Tin Stars and Yankee Gold
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Comment from BethShelby
You sure made bank robbing sound awfully easy. I enjoyed your Western story. Being from the South, I heard those carpetbaggers from the North where thieves, so I don't feel bad about Boone and Brady taking care of the people losing their farms.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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You sure made bank robbing sound awfully easy. I enjoyed your Western story. Being from the South, I heard those carpetbaggers from the North where thieves, so I don't feel bad about Boone and Brady taking care of the people losing their farms.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my book.
Comment from Candice Cermak
I really liked how the dialogue mimicked how they would have actually spoken. Also, all of the figures of speech such as "as big as a railroad tunnel" were awesome. But maybe describe the characters a little more. Other than that, I loved it!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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I really liked how the dialogue mimicked how they would have actually spoken. Also, all of the figures of speech such as "as big as a railroad tunnel" were awesome. But maybe describe the characters a little more. Other than that, I loved it!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much. Could you clarify why you only gave me four stars> I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my book.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
for anybody whut wore the grey," - a little British leakage. Most Americans know it as 'gray'. Look at your crayola box for verification. (lol)
"You know the Good Lord always provides for good folks that need it." - Odd thing for someone to say who just lost a war.
Not real comfortable about the Christian ethics.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Well written.
for anybody whut wore the grey," - a little British leakage. Most Americans know it as 'gray'. Look at your crayola box for verification. (lol)
"You know the Good Lord always provides for good folks that need it." - Odd thing for someone to say who just lost a war.
Not real comfortable about the Christian ethics.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, The rest of the book won't use Christian Ethics. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my book.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I enjoyed reading your chapter. It was very active, with an unusual bank robbery. I noticed through out your chapter that dialogue needs to be separated from each other and from paragraph. It just makes it easier to see the dialogue. You did a good job. Have a blessed Sunday. Shirley
As the pair were saddling (saddled) up, Boone asked Whipstock where the bank was located, it was in the town of Harleyburg. (Need space between)
"It's three miles down the road you come in on. But it's south and yore headed west."
"Why we headed to Harleyburg, we don't need no supplies."(Need space between)
"We're going to give the Lord a nudge to helping Mr. Whipstock."
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading your chapter. It was very active, with an unusual bank robbery. I noticed through out your chapter that dialogue needs to be separated from each other and from paragraph. It just makes it easier to see the dialogue. You did a good job. Have a blessed Sunday. Shirley
As the pair were saddling (saddled) up, Boone asked Whipstock where the bank was located, it was in the town of Harleyburg. (Need space between)
"It's three miles down the road you come in on. But it's south and yore headed west."
"Why we headed to Harleyburg, we don't need no supplies."(Need space between)
"We're going to give the Lord a nudge to helping Mr. Whipstock."
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Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much I fixed the errors. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my book.
