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Love and Loss

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NaPoWriMo April Poetry Contest

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Comment from LisaMay
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Your words contain very wise counsel. Holding onto a grudge or negative feelings towards someone is damaging to one's own ability to enjoy life. Better to 'clear the weeds' and look ahead than lingering on past hurts.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Well said! Thanks so much!
Comment from Raul1
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You are the frontrunner towards winning the contest. Good for you and way to go. Excellent work! No mistakes found. It's beautifully written. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Raul!
Comment from Wendy G
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A great philosophy of life and living. We do not know our allocated time on earth, and need to appreciate and value each day. Forgiveness is liberating. Well done. Best wishes for your entry in this contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Wendy! Well said.
Comment from w.j.debi
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What excellent advice. We all need to live by it, but it does seem to be harder to do than it sounds. We never know when that "too late" will become reality so now is the time to follow your wise words.
Perfect syllable count for the contest. Nice internal rhyme with 'forgive' and 'live'.
Good luck.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Debi!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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If we forgive ourselves it will go a long way to forgive others and then we can move on and enjoy life, a poignant write for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you Dolly! <3
Comment from Mario PIERRE
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Very beautifully said. It captures the essence of a godly living and a kind soul. God asks us to forgive because He forgave us first.
Very well written. Good luck with the contest!!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much, Mario!!
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You have used your few syllables well with a good topic.
-Good description, internal rhyme, and end rhyme.
-That is pretty impressive, along with a very good message.
-An excellent entry; good luck!

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you, Pam! I appreciate your feedback.
    <3
reply by Pam (respa) on 29-Apr-2023
    You are very welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This eight-word poem, While You Can, has the proper formatting and renders good advice that has been proven down through time Don't waste time on the past.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Here, here. Thanks Bill!
Comment from Ricky1024
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This is a message and also a contest entry 2-4-2.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky

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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thank you so much!
reply by Ricky1024 on 29-Apr-2023
Comment from PoemsOfDD
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This is a good entry for the 2-8-2 poem contest. Good rhyme with wait and late. It is simple and yet has a strong message of forgiveness and living.
I did ponder the middle line though and thought to offer a suggestion - just food for thought.

Forgive and live before it is
or
Forgive and let live before it's

Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition.

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 Comment Written 29-Apr-2023


reply by the author on 29-Apr-2023
    Thanks so much! Excellent suggestions, I especially like that second one. I will consider that, thank you!