Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "River Wild"A compilation of poems
35 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Share A Story In A Poem contest. Losing a son must be awful. I have one. Hopefully this is fiction.
The story grabbed my interest. The dialogue is believable. And the characters seem real. I would you recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Excellent entry for the Share A Story In A Poem contest. Losing a son must be awful. I have one. Hopefully this is fiction.
The story grabbed my interest. The dialogue is believable. And the characters seem real. I would you recommend it.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you yeah I am glad you liked it! This was a real happening but both my sons are alive and well grown and successful men in the world. Thank you for your insight for your review and for your always helpful comment. S I hope you have a great evening!
Comment from Spitfire
Powerful. I'm glad for the happy ending. Good choice of words to convey the danger i.e. shifting, shifting, spinning. Stanza five captures the fear and relief of the narrator.
Great ending.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Powerful. I'm glad for the happy ending. Good choice of words to convey the danger i.e. shifting, shifting, spinning. Stanza five captures the fear and relief of the narrator.
Great ending.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much again i'm humbled and privileged. For your comments and for your time like gold thank you!
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Lea,, Wow what a great story in a poem, and how it made one's heart palapte for a good ending Thankfully this was the case. What a frightening event, for you.. Just one small typo weazed 'wheezed'
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Hi Lea,, Wow what a great story in a poem, and how it made one's heart palapte for a good ending Thankfully this was the case. What a frightening event, for you.. Just one small typo weazed 'wheezed'
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 13-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2023
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Ty!! And again and reply to my message I thank you very much for your kindness and for your insight and for your great review. I hope you have enough today!
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Ty!! And again and reply to my message I thank you very much for your kindness and for your insight and for your great review. I hope you have enough today!
Comment from Debra White
Hello,
I enjoyed reading your poem and was so relieved that there was a positive outcome :)
I loved the pace of it, the urgency, the drama, the panic and emotion.
It's skilfully written and your accompanying artwork is well chosen.
Great rhyme and meter, solid imagery and tonnes of vivid description and emotive language. Effective touches of alliteration throughout.
Is it fiction or biographical? If the latter, I can only imagine the absolute horror you went through. Every parent's nightmare.
Good luck in the contest...
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Hello,
I enjoyed reading your poem and was so relieved that there was a positive outcome :)
I loved the pace of it, the urgency, the drama, the panic and emotion.
It's skilfully written and your accompanying artwork is well chosen.
Great rhyme and meter, solid imagery and tonnes of vivid description and emotive language. Effective touches of alliteration throughout.
Is it fiction or biographical? If the latter, I can only imagine the absolute horror you went through. Every parent's nightmare.
Good luck in the contest...
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you again for everything having awesome day I hope it's sunny where you're at!
Comment from shelley kaye
glad the fishing trip ended happily!
great rhyming poem to let them know how much you love them
nice.
one suggestion: maybe try a dark blue background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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glad the fishing trip ended happily!
great rhyming poem to let them know how much you love them
nice.
one suggestion: maybe try a dark blue background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you again. Shelley as always helpful suggestions and a wonderful review from you for which I am grateful! I hope you have sunshine where you are I hope you have the best of days!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
A very descriptive emotional poem. It touched me deeply, as I am a mother.i can begin to imagine the horror, follow by the joy of your son's being alive. Throughout our childrens's lives, our hearts live outside of our bodies. Excellent writing. :))
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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A very descriptive emotional poem. It touched me deeply, as I am a mother.i can begin to imagine the horror, follow by the joy of your son's being alive. Throughout our childrens's lives, our hearts live outside of our bodies. Excellent writing. :))
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you Alexandra! I'm so glad this was of interest to and thank you fir your insight! I appreciate your time and effort. I hope you have a great night!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a gripping poetic story rich in vivid adjectives pushing the suspenseful plot forward. The story begins with the adventures of two boys who encounter tragedy, and ends with the emotional agony of a mother searching for, and ultimately finding her son. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This is a gripping poetic story rich in vivid adjectives pushing the suspenseful plot forward. The story begins with the adventures of two boys who encounter tragedy, and ends with the emotional agony of a mother searching for, and ultimately finding her son. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much! So glad you liked it! Your time, kind comments and teview are completely appreciated! Thanks again and have a great day!
Comment from Paul McFarland
This poem comes across as a true event. Very good job with the rhyme. The meter could be touched up here and there, but is still not too bad. I think you are a new one for me.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This poem comes across as a true event. Very good job with the rhyme. The meter could be touched up here and there, but is still not too bad. I think you are a new one for me.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Paul! I'm glad you liked it. Yes unfortunately, these things can do happen all the time.
Thank you so much for your review and your thoughtful comments. I very much appreciate your time and effort have a great day!
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a share of story in a contest entry rich and theme an imagery.
To think two boys that will go fishing and one who will go into a distressful situation is horrible!
Good luck with your contest entry, thanks for sharing, and have a blessed day!
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This is a share of story in a contest entry rich and theme an imagery.
To think two boys that will go fishing and one who will go into a distressful situation is horrible!
Good luck with your contest entry, thanks for sharing, and have a blessed day!
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Ricky! I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for your time and for your review and kind words. I appreciate it greatly have an awesome day!
Comment from Gloria ....
I think you build suspense very well in this story poem. I was particularly gripped by the personification of the river. They can indeed take your breath away.
Just one typo here I think?
grinning water spy's (spies) the meal, oh how they have a taste for our little ones.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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I think you build suspense very well in this story poem. I was particularly gripped by the personification of the river. They can indeed take your breath away.
Just one typo here I think?
grinning water spy's (spies) the meal, oh how they have a taste for our little ones.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2023
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Thank you Gloria. I will make that change and I appreciate you taking the time for this review and for all your thoughts and kind comment I appreciate all of it! I will check out that typo and I hope you have a great evening!
