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Comment from Teri7
Wendy, This is a very well written poem about the guitar that is leaving and moving on to greater and greener pastures. Your words are very true. Our grandson is that way with musical instruments he gets usually, except the drums! (Oh my aching head). You used very good descriptive words and made the guitar almost like human. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
Wendy, This is a very well written poem about the guitar that is leaving and moving on to greater and greener pastures. Your words are very true. Our grandson is that way with musical instruments he gets usually, except the drums! (Oh my aching head). You used very good descriptive words and made the guitar almost like human. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you Teri! A super review. Yes, one of my grandsons enjoys playing drums. They need to get those electronic ones where the player wears headphones and only he can hear the music! I haven't seen you lately - I hope you are keeping well?
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed this story and the progression to happiness, the first part of it I could identify with very much and we just have to move on when each partner wants different things in life, I enjoyed your musings here Wendy, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
I enjoyed this story and the progression to happiness, the first part of it I could identify with very much and we just have to move on when each partner wants different things in life, I enjoyed your musings here Wendy, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you Dolly. Even if the "other" is a guitar, she has to move on.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice, Wendy. I wish I had not read your notes before I read your piece. It would have been a great surprise ending. I have played a number of instruments. The one that I was the best at was the Sousaphone.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
Very nice, Wendy. I wish I had not read your notes before I read your piece. It would have been a great surprise ending. I have played a number of instruments. The one that I was the best at was the Sousaphone.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Oh, no! You read the notes first! Lol. Well, that gave the game away. I was the bad guy in the story, ending by selling my guitar. Thank you very much for the six stars, very greatly appreciated. (Maybe I should delete the notes?)
Wendy
Wendy
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Don't delete the notes. They are important.
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Sousaphones are huge, but at least you can gang it around you, and don't have to hold the whole thing out in front while you play.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
So glad, that I never orphaned an instrument, though even worse is leaving a child behind, like me. Birth them, feed and change them, throw them in the air but soon thereafter it is back to reality, for some, to return to work and forget them. So clever you are WG.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
So glad, that I never orphaned an instrument, though even worse is leaving a child behind, like me. Birth them, feed and change them, throw them in the air but soon thereafter it is back to reality, for some, to return to work and forget them. So clever you are WG.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you Tom. Super review. I was the bad guy in the story, finally selling my guitar.
WG
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, I'm Leaving, strung me along until I realized the voice was other than a person. Then I only needed to strum along until it was revealed. Funny.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
This story, I'm Leaving, strung me along until I realized the voice was other than a person. Then I only needed to strum along until it was revealed. Funny.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Lol. Thank you Bill! Glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Julie Lau
Wooo! You had me going for a while there, Wendy. Your build-up was very clever, not revealing the unexpected truth until the very end. Well done, and as skilfully written as always. Cheers, Julie
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
Wooo! You had me going for a while there, Wendy. Your build-up was very clever, not revealing the unexpected truth until the very end. Well done, and as skilfully written as always. Cheers, Julie
Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thanks Julie for a super review. I am glad you were taken in, right through the story.
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nice writing.
'and I couldn't do it on my own.' - Well, I guess not!
I re-read it, knowing the story secret - it totally works.
Clever, picturing the bed (with the guitar barely in the photo).
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
Very nice writing.
'and I couldn't do it on my own.' - Well, I guess not!
I re-read it, knowing the story secret - it totally works.
Clever, picturing the bed (with the guitar barely in the photo).
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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Thank you very much Wayne. It took me a while to find that photo!
A lovely review, appreciated always.
Wendy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I love these short and moving pieces of fiction. The emotions expressed of becoming invisible and untouched in an aging relationship resonate to so many of us; coercive relationships even worse. The ability to free oneself and start afresh is challenging and often extremely brave. The resolution in this story is heart-lifting and skilfully crafted into a very readable and enjoyable prose. Thanks for sharing. Do we learn more about your new starring role as a guitar? Take care, Debbie
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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
I love these short and moving pieces of fiction. The emotions expressed of becoming invisible and untouched in an aging relationship resonate to so many of us; coercive relationships even worse. The ability to free oneself and start afresh is challenging and often extremely brave. The resolution in this story is heart-lifting and skilfully crafted into a very readable and enjoyable prose. Thanks for sharing. Do we learn more about your new starring role as a guitar? Take care, Debbie
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Comment Written 19-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2023
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No sorry. I was the bad guy - not enough skill and patience to persevere - so I sold my guitar to some-one who I knew would appreciate it and use it. I am glad you saw those ever-present sad human themes. Thank you so much for a super review.
Wendy
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Thanks Wendy. A little confused there. Take care Debbie