The Trickle
How quickly a trickle can grow.27 total reviews
Comment from Alan Tryens
I like poetry that tells a story. How a small amount of water ends up being swallowed up into the ocean. Not sure if we're suppose to interpret this as a good thing a bad thing or just an observation. Is the water a metaphor
for a person being swallowed up in a sea of humanity? The rhythm and rhyming are really good.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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I like poetry that tells a story. How a small amount of water ends up being swallowed up into the ocean. Not sure if we're suppose to interpret this as a good thing a bad thing or just an observation. Is the water a metaphor
for a person being swallowed up in a sea of humanity? The rhythm and rhyming are really good.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2023
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Alan,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Interpretation is up to the reader. Have a great day and take care.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, Barry. You could have completed the cycle.
That little drop of water
That started from some hill
And started on its journey
Then in the sea did spill
Now changes to a vapor
In strong rays from the sun
And falls again as rain
Then down that hill will run.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Nicely done, Barry. You could have completed the cycle.
That little drop of water
That started from some hill
And started on its journey
Then in the sea did spill
Now changes to a vapor
In strong rays from the sun
And falls again as rain
Then down that hill will run.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Well done Paul. Thanks for the idea. Might have to present a combo poem.
Hope all is well with you and that you have a great day,
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Beautiful.
I love the way you built the water in strength. Your choice of wording was perfect.
Like the water, it flowed nicely and has a wonderful rhythm.
I live in a valley and often watch the water collect and gather in force as it rushes down the mountain. Sometimes it is so violent it destroys. Sometimes it gently lays silt on the fields.
Thanks for the great read.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Beautiful.
I love the way you built the water in strength. Your choice of wording was perfect.
Like the water, it flowed nicely and has a wonderful rhythm.
I live in a valley and often watch the water collect and gather in force as it rushes down the mountain. Sometimes it is so violent it destroys. Sometimes it gently lays silt on the fields.
Thanks for the great read.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Rebecca,
Thanks so much for doing a review on my contest entry. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes water, the elixir of life and so important to us. Have a great day and take care. Thanks again for the six star rating.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
The rhyme and rhythm work very well to suggest the movement of the water and its growth from source to estuary! The theme seems to symbolise the flow of life itself, analogous to the human journey!
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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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The rhyme and rhythm work very well to suggest the movement of the water and its growth from source to estuary! The theme seems to symbolise the flow of life itself, analogous to the human journey!
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Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Sarah,
Thanks so much for taking the time to review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and you are correct that it symbolises the flow of life itself.
Take care and have a great day
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Best wishes!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What a delightfully penned write about he progression of continuous falling water here. Your fine rhymes and flow with a touch of magical imagination brought the scene to life here, much enjoyed Barry, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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What a delightfully penned write about he progression of continuous falling water here. Your fine rhymes and flow with a touch of magical imagination brought the scene to life here, much enjoyed Barry, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Thanks Dolly for once again taking the time to review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and you make sure you have a great day. Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I loved the journey oc this trickle as it grows, expands and makes its way to the sea.Where it
ended as a whisper - great line. Good luck in the contest, Barry
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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I loved the journey oc this trickle as it grows, expands and makes its way to the sea.Where it
ended as a whisper - great line. Good luck in the contest, Barry
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Wow, Pearl thanks for the six star rating. Always much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the poem. The journey of water is always one that has fascinated me . Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from JT traveller
Magical. Great contender for the contest. The meter and rhyme are fantastic. Your poem really tells a story and builds to a literal and metaphorical conclusion. I loved it. Jacqueline
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Magical. Great contender for the contest. The meter and rhyme are fantastic. Your poem really tells a story and builds to a literal and metaphorical conclusion. I loved it. Jacqueline
Comment Written 12-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2023
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Jacqueline,
Thanks for the six star rating. Always appreciated. I hae always been fascinated in the journey of water. Water is life. Have a great day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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I too love the water. Congratulations on your wonderful poem. Jacqueline
