still coming are happy ones.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Shame on you for making me cry right off the bat. You are making me like Farnsworth. Thus meaning there is some good in everyone. But now I can hardly see thru my tears. I just love a redeemed character and this one I never expected, but then I didn't expect to love Simon either. FEE eh', doubt that could ever happen. Then I just about stop crying and we get to go to France. Yay, except you make me cry again with the telegram. So I expect we will be seeing him in Aspen Grove soon. And I just can't be around Simon and Candace without total joy for them and the baby. I absolutely love that Hank and Betty are together and so in love. And that they love to dance, just like a couple couples I know. Awesome chapter. For sure without a doubt, my favorite so far!! ð???.. Thank you. I love this one most of all and for sure most of my tears still coming are happy ones.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Dearest Debi, thank you so much for the beautiful review, beautiful friend. Thank you, I am always so touched by your reviews and kindness to me. So glad you?re enjoying my book and this chapter in particular. It means the world to me to have you close.
Sending all my very best to you and yours as always,
The Blind Detective, A.K.A . BBB XOs