Comment from Tpa

Exceptional

This was a heart-breaking story, which I'm sure endures many families around the world. After reading this tragic story, I can only surmise you did the best you could. Your words were magnificent and I wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Thank you so much!! I greatly appreciate your kind review and generous six stars! This was a tough write for me, so your feedback means the world.
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Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

I'm betting your tears flowed when you wrote this masterpiece. The spacing adds to its impact. Your story makes all too clear the damage drugs can do to a person.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for your review and kind words. Tears did indeed flow, and your lovely review means more to me than you know. <3

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

This is a beautifully written, but sad account of a young life, ended too soon. I am so sorry you loss your little sister, but glad you had an opportunity to enjoy her good times. You have written an intriguing tribute to her with a compelling message that might help someone else. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for your lovely review and feedback. Your comment suggesting this might help someone, means the world to me.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

What a sad and tragic story you have written. Unfortunately, it plays out all over the country. Your writing is eloquent. The emotion and love for the situation and your sister shine through the words like a lighthouse beacon. Well done. Terry.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Thank you, Terry. Your words and feedback mean a great deal to me!
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

What a sad story, and waste of a young life. It would never have happened had the world managed to get rid of those that sell it, that get the innocent on drugs until they are totally dependant on it. Only 24, that is sad. I'm sorry for your loss. But you're right, the short time you had her, is worth more than not having her in your life at all. You told this sad story so well. Good luck in the contest. Sandra xx

There are very few things I'm (I'm)

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Thank you so much, Sandra. I appreciate your kind words and (I'm) catch! I've revised my silly oversight! Thank you again
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Comment from Faith Williams

Excellent

A truly heartbreaking story. You shared your pain with the readers and brought us into it with you. I think the line that stuck out to me most was,
'... every time she allowed poison to circulate and destroy all in its path.' I've heard it said that those with addiction don't just destroy their own lives, but the lives of those around them.

A couple suggestions:
'by a needles venom was all consuming' I believe it should be needle's venom
'But her intelect' 'Intellect' is spelled with two 'l'

Thank you for sharing your story though I imagine it wasn't easy for you.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Faith, thank you so much for your kind words and helpful feedback. I appreciate. Your suggestions and have implemented them. Thank you so much!

Comment from Wayne Fowler

Exceptional

Very well written. You have shown several emotions quite succinctly. Great work.
Just a minor glitch - I watched the life leave her.. An ellipses is three dots.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2023

Ah, thank you!!! I will edit that. I appreciate your feedback and kind review, Wayne. :)

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is excellent writing that touches the reader. Many can relate to Kelly's story. I worked in the addiction field for fourteen years, so Kelly's story is very familiar to me. Your writing flows smoothly and there is emotion and feelings in your words over your loss. This is a perfect entry for the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023

Thank you so much.
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Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was such a sad, touching story. I am sorry for your loss. It sounds like you lost her many times before her actual death. Thank you for sharing your story, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for your kind words.
<3

Comment from Ricky1024

Exceptional

Undeniably wanted a saddest things I've ever reviewed here on the Fanstory.
It affects me deeply because my daughter 17 become a full blown heroin addict.
Fortunately, after 2 years in prison she got pregnant.
Today she's 35 for the 14-year-old son who I adore!
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My Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
My condolences and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2023

Thank you so much for the review and stars, and so much more than that ? thank you for sharing your daughters struggle. She is my age! I was brought to tears and smiles to read she overcame her battle and is now a mother. These things happen for reasons bigger than we're meant to understand. Thank you for your heartfelt review. Wish you all the very best! <3