Football - A Novel
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Comment from nomi338
In case I did not say it earlier, I love this story. I love the way it is being told, the characters not only seem real and familiar, they seem like someone I actually know or would very much like to know. To me, that is powerful story telling.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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In case I did not say it earlier, I love this story. I love the way it is being told, the characters not only seem real and familiar, they seem like someone I actually know or would very much like to know. To me, that is powerful story telling.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your encouragement.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was great reading. It was like I was there with them. I do hope Katherine's results come back negative, but I've a feeling they won't. This was really good, Barbara, well done! :)) Sandra xx
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That was great reading. It was like I was there with them. I do hope Katherine's results come back negative, but I've a feeling they won't. This was really good, Barbara, well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll find out in two posts what Katherine's results are. We need to get through homecoming first.
Comment from BethShelby
I am enjoying the way this love story is going. I am concerned about the results of Katherines tests and how that might play into the story. Maybe we will know by the next chapter. This is still a favorite book for me because it feels so true to life.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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I am enjoying the way this love story is going. I am concerned about the results of Katherines tests and how that might play into the story. Maybe we will know by the next chapter. This is still a favorite book for me because it feels so true to life.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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It will be two posts before we find out about Katherine's tests. We need to get through the Homecoming dance first. LOL
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Barbara,I so hope nothing is wrong with her. She won't confide in Gabriel but as he's not stupid he knows something is up. But Katherine is not giving in. Well, all we can do is to wait and see. A great chapter. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Oh, Barbara,I so hope nothing is wrong with her. She won't confide in Gabriel but as he's not stupid he knows something is up. But Katherine is not giving in. Well, all we can do is to wait and see. A great chapter. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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What is going on with come in I think two posts. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Another good chapter, Barbara. Things are moving along nicely in the relationship between Gabriel and Katherine, and the boys. It will be interesting to see how the dance goes, and what the results of Katherine's biopsy will be.
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Another good chapter, Barbara. Things are moving along nicely in the relationship between Gabriel and Katherine, and the boys. It will be interesting to see how the dance goes, and what the results of Katherine's biopsy will be.
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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The Homecoming dance is up next. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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I figured that. :) You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really good writing so far! I found the dialog to be particularly believable and flowed quite naturally!
My only comment is that there are a few time I was distracted by seeing the same unique word/phrase used more than once in close proximity.
For example, "shenanigans" it's a good word but used twice only a few paragraphs apart it looses it's punch.
Similarly in P26/27 the phrase "yelling at Bill" was used twice in sequential paragraphs.
Other than that I really enjoyed the chapter and look forward to reading more of your book!
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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Really good writing so far! I found the dialog to be particularly believable and flowed quite naturally!
My only comment is that there are a few time I was distracted by seeing the same unique word/phrase used more than once in close proximity.
For example, "shenanigans" it's a good word but used twice only a few paragraphs apart it looses it's punch.
Similarly in P26/27 the phrase "yelling at Bill" was used twice in sequential paragraphs.
Other than that I really enjoyed the chapter and look forward to reading more of your book!
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Comment Written 09-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2022
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I will check those two areas out. I can promise shenanigans is used only twice in the entire 100,000 words. LOL Thank you for the kind review.